Traces of Sunlight

As I try to break through my dark cocoon,         
you outline memories I stir within   
of salty skin held in the warm breath of June,      
glazed gold by a luminous sky and ocean. 
 

You outline memories I stir within  
like sunlight tracing a wintry scape. 
Glazed gold by a luminous sky and ocean,  
I roil on your shore’s ever changing shape.    
 

Like sunlight tracing a wintry scape,  
mottled thoughts in sepia begin to clear. 
I roil on your shore’s ever changing shape  
awakened by feelings of having you near.   

 
Mottled thoughts in sepia begin to clear 
when I cling to echoes of your distant voice.    
Awakened by feelings of having you near,           
the morning fog rises and songbirds rejoice. 
 

When I cling to echoes of your distant voice, 
of salty skin held in the warm breath of June,  
the morning fog rises and songbirds rejoice   
as I try to break through my dark cocoon. 

 

 
Written for: A Rhyming Pantoum of Five Stanzas Contest
Date: 5/9/22
Sponsor: L. Milton Hankins

Copyright © | Year Posted 2022



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 6/7/2022 9:11:00 AM
Rhonda, congratulations on your win! Wonderful use of metaphor - the clearing mist of morning at the ocean - to articulate your reach for sunshine and new hope borning within you. Wonderfully written. Sending you blessings.
Login to Reply
Date: 6/6/2022 7:50:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest. "Mottled thoughts in sepia begin to clear"~love the depth of your words. :)Paulette
Login to Reply
Date: 6/4/2022 12:15:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Your "Traces of Sunlight" is a Wonderful write. Have a blessed day/weekend writing away.....................
Login to Reply
Date: 6/4/2022 8:04:00 AM
A very fine write, Rhonda. It is so deserving of notice in my Pantoum contest. I enjoyed it immensely. Congratulations on your placement!
Login to Reply
Date: 5/17/2022 3:39:00 PM
It feels as though this is coming from a dark place, but with glimmers of hope as sunshine breaks through the fog and clouds, and summer memories are kindled as winter yields to springtime renewal. I just love the lines "Mottled thoughts in sepia begin to clear when I cling to echoes of your distant voice" and the imagery of songbirds rejoicing and fog lifting. Gorgeous and profound ~ John
Login to Reply
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 5/19/2022 7:35:00 PM
Thank you, John. Yes, I am trying to keep the darkness at bay. Writing about it has helped. Rhonda xx
Date: 5/15/2022 7:50:00 AM
A fine piece Rhonda, really good imagery with you speaking from a dark place and trusting the sunlight is getting brighter for you. Blessings always, Gordon
Login to Reply
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 5/15/2022 10:55:00 AM
Thank you, Gordon, for your kindness. Yes, this is a brighter day. I have good ones and bad ones, but I'm keeping my eyes looking up. Rhonda xx
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Reflection on the Important Things

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetics
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
Store
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter