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Torment of a Blood Moon

alone ‘neath the full moon my heart once bright with hope, now dimmed how I wished you were here with me as the moon bled with my heart shadows of past love traversed the orb ruby halo I longed to share with you watching as a shadow slid across the moon shooting star left its contrail in ebony sky smiling, I saw your heart in the scarlet moon where are you now, my love magic moments we once shared my spirits sank - torment of a blood moon *While we were watching the moon, we saw a shooting star! Co-written with a friend

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Kelly Deschler

Date: 5/10/2014 8:20:00 PM

This poem is very enchanting, yet it has a hint of sadness to it. Quite a beautiful write, Carolyn. I really enjoyed reading your winning poem! Congratulations to you!.... Thank you so much for the kind congrats on my poem. :)

Joseph May

Date: 5/10/2014 4:06:00 PM

Ah..yes..I can see the similarities with mine....wonderful write Carolyn...congrats on your win

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/8/2014 1:18:00 PM

pensive and wonderfully expressed, carolyn... sweet congrats with huggs

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 5/7/2014 9:36:00 AM

passionate lovely pen Caroline congrats on win hugs

Mark Peterson

Date: 5/7/2014 7:58:00 AM

Carolyn, this is very, very good. I love the structure—how you wove the stanzas into a seamless blend. Clever, adroit melange. And congratulations.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/7/2014 7:54:00 AM

Beautiful expressions on the red moon. Congrats on the win, carolyn

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 5/7/2014 5:03:00 AM

Lovely write Carolyn ! hearty perfect to the theme ,, congrats on great win !

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/6/2014 7:35:00 PM

How sad.....and how lovely this is! What a lovely co-write.....and so nice you had a friend to share that moment!! Congrats to you Carolyn!

Joyce Johnson

Date: 5/6/2014 7:30:00 PM

Congratulations Carolyn. Nice to see you writing and wining. Love, Joyce

Casarah Nance

Date: 5/6/2014 7:22:00 PM

aww. good stuff, well placed 2nd wtg

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 5/6/2014 7:11:00 PM

Wonderful Carolyn, so nice to see you writing again & the only one so far that realized it only happens with a full moon. Congrad's Light & Love

Paul Callus

Date: 5/6/2014 5:46:00 PM

Lovely and romantic, yet sad, Carolyn! Much enjoyed. // congrats on a fine win. // paul

John Loving Iii

Date: 4/17/2014 6:10:00 PM

i saw the blood moon that evening. i guess i can say i shared it with you old friend. but i missed the shooting star.

Stefan Maxima

Date: 4/17/2014 9:48:00 AM

Lovely write!

Debbie Duncan

Date: 4/16/2014 7:19:00 PM

Very nicely done Carol ,,,, I watched it, though I never saw a shooting star. You have a blessed Easter :)

Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 4/16/2014 1:30:00 PM

A very special piece Carolyn! faving this impeccable voice of expression!

Mel Merrill

Date: 4/15/2014 11:44:00 PM

Hi Carolyn. Wish I could have been there; I watched that awesome event alone. It was a cool moment, however, just as are your poems--real cool. I like your style and enjoy your writes. Kudos! Hope to see ya soon. Love and hugs, Mel :)

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 4/16/2014 12:46:00 PM

Mel, I wish you could have been with us too! I'll be dropping by to read your words. Blessings for a joyful Easter, Carolyn

James Marshall Goff

Date: 4/15/2014 10:32:00 PM

You two birds have your heads in the clouds! You are darling! (Can I say darling these days!?) melancholy write....but in a sweet way...and sincere....love, jimbo

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 4/16/2014 12:45:00 PM

Dear Jim, It is an honor to have someone call me "darling." You are such a wonderful friend and I hope Easter brings moments of joy to your life. Love you, dear one. Carolyn

Tim Ryerson

Date: 4/15/2014 8:44:00 PM

Favorite lines: 'as the moon bled with my heart' and 'watching as a shadow slid across the moon' I am SO glad to see you posting your poems again...Every verse is brilliant but I can't help but wonder who wrote what...Would you mind Soup or emailing me? Also my humble thanks for your kind and encouraging comments on my poems - Tim

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 4/16/2014 12:48:00 PM

Hi Tim, I wrote the verses in italics and Sandra wrote the verses in regular type. We enjoy writing together. Have a wonderful Easter! Carolyn

John Lawless

Date: 4/15/2014 8:39:00 PM

The combination is seamless. The visual and the visceral, the heart and soul, and a lonely moon.

Tim Smith

Date: 4/15/2014 6:15:00 PM

Wow..That is fantastic...You love is shining down on you....hugs Tim