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Torn Glances

''''''''';;;;;;'''''''''' *haiku: lady-love breaking up my parasol shrunk when it gathered black moss a torn canopy *tanka: man-in-love being rejected thinning moonlight stoops as do love’s perfume turned clay clutching last gazes of fruit’s anticipation now i send notes with chilled thorns all rights reserved © ''''''''''''''''''''''''''' (( for Debbie Guzzi's " Love Talks" ))

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Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/7/2011 3:10:00 PM

Ouch on those thorns Nette but a fantastic dialogue between the lovers.. good luck in the new contest my friend.. awesome as always luv..

Janice Herzog

Date: 3/7/2011 10:59:00 AM

Nicely written poem. Loved it! Thanks-you for reading my poem. I'm so very glad that you liked it! Love, Janice xoxo

Sidney Beck

Date: 3/7/2011 9:28:00 AM

ooooops..... this is nothing to do with TORN GLANCES....just to say no, I have not received your latest soupmail which you asked about...please resend it....regards...Syd

James Fraser

Date: 3/7/2011 7:48:00 AM

This has to be on the winners podium Nette, if not I'll eat my hat. I'm just of to buy one now....:) smiles

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2011 7:06:00 AM

GREAT love talks set, Nette. I predict it will do much better than mine. haha.(I think mine is too hard for people to get) LUv, Andrea

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/7/2011 6:42:00 AM

Good luck in the contest with this very creative work..Reads like winning material to me...Thanks for stopping by and the encouraging comments..May your day be blessed with much inspiration..Sara

Charles Melody Lightning Ink

Date: 3/7/2011 4:06:00 AM

Thanks for Ur comment on my poem "lightning ink", i give God the glory for i am only a lightning grace.

Tahera Mannan

Date: 3/7/2011 1:27:00 AM

I so agree with you honey. A wonderful poem. All the very best.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/7/2011 1:07:00 AM

love can also be broken, and perhaps mended over time..:)