Tracing His Lonely Path

Feeling awkward to ring his own doorbell
Fearing someone else has taken his place
He lingers there, standing on the dark porch 
Jealous of the solitary moth buzzing her air,

Walking away briskly, unsure what to say
If she opens the door at this midnight hour,
He retreats hastily, resuming to go nowhere.

Road he knows well, takes him to quiet beach
Where together they inflamed ardent promise
When bouncing tides had sensuous meaning.

Sights on his walk treat him like a stranger
As blooms curl up upon glancing his stare
Dissipating remnants of nocturnal fragrance.

Stars that once twinkled, now look darkened,
Air that refreshed souls now smells misty salt
As silence reigns words yearning for dialogue.

Crushed by saddened raps, he turns around
And there he sees her tracing his lonely path--
Ignoring his open arms, briskly she carries on.

June 3, 2018
Placed first in contest #525 by Brian Strand
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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George Avatar
March 3, 2022 at 8:41 AM
This is a haunting write, a little perplexing too. I thought she was chasing his trail to join him ! But ignoring his open arms she walks past him. I hoped his initial anxiety will be brushed aside with a happy ending ! But the poet in you is so realistic... Life hardly presents itself as we wish and hope ... Great write !
Nicole Avatar
December 11, 2018 at 12:58 PM
Sometimes, it just isn't meant to be. Sad in ways, but in others- it means the right one is out there waiting- simply waiting to feel the heart of the one it beats for. Your thoughts always touch me and my heart. Congratulations Vijay, on this win. ~ Brandy
Duet Avatar
December 11, 2018 at 12:15 PM
Sweet and yet sad, Vijay, and congrats on your placement in the contest.
Gauthier Avatar
December 10, 2018 at 7:53 PM
Lovely poem, Vijay. Heartfelt. Congrats on your top win.
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December 10, 2018 at 10:41 AM
Lost love surely makes it hard to find joy in life, Vijay. Even the blooms seem to be shrinking away from him. While we all like to hear happy endings, sometimes life has disappointments and the reader feels for him in that last verse when she doesn't rush into his "open arms." Congratulations on your win in Brian's contest! Hugs, Carolyn
Raven Avatar
October 31, 2018 at 6:50 AM
Hi Vijay, a poem that is beautiful in its very sadness. You create the scene with emotion and the words paint such vivid imagery. You play with the heartstrings with this write from the heart. When the heart sings with such emotion the reader feels each line read, deep within the heart. This is excellent poetry Vijay. have a wonderful Wednesday. Your friend always....Mike.
Dietrich Avatar
June 13, 2018 at 2:53 PM
Rereading this hauntingly beautiful poem, vijay. so well done.
Warrior Avatar
June 11, 2018 at 10:42 AM
Enjoyed reading my friend...great verse...have a good time off...love & light...^WW^
Andresen Avatar
June 10, 2018 at 12:31 PM
- A beautiful poem, Vijay - but a heartbreaking end - Hope all is well with you - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Swartz Avatar
June 9, 2018 at 12:49 PM
Beautiful words set in a sad surrounding Vijay. Great narrative on lost love.
Michael Avatar
June 8, 2018 at 8:54 AM
Only memories remain...All the best Vijay...Wishing you well my friend
Kannan Avatar
June 7, 2018 at 3:46 AM
Such a deep poetry yet beautifully written. Loved it. Enjoy your break and come soon.
Callus Avatar
June 5, 2018 at 3:14 PM
You write this beautiful poem with powerful emotions, Vijay. Sad, heartfelt...painfully conclusive. ~ Enjoy your break! Regards // paul
Riabi Dziri Avatar
June 5, 2018 at 5:36 AM
Standing ovation for your heart moving and gripping write. I read it in the absolute silence of souls loaded with roaring ardence.. I read it in the gracious farewell.. A brilliant write, you amazed with words and imagery! AFAV. Always a great delight to read your beauties dear Vijay. Shine wherever you set your heart.. Stay safe and blessed.
Rose  Avatar
June 4, 2018 at 3:52 PM
how sad when they walk away Vijay
Gentile Avatar
June 4, 2018 at 9:21 AM
Vijay, This is such a sad, relatable piece on human emotion, you are a master of love and romance and all of its ups and downs!!! Well Done
Warrior Avatar
June 4, 2018 at 9:05 AM
Superbly done my friend...very deep Vijay...take care my friend...love and light...^WW^
Horsman Avatar
June 4, 2018 at 7:34 AM
love the deepness of this poem Vijay..An awesome read..Hurry back..
Dietrich Avatar
June 3, 2018 at 5:39 PM
such a sad one, Vijay, eloquently executed.
Trifiatis Avatar
June 3, 2018 at 1:38 PM
Tragedy of the heart so vividly depicted my dear friend, Vijay! Excellent writing!
Smith Avatar
June 3, 2018 at 1:31 PM
So sad Vijay, hope to see you back soon...
Onclaud Avatar
June 3, 2018 at 10:50 AM
vijay, penned with such depth and melancholia... a one-sided love hurts!...huggs
Sands Avatar
June 3, 2018 at 10:06 AM
Wow Vijay! A powerful poem. Very well written. I like the 'bouncing tides'. Such a sad ending, well expressed. You will be missed. Look forward to your return! :)
May Avatar
June 3, 2018 at 8:11 AM
A devastating blow at the end, dashing any hope...Nicely penned Vijay..,best wishes
Rodrigues Avatar
June 3, 2018 at 7:07 AM
A sad write. The inner world can darken outer beauty. We have hope at the end but she still spurns him. Not knowing the background, we can only guess if he deserves it or if she is just a cold woman. Nicely done! I hope your taking off for something fun!
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