Transformation

Was it illusion,was it a dream?
That Garden in moonlight , ink
Dark sky. A single cloud like a
Razor passing. Black tree stretched 
High and it’s claws scratched the
The milky way.Rectangular pond
Black as crude oil deadly still, I
Kneel and gaze deep within; like
Narcissus  enamoured and
Transformed. A door into
Summer opens, blinding light
And in one stroke, my Garden
Is no more.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Delacroix Avatar
March 17, 2010 at 10:39 PM
Interesting poem. Thought provoking and striking imagery here. Thanks for sharing, David and I wish you a Happy St. Patrick's day. Best wishes, Caroline.
Smith-Johnsen Avatar
March 16, 2010 at 4:44 AM
David, your words flow deep. Keep the creativity going! Smiles, Dane Ann
Witt-King Avatar
March 15, 2010 at 11:53 PM
Rich imagery, David, much to ponder here. Is it the Garden that is the dream? or the blinding light of Summer? Either way, it's a wonderful write. Thanks for your comment on mine.
Sweetheart Avatar
March 12, 2010 at 9:50 PM
New blog posted tonight David ..wanna do a "sweetie" a favor and leave a comment.. thankxxx if u do..luv.. "Sweetheart"
Haick Avatar
March 12, 2010 at 12:57 PM
Excellent, David...Perfect for the contest. I wish you good luck with this poem...Peace, Audrey
Dietrich Avatar
March 12, 2010 at 10:40 AM
wow, David, is this for the dream contest? This is awesome. Into favs!! (you would be a winner for sure. As for mine, sonnets don't usually do well in contests.haha, sad for me) LUv, Andrea
Sweetheart Avatar
March 12, 2010 at 7:07 AM
Whoa David ..where are we off to with this brilliant write today??? just luv it and your title is intriguing .. that first line is a question I ask myself daily... I like your new format of writing also ..unique..like u.. luv.. "Sweetheart"
Devonshire Avatar
March 12, 2010 at 5:14 AM
Awesome description of the transformation of the seasons, David. It almost seemed like the sueden onset of summer took away a welcome, somber mood. If this is for the contest, I think you'll very well with this incredible piece! Love, Carolyn
Palli Avatar
March 12, 2010 at 1:17 AM
So original! Could picture the scene.
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