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       - Categories : Angst - childhood -death - deep - bird

- Too Young To Die, Too Sad To Live -

He was born in the year 1899
A cruel birth, pregnancy poisoning
The birth of the child became the mother's death
The father of the boy was crushed by love
... he hated and blamed the boy
He did not want to know, hear or have anything to do with the child
Timothy grew up with his old grandmother
As a baby he cries both day and night
When he got older he was a confined and sad boy
Drawing was the only thing he liked,
children express themselves through drawing
A cruel world he designed, always in black
No researchers interpreted his drawings at that time
It was cause for concern, he drew death
The personality traits were his own cruel death
Timothy concealed his pain, but for him no alternative solutions
He is already struggling with suicidal thougths
Grandmother died when he was 11 years old, life seemed so scary
Helpless and afraid he jumped into the river
two days after his grandmother's death ... a black night without moonlight
Both of them were buried on the same day and place
The grave is always guarded by a black raven












27.03.2018
Sun :) A-L Andresen :)

Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Joseph May
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5th place in the contest
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Makama Avatar
April 28, 2018 at 8:03 AM
This is lovely and incredible. Your pen overflow with creativity and wisdom. Wishing to read more of your works...
Andresen Avatar
April 28, 2018 at 12:45 PM
- Many thanks for your visit and comment, Funom :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Gauthier Avatar
April 11, 2018 at 10:23 PM
Wow, Anne-Lise. Where did this dark brewing powerhouse come from!! Awesome. Congrats on a most deserved placement.
Andresen Avatar
April 28, 2018 at 12:44 PM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, Line :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Donnelly Avatar
April 3, 2018 at 7:29 AM
A deeply, disturbing reality some actually, sadly live in which you depicted so well, Anne-Lise. Humbles one to be more grateful and compassionate, less critical. :) Congrats! ~ Artsie
Andresen Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 2:44 PM
- Thanks for great comment and congratulations, Artsie :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Gentry Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 10:50 PM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed your interpretation of this pic.
Andresen Avatar
April 2, 2018 at 5:13 AM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, Susan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Sergi Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 2:47 PM
Such intense realism in a poignant poetic style. you have evoked a sad spirit (which is great as a poet) Congratulations, Anne-Lise!
Andresen Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 2:49 PM
- Thanks for great comment and congratulations, Ralph :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Canerdy Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 11:08 AM
Fascinating, sad story. CONGRATS, Anne-Lise! Janice
Andresen Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 11:40 AM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, Janice :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Sands Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 9:21 AM
Congratulations for your win Anne-Lise. Happy Easter :)
Andresen Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 11:40 AM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, Heidi :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Pandit Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 9:04 AM
Back with congrats on your win, Anne-Lise.
Andresen Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 11:39 AM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, Vijay :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Gondolf Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 8:58 AM
Anne-Lise, a sad story depicting how cruel life and people can sometimes be. Congrats on your win. John
Andresen Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 11:38 AM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, John :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Pigeon Tart Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 8:49 AM
So dark! Chilling tale. Congratulations on your win! xomo <3
Andresen Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 11:38 AM
- Thank you for your visit and congratulations, Maureen :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Inman Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 7:21 AM
I like the title, it fits the darkness of the write well. A beautifully written tale of sadness and tragedy.
Andresen Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 8:02 AM
- Many thanks for your visit and friendly comment, James :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
May Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 6:57 AM
A poignant write Anne..Congrats on your win
Andresen Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 8:01 AM
- Thank you for my 5th place in the contest, Joseph :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Murray Avatar
March 30, 2018 at 4:35 PM
So glad to read this is not a true story, but as you say it was true for many.My heart goes out to both father and son Anne-Lise. Nature versus nurture?
Andresen Avatar
March 31, 2018 at 12:40 PM
- Many thanks for your visit and comment, Jean :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Bateman Avatar
March 30, 2018 at 4:43 AM
Hello Dear Anne-Lise, I did read this one. I think you should do very well in the contest with this entry!! WOW is the best I can say. The story-line of this dramatic verse is both powerful and sad. I read it from start to finish to absorb all aspects of the overarching metaphor of your narrative here. The last four verses of the poem cement the sadness and the theme in this reader's mind!! Outstanding!! A FAVE TOO!! I really enjoyed this write. Cheers and Best Wishes, Gary
Andresen Avatar
March 30, 2018 at 8:06 AM
- Thanks Gary, yes, it's a dark and sad poem - Glad you enjoyed it, many thanks for your time and great comment ... especially thanks for your fav. :) - Best wishes and hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Sands Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 7:29 AM
Hi Anne-Lise. You have written a sad story that really reaches the reader deeply. It is true children can express through drawing. It is heartbreaking to think of outcomes like this going on. You have described it well. I hope all is ok. Take care and good luck in the contest :)
Andresen Avatar
March 29, 2018 at 11:40 AM
- Heidi, many thanks for your visit and comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Rodrigues Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 7:26 AM
A very sad and haunting write. ...a black night without moonlight
Andresen Avatar
March 29, 2018 at 11:39 AM
- Many thanks for your visit and comment, Kim :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Trifiatis Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 7:19 AM
Devastating story expressed artfully within the perimeter of the requirements of the contest dearest, Anne-Lise! Good luck my friend! Hugs xxx
Andresen Avatar
March 29, 2018 at 11:39 AM
- Many thanks for your visit and comment, Demetrios :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Malik Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 6:52 AM
Dark an spooky :/. Great penning.
Andresen Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 7:07 AM
- Many thanks for your visit and comment, Yazmin :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Anish Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 8:40 PM
What a sad tale you tell here! Is it based on a true story? Moving..... Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Andresen Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 6:48 AM
- No, this is not based on a real story Matthew ... but certainly many such stories throughout the ages :) - Many thanks for your visit and friendly comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Wanter Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 6:41 PM
So dark and meaningful! You can write any way you choose and do it well.
Andresen Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 6:45 AM
- Yes, dark and sad Sunlite - Many thanks for your visit and friendly comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Pandit Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 5:08 PM
You captured saddened emotions in your poetic words..a touching story..best for a win, Anne-Lise.
Andresen Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 6:44 AM
- Many thanks for your visit and great comment, Vijay :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Cunningham Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 4:34 PM
A sad but brilliant verse Sunshine, in reality you hear of stories like this one. We have to count our blessings sometimes. Good luck in the contest. Tom
Andresen Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 6:43 AM
- Certainly many ... life on the dark side, Tom - I appreciate your time and comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Michael Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 3:56 PM
Life is not easy...things will go wrong...this case it's worse than the words written down... May they RIP...All the best to you Anne-Lise
Andresen Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 6:39 AM
- A sad life in loneliness, Arturo - Many thanks for your visit and nice comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Parker Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 2:52 PM
a very sad poem my poetic friend, after reading I wished I had known his last name, you made this poem seem so real...good luck
Andresen Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 6:36 AM
- Thank you very much, Frederic :) - I appreciate your time and comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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