Transient

Like a transient thought You entered my dialogue Seeking to become Discourse of my mind Confusing my words You tampered response Bemusing my mood Feigning what love was Until reality grasped A fraudulent trespass Holding firmly at bay Faux vision of romance Yet, our rendezvous Was willingly allowed-- Lascivious to assuage Exotic wish of the heart December 24, 2018 Placed first in standard contest #175 by Brian Strand

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Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 4/10/2019 12:07:00 PM

Vijay, I went back a bit - love this poem - so glad you got a win because it won my heart and i had to fave it! Poetry hugs, Jennifer

Brandy Nicole

Date: 2/11/2019 10:48:00 PM

Yes, love can create many moments indeed. Many moods. Some are felt and understood- while others leave the mind and heart searching. Your thoughts tangle around each other- holding a beautiful mood. Congratulations Vijay, on this win. ~ Brandy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/11/2019 7:56:00 PM

Transient is such a good word for this kind of thing. I really enjoyed this one, Vijay.

Vladislav Raven

Date: 12/31/2018 10:08:00 AM

Hi Vijay, another song to touch the heart. The rhythm flows as we ponder your musings. Loved the content of the write my friend. Have a very happy New Year. Your friend always....Mike.

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 12/29/2018 2:48:00 AM

I like that poem. It takes responsibility without blame ... Kind wishes, Kai

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/30/2018 7:15:00 AM

Thank you Kai.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/26/2018 8:57:00 AM

A great musing of the mind. We’ve entered in to discover the maze of thought — open and wild. Thank you for the lovely comment on my poem <3

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/26/2018 3:32:00 PM

Thank you Kim.

Silent One

Date: 12/26/2018 7:54:00 AM

What a transient thought.. So romantic.. nice flow as always..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/26/2018 3:32:00 PM

Thank you Silent One.

Eve Roper

Date: 12/25/2018 5:11:00 PM

Very romantic and very well said, Vijay. Thank you for stopping by my Christmas card to all the friends. Hope this season sees you into a path of joy and many more words of blessed wisdom.. Hugs to you my friend

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/26/2018 7:31:00 AM

Thank you Eve. Best wishes to you for the new year.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/25/2018 1:38:00 PM

i like the tone of this splendid write, viyay; very enigmatic... another gem fro you... i had a fine christmas; hope you are swinging on!..huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/25/2018 3:02:00 PM

Enjoying the holidays..thanks for your visit and comments, nette. Glad you had a wonderful Christmas.

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 12/25/2018 2:48:00 AM

No one would ever understand, one of a kind human state! Digging deep into the mind, trying to please and answer the call of the heart! Sometimes, it is confusing swaying between what is real and fake! "Transient" are these feelings.. A poet's insight of heart and mind would win the fight.. I like this type of writing that shakes the soul.. Wonderfully and profoundly conveyed! Warmest wishes. Merry Christmas dear Vijay, have a blissful time. God bless you.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/25/2018 6:58:00 AM

Merry Christmas to you Besma. Thank you for the visit, as always. Appreciate your detailed feedback. God bless you my friend.

Wren Rushing

Date: 12/24/2018 8:44:00 PM

Merry Christmas Vijay! God bless you my friend!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/25/2018 6:56:00 AM

Merry Christmas to you Wren..thanks for the visit.

Charlie Smith

Date: 12/24/2018 4:23:00 PM

Merry Christmas Vijay, peace be with you my friend...

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/24/2018 7:44:00 PM

Merry Christmas Charlie..many thanks.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/24/2018 3:07:00 PM

Well-expressed thoughts of one who sees the truth about a manipulator and is breaking free! Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/24/2018 3:39:00 PM

Thank you Janice..appreciate the comments.

Heidi Sands

Date: 12/24/2018 2:43:00 PM

Well expressed Vijay! Happy Christmas Eve ! :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/24/2018 3:28:00 PM

Happy Christmas Eve to you as well Heidi. Thanks for the visit and your comments, as always.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 12/24/2018 2:21:00 PM

Love is complicated. In the sense that one may tangle around our emotions. Not meaning to confuse, but- perhaps they do. Sometimes, desires of the heart cannot be tamed. Your words always move me. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/24/2018 3:27:00 PM

So true--sometimes desires win..appreciate your analysis Brandy. Many thanks for your kind feedback.