Nette Onclaud Poet Tanka

Torn Glances

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  *haiku: lady-love breaking up

      my parasol shrunk
      when it gathered black moss
      a torn canopy


         *tanka: man-in-love being rejected

            thinning moonlight stoops
            as do love’s perfume turned clay
            clutching last gazes
            of fruit’s anticipation
            now i send notes with chilled thorns





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(( for Debbie Guzzi's " Love Talks" ))

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Linda-Marie Sweetheart March 7, 2011 at 3:10 PM Ouch on those thorns Nette but a fantastic dialogue between the lovers.. good luck in the new contest my friend.. awesome as always luv..

Janice Herzog March 7, 2011 at 10:59 AM Nicely written poem. Loved it! Thanks-you for reading my poem. I'm so very glad that you liked it! Love, Janice xoxo

Sidney Beck March 7, 2011 at 9:28 AM ooooops..... this is nothing to do with TORN GLANCES....just to say no, I have not received your latest soupmail which you asked about...please resend it....regards...Syd

James Fraser March 7, 2011 at 7:48 AM This has to be on the winners podium Nette, if not I'll eat my hat. I'm just of to buy one now....:) smiles

Andrea Dietrich March 7, 2011 at 7:06 AM GREAT love talks set, Nette. I predict it will do much better than mine. haha.(I think mine is too hard for people to get) LUv, Andrea

Sara Kendrick March 7, 2011 at 6:42 AM Good luck in the contest with this very creative work..Reads like winning material to me...Thanks for stopping by and the encouraging comments..May your day be blessed with much inspiration..Sara

Charles Melody Lightning Ink March 7, 2011 at 4:06 AM Thanks for Ur comment on my poem "lightning ink", i give God the glory for i am only a lightning grace.

Tahera Mannan March 7, 2011 at 1:27 AM I so agree with you honey. A wonderful poem. All the very best.

Nette Onclaud March 7, 2011 at 1:07 AM love can also be broken, and perhaps mended over time..:)