Tombs Deep Within

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  Precipitation continuously falls

Nary dry spot upon all the walls

Stuck inside in the dark gloom

The gramineae's glume

Untouched though.

Tombs'

Far below

Vaults deep in earth's womb

Caskets drenched may flow in flumes

Nothing can stop the rainfall or stalls

Precipitation continuously falls   

Contest: Writing Challenge-Andaree Form
Sponsor: Constance
Written: 01-22-2023

Matthew 23:27-28
New International Version
27 “Woe to you, teachers of the law and Pharisees, you hypocrites! You are like whitewashed tombs, which look beautiful on the outside but on the inside are full of the bones of the dead and everything unclean. 28 In the same way, on the outside you appear to people as righteous but on the inside you are full of hypocrisy and wickedness.

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Constance La France

Date: 2/4/2023 7:04:00 AM

Sara, nice write and pic, congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge, Andaree form, well done, Constance

Sara Kendrick
Date: 2/4/2023 7:26:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by with congratulations. Sara

Valsa George

Date: 1/28/2023 11:35:00 PM

'Stuck inside the dark gloom'- the very phrase expresses the loneliness and melancholy of one carrying tombs within. Congratulations Sara on your win.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 1/29/2023 4:17:00 AM

Valsa, Thanks for the kind and understanding comment. I appreciate you dropping by. It is always interesting to learn what a poem brings to the surface in a reader. Sara