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Too Late

Pitch black is the night there is no moon in sight while she's standing there with the sea’s tangy air silently inhaling, her raven hair cascading alone by the shore, pensive, like before. However tonight, you won't be by her side to lose yourself again in the pools of her eyes neither will you open any door to her mind as she valiantly saves what remains of her pride. You will never know how many times she has read your words she longed to hear, yet remained unsaid 'til they came too late, for she, too weary with the wait has now laid your love on the seaside catacomb's bed.
2 September 2015 Kim Patrice Nunez Trashed #2 Contest Sponsor: Broken Wings

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Date: 10/14/2015 10:08:00 PM
Hi Kim, Congrats on your trashed #2 win. SKAT <3
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Date: 10/12/2015 3:18:00 AM
Congrats on a wonderful win Kim! Wonder why this beauty got trashed in any contest?
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Date: 10/11/2015 10:31:00 PM
Congrats on your win my friend!!!
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Date: 10/11/2015 3:18:00 PM
dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 10/11/2015 3:09:00 PM
So lovely and deep, Kim. I am pleased to see you on the winner's list where it should have been the first time. Congrats! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 10/11/2015 2:45:00 PM
Congratulations on your fine win, Kim:) Always a pleasure to come back to reread a lovely poem! hugs // paul
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Date: 9/7/2015 8:45:00 PM
gosh did i see this one already? I don't think so. This is wonderful!! I love it.
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Date: 9/6/2015 2:01:00 PM
nice poem and thak you for your support and feed back on my poetry
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Date: 9/6/2015 1:17:00 PM
Damn, forgot the "Seven" again!!
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Date: 9/6/2015 1:15:00 PM
Hello, Kim. Your much welcome visit prompted a return visit from myself. I intended to pay my respects to you last week but, as usual, got side-tracked into other demands that ate into my time. I truly did enjoy this poem of yours. So much so that i can unhesitatingly award it a much deserved seven...Very nicely conceived and executed! :) john P.s I have been working on an epic poem for several months. It is now up to 35 verses, I reckon it will amount to 40 - 45 by the time it is complete!
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Date: 9/6/2015 4:50:00 AM
It is only when someone is gone that we start looking his/her presence when it is over. A very hertfelt write, Kim. 7(^_^) Noel.
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Date: 9/4/2015 5:00:00 PM
"neither will you open any door to her mind as she valiantly saves what remains of her pride."Wow...such pain-tugging lines..also those ending lines.... a sad resolve...I am impressed by this one. Got to fav this awesome piece! Always, Laura
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Date: 9/4/2015 6:54:00 AM
how lovely in it's somber feel, kim.. you make us pinoys so proud... applause and huggs
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Date: 9/4/2015 12:55:00 AM
G'day Kim... the emotion only lasts so long before time wearies the heart - thank you Kim - Lindsay
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Date: 9/3/2015 3:37:00 PM
Hey Kim, stopped by to visit with you and found this wonderful poem - for those who wait too long - you can feel the subtle sadness inside her. Well done!! Be Blessed, Neva
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Date: 9/3/2015 8:39:00 AM
I have missed you brilliant verse, my dear Kimmie... shame on me!!! Love, Santa!!! xxx
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Date: 9/3/2015 8:05:00 AM
Waiting in vain... sad that somehow such happens.. imagery and fluid flow really nice! galing!~Olive Eloisa hugsxx
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Date: 9/3/2015 7:01:00 AM
Absolutely stunning! A well deserved seven dear, Kim!
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Date: 9/3/2015 4:17:00 AM
Your descriptive depicted the vivid image within your brilliant write and makes the readers to inhaled it beautiful scent and intoxicated the their mind..... The happy moment you have shared can heal and fills your heart with bliss if he happened to come back to do the right thing...while eyes pretend that love is vanished But heart still hold the truth!..... A lovely and brilliant write KIM....stay blessed...........A.M.
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Date: 9/2/2015 10:03:00 PM
Such lovely imagery, enjoyed your write:)
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Date: 9/2/2015 7:54:00 PM
You can only wait so long until you can wait no longer. I like the use of internal rhyme in the first stanza and second to last line.
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Date: 9/2/2015 4:55:00 PM
- Lovely written, with a lot of emotion in the your lines dear Kim - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/2/2015 3:55:00 PM
A 7 rating for this beautiful yet sad poem, Kim! Waiting for undeclared words of love is heartbreaking. I love the perfect atmosphere which you ably managed to project. Hugs // paul
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Date: 9/2/2015 1:45:00 PM
You've written this with so much depth of feeling, Kim. Those last two lines are very eloquently written. Powerful write...hope you are feeling better. Hugs
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Date: 9/2/2015 12:30:00 PM
somber and beautifully expressed, kim... impressed!.. huggs
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