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Tracing His Lonely Path

Feeling awkward to ring his own doorbell Fearing someone else has taken his place He lingers there, standing on the dark porch Jealous of the solitary moth buzzing her air, Walking away briskly, unsure what to say If she opens the door at this midnight hour, He retreats hastily, resuming to go nowhere. Road he knows well, takes him to quiet beach Where together they inflamed ardent promise When bouncing tides had sensuous meaning. Sights on his walk treat him like a stranger As blooms curl up upon glancing his stare Dissipating remnants of nocturnal fragrance. Stars that once twinkled, now look darkened, Air that refreshed souls now smells misty salt As silence reigns words yearning for dialogue. Crushed by saddened raps, he turns around And there he sees her tracing his lonely path-- Ignoring his open arms, briskly she carries on. June 3, 2018 Placed first in contest #525 by Brian Strand

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Date: 3/3/2022 8:41:00 AM
This is a haunting write, a little perplexing too. I thought she was chasing his trail to join him ! But ignoring his open arms she walks past him. I hoped his initial anxiety will be brushed aside with a happy ending ! But the poet in you is so realistic... Life hardly presents itself as we wish and hope ... Great write !
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Date: 12/11/2018 12:58:00 PM
Sometimes, it just isn't meant to be. Sad in ways, but in others- it means the right one is out there waiting- simply waiting to feel the heart of the one it beats for. Your thoughts always touch me and my heart. Congratulations Vijay, on this win. ~ Brandy
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Date: 12/11/2018 12:15:00 PM
Sweet and yet sad, Vijay, and congrats on your placement in the contest.
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Date: 12/10/2018 7:53:00 PM
Lovely poem, Vijay. Heartfelt. Congrats on your top win.
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Date: 12/10/2018 10:41:00 AM
Lost love surely makes it hard to find joy in life, Vijay. Even the blooms seem to be shrinking away from him. While we all like to hear happy endings, sometimes life has disappointments and the reader feels for him in that last verse when she doesn't rush into his "open arms." Congratulations on your win in Brian's contest! Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 10/31/2018 6:50:00 AM
Hi Vijay, a poem that is beautiful in its very sadness. You create the scene with emotion and the words paint such vivid imagery. You play with the heartstrings with this write from the heart. When the heart sings with such emotion the reader feels each line read, deep within the heart. This is excellent poetry Vijay. have a wonderful Wednesday. Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 6/13/2018 2:53:00 PM
Rereading this hauntingly beautiful poem, vijay. so well done.
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Date: 6/11/2018 10:42:00 AM
Enjoyed reading my friend...great verse...have a good time off...love & light...^WW^
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Date: 6/10/2018 12:31:00 PM
- A beautiful poem, Vijay - but a heartbreaking end - Hope all is well with you - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/9/2018 12:49:00 PM
Beautiful words set in a sad surrounding Vijay. Great narrative on lost love.
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Date: 6/8/2018 8:54:00 AM
Only memories remain...All the best Vijay...Wishing you well my friend
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Date: 6/7/2018 3:46:00 AM
Such a deep poetry yet beautifully written. Loved it. Enjoy your break and come soon.
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Date: 6/5/2018 3:14:00 PM
You write this beautiful poem with powerful emotions, Vijay. Sad, heartfelt...painfully conclusive. ~ Enjoy your break! Regards // paul
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Date: 6/5/2018 5:36:00 AM
Standing ovation for your heart moving and gripping write. I read it in the absolute silence of souls loaded with roaring ardence.. I read it in the gracious farewell.. A brilliant write, you amazed with words and imagery! AFAV. Always a great delight to read your beauties dear Vijay. Shine wherever you set your heart.. Stay safe and blessed.
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Date: 6/4/2018 3:52:00 PM
how sad when they walk away Vijay
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Date: 6/4/2018 9:21:00 AM
Vijay, This is such a sad, relatable piece on human emotion, you are a master of love and romance and all of its ups and downs!!! Well Done
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Date: 6/4/2018 9:05:00 AM
Superbly done my friend...very deep Vijay...take care my friend...love and light...^WW^
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Date: 6/4/2018 7:34:00 AM
love the deepness of this poem Vijay..An awesome read..Hurry back..
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Date: 6/3/2018 5:39:00 PM
such a sad one, Vijay, eloquently executed.
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Date: 6/3/2018 1:38:00 PM
Tragedy of the heart so vividly depicted my dear friend, Vijay! Excellent writing!
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Date: 6/3/2018 1:31:00 PM
So sad Vijay, hope to see you back soon...
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Date: 6/3/2018 10:50:00 AM
vijay, penned with such depth and melancholia... a one-sided love hurts!...huggs
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Date: 6/3/2018 10:06:00 AM
Wow Vijay! A powerful poem. Very well written. I like the 'bouncing tides'. Such a sad ending, well expressed. You will be missed. Look forward to your return! :)
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Date: 6/3/2018 8:11:00 AM
A devastating blow at the end, dashing any hope...Nicely penned Vijay..,best wishes
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Date: 6/3/2018 7:07:00 AM
A sad write. The inner world can darken outer beauty. We have hope at the end but she still spurns him. Not knowing the background, we can only guess if he deserves it or if she is just a cold woman. Nicely done! I hope your taking off for something fun!
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