Torn

It’s as predicable as the sun rising and setting
The words of weapons passing by my tongue
Perhaps its what I see in myself 
Mirrored from my past childhood of discontentment 
Although I’ve always thought I was trying in my strangest way
To wish away the demons that plagues your thinking
You must know I didn’t purposely try to bruise your heart 
What have I done to separate our bond? 
Now we thrush away the protected layers 
Leaving the raw form there in the open 
Traumatized and bleeding  
I see now the mess I’ve made; can I mend your pain?
You’re my heart my soul my purpose for living
I bear the consequences on a daily basis 
Hidden away like a restless child with torn fingernails
I dwell in the disappointment from my Mother 
Knowing all I wanted to do was be better
I’m regretful please accept my apology
I love you! 
Mom

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 12/14/2009 7:08:00 PM
What a moving poem -thank you for sharing
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Date: 9/29/2009 6:33:00 AM
so heart wrenching..did you mean to use "thrush?"perhaps "thrash"..I've written many poems about me and Mom, "Lost" and "The Maudlin Madonna"..hopefully you 2 now understand each other..BIG HUGS Light & Love
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Date: 9/26/2009 7:45:00 AM
Very nice!
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Date: 8/5/2009 11:14:00 PM
As graceful an apology, as I've every seen, Laura, good work ,Sincerely, Moses
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Date: 6/3/2009 6:30:00 AM
So many times mothers and daughters are a mirror of each other. Even though they war to win the battle of their rights they must agree to disagree and when all is said and done...forgive...this is love..great write.
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Date: 6/1/2009 5:11:00 AM
Aw, believe me how I know mothers and daughters go through their rough times. When all is said and done, the bond so beautiful and unconditional is always there and grows ever stronger. I feel you Laura. Deeply emotional. Love, Shar
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Date: 5/31/2009 11:57:00 PM
Best wishes with this one Laura.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 5/31/2009 11:12:00 AM
This is awesome poetry of sorrow and love...I can feel the pain and the need to rectify what went wrong..If you are putting this in the contest..best wishes..done really well.
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