Lewis Raynes Poet Quatrain

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Train Wreck

I fell asleep to the hum in my mind, 
The rumbling sound in my soul,
I fell asleep to the life I had lived, 
In the train with no control,

Down the hills, across the creeks, 
No plan, no rule, no aim,
I dove deeper, longer, pushing harder, 
My brilliantly rampant flame,

And, in love, I took no pictures, 
No images for the wreck I would become,
No time to stop and think of calm, 
From this train I would not jump,

With no tracks of rules for laws of love, 
I drove the train to the void,
And floated free as it plummeted down, 
And woke as my life destroyed.

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Jerry T Curtis September 5, 2018 at 8:12 PM Good job Lewis , I can relate to this

Judith S September 5, 2018 at 8:35 AM Hello Lewis! Just happened to be visiting my fav poets and found this great little piece! I hope you are in a better place than this poem indicates! Best ~ Judy Lewis Raynes September 5, 2018 at 9:08 PM Hi Judy, thank you, I'm Ok, some things have happened over the last week, very stressy stuff, but not as bad as this write makes out. thank you.

Vijay Pandit September 4, 2018 at 6:55 AM Brilliantly written, as always..one must think and ponder upon reading your poem, Lewis.

Susan Ashley September 3, 2018 at 10:45 PM Lewis, your poem is deep and emotional.. Dreams often reflect what we think and feel about the state of affairs we call our life and can lead to an epiphany to change course. Your poem, with its feeling of the building momentum of a run-away train, is brilliantly expressed. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan