Lucilla Carrillo Poet Free verse

To You

To You

To you my love I want to say, that I'm leaving your 
life today, with hope of forgetting you, because to
me  - you nwere never true.

It made me sad when I found out. I cried for days 
and many nights. I went outside and cried somemore,
then someone passed by and asked me - what was 
wrong?

With tears in my eyes and pain in my heart, I could not 
answer. He nod his head and and walked away and said 
that he would be back the next day.

The next day he came back and left me two verses. and I 
started to sing. The first one said - I am now leaving, the
world is yours, you are now free so let it be.

The second one said - your sweet words were nothing, but
sweet lies. What you promise me was never true - that's
the reason, I'm leaving you...

03/08/2013
Writt6en by Lucilla M. Carrillo

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Jack Jordan March 10, 2013 at 1:21 PM Well... You did the right thing by leaving (just my opinion.). I like the circular nature of the piece, or maybe it's more like a "C" shape, not quite closed? Jack

Andrea Dietrich March 9, 2013 at 10:49 AM HE sounds like a cad to accuse you in his note of those very things he was guilty of!!! Sad one, and I enjoyed the read, Lucilla. Why don't YOU try the ABC poem contest? Poets here are doing some really fun ones.

Ravi Sathasivam March 9, 2013 at 5:12 AM Very touching write. Sad also. Lovely piece of poetry. Tfs

Delysia Hendricks March 8, 2013 at 5:31 PM Awesome, Lucilla. This one left me all misty-eyed. Niiiiiiice. :)

Richard Lamoureux March 8, 2013 at 4:31 PM Very moving and sad. It is so hard to be betrayed by the one we love. Thanks for all the time you took to read and comment on my poems. Your kindness is appreciated.blessings to you as well.

Poet Destroyer A March 8, 2013 at 1:52 PM my daughter should send one of these to her x-love... a to you: 'poem... xox~PD

Poet Destroyer A March 8, 2013 at 1:51 PM wow Lucy, these are strong and sad emotions... Only you know why the song touched your soul.... sometimes strangers will pick up and say the right thing, ,, it is up to us to jump and listen to reason... and let go of what hurts us... a very good verse.. always~ LINDA

Russell Sivey March 8, 2013 at 12:26 PM This is an utterly beautiful and wondrous write my friend! Though a sad write, it is a tremendous poem, full of great emotion and grandeur! What a blessing this piece truly is Lucilla, true gorgeousness! Awesome Work!!

Debra Squyres March 8, 2013 at 12:14 PM Aweeeee... I enjoyed the read but it's just so sad !!! I too wish it is just a poem and not true. Blessings for happiness !!

Eileen Manassian March 8, 2013 at 12:08 PM This is sad in its beauty! Hope it is just a poem inspired by something that isn't true to life. Thanks for sharing!

Anne-Lise Andresen March 8, 2013 at 11:43 AM Ohhhh .... Lucilla, it is sad ....... but beautifully written!! - Want that love will last forever ..... not goodbye.......- Have a beautifully weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)