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Night lay in deep, mournful silence,
Quiet without life’s sweet presence.
Shadows moved brutally monstrous.
Arrows of fear dashed horrendous.

Soon darkness from the earth moved out.
Moon went to its secret hide out.
Sun came on his diurnal shift.
Fun it was to watch snow clouds drift.

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Andrea Dietrich

February 24, 2025 at 1:26 PM

I really like this. Another contest not judged yet?

Jay Narain

February 10, 2025 at 11:05 AM

Great write. Nice poem.

Sara Kendrick

February 10, 2025 at 4:22 AM

Ahh!! Sounds like a precious moment or two in time to enjoy. I am glad I chose it to read today. Reads like a good contender for a contest to me. Way to go. Sara K

Ink Empress

February 10, 2025 at 3:29 AM

Love love this! Dear sweet valsa! You are a natural with rhymes and how youv painted imagery in such a picturesque manner is truly impressive! I love so many lines in this and the flow of your word weaving too. Especially love the way you’ve ended with “Moon went to its secret hide out. Sun came on his diurnal shift. Fun it was to watch snow clouds drift.” So dreamy! And it is soul warming to witness yes. And to read this too. A FAVE! Sending you light always