To Keep the Wolves Away

My brave son of seven is leaving!
to spar with military jaws.
And I repeat, Lycurgis taught me these three laws:
to keep the wolves away: if I say three words today,
may they be concise and may they be brief-
"Equality, austerity, and military pay." 
And stole my son at seven, a Thief.

Equality lives in every mothers' grief;
   -' my son the soldier is fit and neat.'
Austere and upright, conditioned to bow and beat.
Yet, I remember seven years ago
his curls when I bore him to breast,
and fed him into a peaceful rest.

In the dark haze before sunrise, I awake to work.
Weave my sandals tight and high on my calves;
My tunic, short and stark, unadorned and Spartan.
I draw water from the well and bake the bread in halves.
One for me and one for him, to reconcile my every sin.

D.Goodman
Laconic contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 12/19/2013 9:28:00 PM
I fear and embrace I will be writing this way once I have children as well. Great poem
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Date: 12/19/2013 10:33:00 AM
IT IS AN AWESOME POEM AND I LIKED IT.PLEASE DO COMMENT ON MINE ALSO
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Date: 12/18/2013 3:21:00 PM
I think this brilliant.. beautifully vivid imagery and even a mini a story to follow, will definitely be reading more of your stuff!
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Date: 12/18/2013 2:59:00 PM
Awesome! Relevant in many ways to any mother whose son is about to brave the world, mine leaving shortly to do just that.
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Date: 12/17/2013 2:25:00 PM
you shone on this conditioning, the versatility of a poet...reminding me of my mothers tear... well done
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Date: 12/13/2013 8:30:00 AM
Make me smile :) well, this is wonderful myth...myth... myth... approach!
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Date: 12/1/2013 3:26:00 AM
An awesome write my friend. I enjoyed reading it this afternoon. TYSM for sharing and my big hearty congratulations on your great win! love lots and biggest hugs, Leonora
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Date: 11/30/2013 9:38:00 PM
congrats for your win. this has a classic poetry feel to it.
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Date: 11/30/2013 6:24:00 PM
Very well versed, Daisy. Congrats!
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Date: 11/29/2013 11:37:00 PM
A wonderful write,kudos! I love d Spartans,d were gallant warriors in history. Welcome to poetrysoup,here u find d poetic treasures in vast quantities. Alwaz, Based oin Belief
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Date: 11/29/2013 11:44:00 AM
Astonishing in its breadth of verse, rhyme and feeling. I got lost in the words and am still trying to find my way back. High praise for your top finish.
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Daisy Goodman
Date: 11/29/2013 12:40:00 PM
Thank you! I'm the wife of a disabled Iraq veteran... this poem tried to capture what mothers and wives of soldiers endure...when they are deployed, back home, or gone. We work overtime, pray for their safety, and carry on until they return.
Date: 11/29/2013 9:09:00 AM
Creative genius!
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Daisy Goodman
Date: 11/29/2013 11:30:00 AM
Wow, thanks I really appreciate it! My first win! yay
Date: 11/29/2013 7:04:00 AM
wonderful creative work
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Daisy Goodman
Date: 11/29/2013 11:30:00 AM
Thanks so much!
Date: 11/29/2013 4:55:00 AM
Congrats on the win, Daisy
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Daisy Goodman
Date: 11/29/2013 11:30:00 AM
Thank you, really appreciate it.
Date: 11/28/2013 10:33:00 AM
Enjoyed and thinking it's deep.
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Daisy Goodman
Date: 11/28/2013 4:28:00 PM
Thank you! appreciate it!
Date: 11/27/2013 9:10:00 PM
deep thoughts to this one, i hope you have a nice thanksgiving, always, p.d.
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Daisy Goodman
Date: 11/28/2013 4:29:00 PM
Thanks, happy turkey day to you too!
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