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The redwoods’ fairy ring, wall in a family secret Only, not all roots dig as deep… Parched, some shrivel, loosening the circlet Shush….the tallest ones whisper steep Elegance alas, the needy ones, have lost… Chafed, bitter barks scatter cones they can’t keep Raging fires sear heartwood of dearest cost Enduring burns gape trunk-wide scars… The remnant wall shrinks tauter, visible as vapored frost (10/2/20: '87 Tiara 3600 Convertible; DMS)

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Date: 10/8/2021 10:33:00 AM
Your poem presents the wildfire inferno in North America (+ world wide) with vivid, powerful words, Susan, that leave lasting images of decay. Superb! Sincerest regards, Brian
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 10/8/2021 11:44:00 AM
Thank you Brian.. best wishes to you :)
Date: 11/10/2020 10:37:00 AM
Very expressive imagery, Susan. Your poetic style is cool stroke unique. You make us see how nature speaks in panoramic wit clarity.
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 11/10/2020 11:04:00 AM
thank you, Freddie...I think your style is more so :)
Date: 10/5/2020 9:30:00 AM
Personally, I think this moment would be captured perfectly in a different form as this one has restrictions, but you still did an excellent job...
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 10/5/2020 10:35:00 AM
I understand, thank you...I need restrictions cos I tend to go on... lol :)
Date: 10/4/2020 8:09:00 PM
You captured a very poignant moment here. Atmospheric lines. Thanks for this, Susan!
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 10/4/2020 8:40:00 PM
thank you! :)
Date: 10/2/2020 7:12:00 PM
"visible as vapored frost' - how evocative and stirring, moving commentary on the wildfires~
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 10/2/2020 7:18:00 PM
thank you, Michelle :)

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