Torment of a Blood Moon

alone ‘neath the full moon
my heart once bright with hope, now dimmed
how I wished you were here with me

     as the moon bled with my heart
     shadows of past love traversed the orb
     ruby halo I longed to share with you
     
watching as a shadow slid across the moon
shooting star left its contrail in ebony sky
smiling, I saw your heart in the scarlet moon

     where are you now, my love
     magic moments we once shared
     my spirits sank - torment of a blood moon     

     



*While we were watching the moon, we saw a shooting star!
Co-written with a friend
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Deschler Avatar
May 10, 2014 at 8:20 PM
This poem is very enchanting, yet it has a hint of sadness to it. Quite a beautiful write, Carolyn. I really enjoyed reading your winning poem! Congratulations to you!.... Thank you so much for the kind congrats on my poem. :)
May Avatar
May 10, 2014 at 4:06 PM
Ah..yes..I can see the similarities with mine....wonderful write Carolyn...congrats on your win
Onclaud Avatar
May 8, 2014 at 1:18 PM
pensive and wonderfully expressed, carolyn... sweet congrats with huggs
Hamilton Avatar
May 7, 2014 at 9:36 AM
passionate lovely pen Caroline congrats on win hugs
Peterson Avatar
May 7, 2014 at 7:58 AM
Carolyn, this is very, very good. I love the structure—how you wove the stanzas into a seamless blend. Clever, adroit melange. And congratulations.
Mehta Avatar
May 7, 2014 at 7:54 AM
Beautiful expressions on the red moon. Congrats on the win, carolyn
A. Sharma Avatar
May 7, 2014 at 5:03 AM
Lovely write Carolyn ! hearty perfect to the theme ,, congrats on great win !
Richards Avatar
May 6, 2014 at 7:35 PM
How sad.....and how lovely this is! What a lovely co-write.....and so nice you had a friend to share that moment!! Congrats to you Carolyn!
Johnson Avatar
May 6, 2014 at 7:30 PM
Congratulations Carolyn. Nice to see you writing and wining. Love, Joyce
Nance Avatar
May 6, 2014 at 7:22 PM
aww. good stuff, well placed 2nd wtg
Guzzi Avatar
May 6, 2014 at 7:11 PM
Wonderful Carolyn, so nice to see you writing again & the only one so far that realized it only happens with a full moon. Congrad's Light & Love
Callus Avatar
May 6, 2014 at 5:46 PM
Lovely and romantic, yet sad, Carolyn! Much enjoyed. // congrats on a fine win. // paul
Loving Iii Avatar
April 17, 2014 at 6:10 PM
i saw the blood moon that evening. i guess i can say i shared it with you old friend. but i missed the shooting star.
Maxima Avatar
April 17, 2014 at 9:48 AM
Lovely write!
Duncan Avatar
April 16, 2014 at 7:19 PM
Very nicely done Carol ,,,, I watched it, though I never saw a shooting star. You have a blessed Easter :)
O.J. Hunt Avatar
April 16, 2014 at 1:30 PM
A very special piece Carolyn! faving this impeccable voice of expression!
Merrill Avatar
April 15, 2014 at 11:44 PM
Hi Carolyn. Wish I could have been there; I watched that awesome event alone. It was a cool moment, however, just as are your poems--real cool. I like your style and enjoy your writes. Kudos! Hope to see ya soon. Love and hugs, Mel :)
Devonshire Avatar
April 16, 2014 at 12:46 PM
Mel, I wish you could have been with us too! I'll be dropping by to read your words. Blessings for a joyful Easter, Carolyn
Goff Avatar
April 15, 2014 at 10:32 PM
You two birds have your heads in the clouds! You are darling! (Can I say darling these days!?) melancholy write....but in a sweet way...and sincere....love, jimbo
Devonshire Avatar
April 16, 2014 at 12:45 PM
Dear Jim, It is an honor to have someone call me "darling." You are such a wonderful friend and I hope Easter brings moments of joy to your life. Love you, dear one. Carolyn
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April 15, 2014 at 8:44 PM
Favorite lines: 'as the moon bled with my heart' and 'watching as a shadow slid across the moon' I am SO glad to see you posting your poems again...Every verse is brilliant but I can't help but wonder who wrote what...Would you mind Soup or emailing me? Also my humble thanks for your kind and encouraging comments on my poems - Tim
Devonshire Avatar
April 16, 2014 at 12:48 PM
Hi Tim, I wrote the verses in italics and Sandra wrote the verses in regular type. We enjoy writing together. Have a wonderful Easter! Carolyn
Lawless Avatar
April 15, 2014 at 8:39 PM
The combination is seamless. The visual and the visceral, the heart and soul, and a lonely moon.
Smith Avatar
April 15, 2014 at 6:15 PM
Wow..That is fantastic...You love is shining down on you....hugs Tim
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