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To Suffer Quietly

Standing in the hall with his sword and his shield
Trying to recall his glory in the field
He sees that peace is not all it is said to be
And he's learning now to suffer quietly

Friendship, sweat n' blood, there was a mortal fear
It was brotherly love  and without a single tear
Oh, the angel of death  you could hear her wings
Right now there seems to be no real need for anything

I could wish nothing more vile on my closest enemy
Than to turn back, recover his tracks and to suffer quietly

Slave to the mundane such as no other animal
Deluded he lays claim to the incompatible 
Haunted by the facts, confronted in his shame
It's a  life on the run through a carnival of pain

Coerced by the wily fools that he must serve
Do harm unto your neighbor, plunder the earth
N' With no other option than to guard his patch 
And Orpheus , he gave word there's no looking back 

There is no comfort to be found in abject misery
n' Forever is a very long time to while away cowardly

I could wish nothing more vile on my closest enemy
Than to turn back, recover his tracks and to suffer quietly

Copyright © Rightly Jennings | Year Posted 2015

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Laura Breidenthal Date: 4/19/2015 4:29:00 AM "I could wish nothing more vile on my closest enemy Than to turn back, recover his tracks and to suffer quietly" ...I must quote you again... because I find this line among very others...brilliant. I am no critic, I am no professional , though I feel so much reading your work... I am very impressed. Your style stands out. Your words are both, beautiful, and intriguing. Always, Laura Login to Reply Rightly Jennings Date: 4/20/2015 4:39:00 AM Thank you Laura. I'm happy my poems work for you.

Debbie Guzzi Date: 3/27/2015 7:32:00 PM This type of rhyme is called Couplet form, very well done. The type of rhyme you are using is called slant rhyme or half rhyme VERY nice! Suggestions here would be again consider periods at the end of thoughts, and check the word THAT many time the word is not needed at all ;). Light & Love Login to Reply Rightly Jennings Date: 3/27/2015 9:31:00 PM Part 2. The word that - I dunno, it's sometimes useful when performing, catching a breath, useful for the structure of delivery. I'm almost completely ignorant of the terminology of poetry. I appreciate any tips you can give me. Thanks! Rightly Jennings Date: 3/27/2015 9:30:00 PM Hi, again. Well Y'know these here are all lyrics to my songs. I think the lyrics are composed well enough to stand without music, I think they're poems. Some of them are autobiographic, this one isn't. Sometimes the music to them is quirky n difficult to play live. Here I was venting my irritation with soldiers getting reffered to as heroes, I've known a few n I've not met one hero amongst them.