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Was it illusion,was it a dream? That Garden in moonlight , ink Dark sky. A single cloud like a Razor passing. Black tree stretched High and it’s claws scratched the The milky way.Rectangular pond Black as crude oil deadly still, I Kneel and gaze deep within; like Narcissus enamoured and Transformed. A door into Summer opens, blinding light And in one stroke, my Garden Is no more.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 3/17/2010 10:39:00 PM
Interesting poem. Thought provoking and striking imagery here. Thanks for sharing, David and I wish you a Happy St. Patrick's day. Best wishes, Caroline.
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Date: 3/16/2010 4:44:00 AM
David, your words flow deep. Keep the creativity going! Smiles, Dane Ann
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Date: 3/15/2010 11:53:00 PM
Rich imagery, David, much to ponder here. Is it the Garden that is the dream? or the blinding light of Summer? Either way, it's a wonderful write. Thanks for your comment on mine.
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Date: 3/12/2010 9:50:00 PM
New blog posted tonight David ..wanna do a "sweetie" a favor and leave a comment.. thankxxx if u do..luv.. "Sweetheart"
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Date: 3/12/2010 12:57:00 PM
Excellent, David...Perfect for the contest. I wish you good luck with this poem...Peace, Audrey
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Date: 3/12/2010 10:40:00 AM
wow, David, is this for the dream contest? This is awesome. Into favs!! (you would be a winner for sure. As for mine, sonnets don't usually do well in contests.haha, sad for me) LUv, Andrea
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Date: 3/12/2010 7:07:00 AM
Whoa David ..where are we off to with this brilliant write today??? just luv it and your title is intriguing .. that first line is a question I ask myself daily... I like your new format of writing also ..unique..like u.. luv.. "Sweetheart"
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Date: 3/12/2010 5:14:00 AM
Awesome description of the transformation of the seasons, David. It almost seemed like the sueden onset of summer took away a welcome, somber mood. If this is for the contest, I think you'll very well with this incredible piece! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 3/12/2010 1:17:00 AM
So original! Could picture the scene.
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