Tin Man

I am a tin man;
corrosion ravaged, tin man.
Staring placidly o’er countless hills
marred by desolation rills; 
unfeeling, here I fade.

Black oil hemorrhages
and I fade.

Tic-tock heart song
Tic…tic…tic...
tock.

Set aside the oil can,
oil cannot save a man
so consumed by jealousy.
What yet is there left of me?
On my lips a frozen grin 
hides the rage I feel within.
As a comfort you caress
but I am strong, so I suppress
the feeling…no more feeling.
As I fade.

In this final dusk
under sunset skies of rust
through the smothering of depression
I can’t numb this last obsession:
How did you so long disguise
all the truth behind your eyes?
Why, for years on end
as we danced, did you pretend
that this perfect masquerade
would never fade?

Oily tears, on metal cheeks,
I can’t seal up all the leaks.
My blood drains out onto the ground,
I stare and grin at the haunting sound
of dripping oil as it fills
countless desolation rills; 
and unfeeling, 
here I fade.

Black oil hemorrhages,
and I fade.

Tic…please tock do not reply;
just let me die. 

08/20/15
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Canerdy Avatar
August 26, 2016 at 8:22 AM
A 7+ for this heart-wrenching WINNING poem. Tin man--the perfect choice of "vehicle" for conveying the theme. Janice
Kimathi Avatar
August 26, 2016 at 6:26 AM
Surreal yet emotional.... Congrats for your WIN with this wonderful piece!! ;-)
Bolton Avatar
August 22, 2015 at 3:19 PM
Ahhh . . . Been there . . . There is nothing like the pain of losing someone you loved. I have finally decided that the word "love" causes more heartache and stress than any other thing in the world.
Grahamburglar Avatar
August 22, 2015 at 3:43 PM
...and yet we're told it's better to have loved and lost...which might be true, but sometimes seems doubtful when we're in the thick of the loss.
Ward Avatar
August 22, 2015 at 12:49 AM
A wonderful poem! Well done for giving it so many imaginative qualities. A happy 7 from me. Julia
Grahamburglar Avatar
August 22, 2015 at 3:41 PM
Hey Julia, I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I'm glad you enjoyed it. =)
La France Avatar
August 21, 2015 at 7:22 PM
Graham, this is an amazing write, I really like the dark feel and you have penned some great phrases, A7 and thanks for visiting my tree poem
Grahamburglar Avatar
August 21, 2015 at 7:36 PM
Thanks for stopping by to read and taking the time to comment. =)
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