To See Him -Just Revised

To see him - just to see him -the impetus of my desire.
To gaze upon the long gold silken locks
that adorn his pefectly shaped head!

Transfixed, I watch his elegantly slender body
moving  lusciously on his dance floor,
his arm around the waspy waist of his current woman.
With vicarious pleasure, I see myself as her,
imagining the feel of his hands along my hips
as we sway to the music’s sensuous rhythm.
Oh, to be so close as to breathe the scent of his cologne,
and as the music slows . . .to savor that moment 
as he presses his cheek next to mine.
How I would exult in being that woman he is holding In his arms.

He sees me, but he looks right through me,
for I am but the lowly employee of a catering company.
The chasm between me and him is as large as an ocean.
 I imagine he sees me as a lowly gull 
hovering on the horizon of his vision
amidst the  other lowly seagulls who like me,
go back to their small houses
feeling like scavengers after their night of service, 
taking with them the leftover food he gives away to us.

I leave the opulence of his mansion, returning to my studio apartment,
knowing my revelry remains a mockery.

*Forgetting the line limit, I had removed a few lines, one containing the word "opulence" so now the word has been placed back into the poem.

Aug. 31, 2018 for John Hamilton's Eight Word Challenge-8 Poetry Contest
Words that were to be used: 1. Silken  2. Chasm 3. Exult 4. Adorn 5. Impetus 6. Mockery 7. Opulence 8. Vicarious
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Barden Avatar
September 4, 2018 at 8:53 PM
Sincere congratulations for your win in John's contest, Andrea, gorgeous write - blessings and continued success, my friend! :-) <3
Hamilton Avatar
September 4, 2018 at 2:56 PM
Thought I commented on this one, magnificent use of the words Andrea, one of my faves of this contest!
Sinha-Roy Avatar
September 4, 2018 at 12:39 AM
Congratulations, Andrea on your fine win.
May Avatar
September 3, 2018 at 6:01 PM
Congrats on your win Andrea..
Wolf Avatar
September 3, 2018 at 1:57 PM
I imagine he doesn't! Just as the lady looks beyond the limits of her social class, so does he. Great food for thought, Andrea! :) gw
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 2, 2018 at 6:50 PM
Fingers crossed for a win for you Andrea. This contest was too challenging for me as I don't have enough time. : )
Sergi Avatar
September 1, 2018 at 6:32 PM
I loved the way you coveted this scene. Congratulations!
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 1, 2018 at 5:36 PM
Thought I left a comment on this but now I don't see it?? Sometimes dreams can come true but until then dreams will do! Loved this Andrea! : )
Allison Avatar
September 1, 2018 at 3:21 PM
what an intriguing poem Andrea, you wove the words in so brilliantly:-) hugs Jan xx
Ajmal Avatar
September 1, 2018 at 3:20 PM
Such a wonderful poem this is, ah, the desire, I don't know about you but I often think myself in other people places, repeating the words they have said and often wonder, how I must have felt if insteadof them, I would have been thete but of course,at the end of the day it is only a dream, coming back to our lives happy or sad, how it is, we have to accept it, I see that it is for a competition, so I wish you best of luck in it, good luck and have a really nice day
Kiser Avatar
September 1, 2018 at 1:47 PM
" I imagine he sees me as a lowly gull hovering on the horizon of his vision amidst the other lowly seagulls who like me, go back to their small houses feeling like scavengers after their night of service, taking with them the leftover food he gives away to us." These are remarkable lines; beautifully penned.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 1, 2018 at 8:48 AM
A couple twists to this one. At first I think it a romantic dance then he’s in someone else’s arms and it’s like I am remembering the closeness of his body and smell of his cologne. Then we are reminded of the world that places us into different classes. Even when living in America most maids don’t date the “movie star” A WINNER IN MY BOOK AND A FAVE, Poetess Andrea!
Pandit Avatar
September 1, 2018 at 8:02 AM
You weaved this imagery of love and heartbreak... and seamlessly included the given words..your talent shows as your poem flows naturally..well done, Andrea.
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September 1, 2018 at 6:34 AM
"I imagine he sees me as a lowly gull hovering on the horizon of his vision amidst the other lowly seagulls who like me, go back to their small houses feeling like scavengers after their night of service, taking with them the leftover food he gives away to us." - I think we have all felt like this, Andrea, but how many of us knew how to write it? One.
Cunningham Avatar
September 1, 2018 at 2:37 AM
You wrote this well Andrea using the allocated words. Tom
Duet Avatar
August 31, 2018 at 11:31 PM
What a scene, Andrea! And, what an imagination you have. This one sure grabbed my interest. GL in the contest with this gem.
Ashley Avatar
August 31, 2018 at 10:23 PM
Oh, I was enthralled with your intriguing poem from start to finish, Andrea.. my favorite moment; 'I imagine he sees me as a lowly gull hovering on the horizon of his vision'.. Wow! I just love the emotional impact of this imagery! A superb write.. the required words melt into the beauty of your write. Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan
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