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skidding tires-

                              crying at her funeral




Entry in the Broken Monoku contest

deathmonoku

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Carol Sunshine Brown

May 18, 2010 at 11:48 AM

Congratulations on your win in Brian's "Broken Monoku" contest Joe. May you have many more contest wins. Love, Carol

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

May 12, 2010 at 3:31 AM

Joe, Excellent writing! Congratulations on placing in Brian’s Broken Monoku contest with this wonderful line. It's easy to see why you did so well. Your creativity shines. Smiles, DAS-J

Jimmy Anderson

May 11, 2010 at 1:25 PM

COngrats on your 2nd Place win, Joe!! Very nice Monoku....later, Jimmy

Dr.Ram Mehta

May 8, 2010 at 8:13 PM

Congrats on the win

Margaret Foster

May 6, 2010 at 12:54 AM

Says it all Joe...congratulations on your success in the contest...Margaret

Andrea Dietrich

May 5, 2010 at 3:13 PM

well, looky there, Joe, Mr. Newbie, you got a number two spot!!! It all comes in due time. Congratulations to you, and thanks so much for commenting to my blog! andrea

May 5, 2010 at 8:06 AM

I really liked this poem the first time I read it. Powerful thought captured in just six words. Congratulations on placing second in Brian's contest. Enjoy your big success. Keep on writing! Karen

Joyce Johnson

May 5, 2010 at 7:57 AM

Good work. congratulations on your 2nd. Love, joyce

Carrie Richards

May 5, 2010 at 7:41 AM

One of the best for sure!! Great job, Joe!! Congratulations on your win!!! ~ Carrie

Dr.Ram Mehta

May 5, 2010 at 5:59 AM

Congrats on the win

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

May 5, 2010 at 4:58 AM

Congrats Joe on your winning poem in the Broken Monoku contest with this one I already knew from my previous read would win ... enjoy my friend ...your poetry portfolio is growing quickly with so many wins... with luv from the "Sweetheart"

Robert A. Dufresne

May 5, 2010 at 4:50 AM

A whole story in this one monoku, Joe. Congratulations to you. great job! -Robert

May 1, 2010 at 1:41 PM

Interesting analogy with a chilling message. Good luck in the contest. Enjoy your weekend. Karen

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

May 1, 2010 at 12:46 PM

Good luck Joe with this great Monoku .. I think u also need to put your initials along with the word Title in Brian's guidelines ... just a little notice for u ...some sponsors are sticklers about their guidelines and rules... luv.. from the "Sweetheart"