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Tin Foil Hearts

On pensive planes of wraith-like existence, Are stoic shadows feigning affection; Crimson lips of withering consistence, Have lost their craze for craving confection. Tear-filling prisms tilling a rueing sphere, Pathos prowling, pity's wild and roaming; Reminisce wind-blown is tumbleweed drear, Bathos like bramble bur clings in gloaming. Tin foil hearts' echo sad droning down-beat, Rose petal ballet two rust figurines; Today's gray sleet does douse yesteryears' heat, Apathy's ennui directing the scenes... Love once aflare in fanfare marigold, Lies now a wizened weed, dried and stone cold. Susan Ashley November 2, 2017

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Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 10/3/2022 11:49:00 AM

Nicely written, a display of poetic talent.

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/3/2022 5:26:00 PM

Hi Vince, your gracious visit is appreciated as is your beautiful comment. Thank you for your kind warm-hearted words. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Ann Foster

Date: 9/23/2019 9:42:00 AM

I felt sad... it was haunting and lovely. Ann

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/24/2019 4:44:00 PM

Thank you for feeling my poem and sharing your thoughts with me, Ann. I truly appreciate your beautiful comments and your kindness. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Timothy Mcguire

Date: 10/5/2018 4:01:00 AM

I've read quiet a few of your poems and they are truly great. You are very talented.

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/6/2018 9:34:00 AM

Timothy, it's as wonderful to hear from you as it is to read your lovely and thoughtful poetry. Thank you for your heartwarming and encouraging comments. I truly appreciate your uplifting words and you inspire me to reach ever higher as I continue on this poetic journey.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Fj Thomas

Date: 12/20/2017 1:05:00 PM

You truly are a story teller Susan. You've spun this amazingly!

Susan Ashley
Date: 12/20/2017 7:19:00 PM

Thank you so much Shadow for your lovely visit and your wonderfully kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.. Warmest Holiday wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 11/29/2017 8:44:00 PM

Hello Susan i found ths poem to be sad. Have a nice evening my friend.

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/29/2017 8:54:00 PM

Good evening my dear friend Darlene. Thank you for stopping by to read my poem. Yes, this is a very sad, bittersweet poem about love that's lost it loving and lusty luster.. I appreciate your kind visit, your comment and your wonderful presence on my page is always welcome. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Line Gauthier

Date: 11/25/2017 8:04:00 AM

Beautiful imagery and rhythm. Fabulous job, Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/25/2017 1:48:00 PM

Thank you Line for your awesome comment and wonderful visit. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem! Warmest wishes ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 11/19/2017 10:07:00 AM

Well done for courageously tackling your first sonnet, Susan. Iambic pentameter does not always come easy, but you are on the right path. I love the poetic substance and the technical points which go into the expression of your thoughts. ~ Warm regards // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/19/2017 6:14:00 PM

Paul, I'm thrilled that you enjoyed my first attempt at a sonnet. My IP was wilting in this write but I was determined to refine my IP in my next few sonnets. I so appreciate your shared thoughts and your kind visit as you are always welcome on my page. Thank you Paul for your cherished comment and your friendship.. ~Susan

Gary Bateman

Date: 11/17/2017 8:16:00 AM

Hello Susan, Another wonderful sonnet here -- a true joy to read for sure!! I do enjoy very much like your well-conceived blend of words and imagery here as evident in the development of your sonnet. Another enchanting sonnet of extraordinary perfection!! A FAVE TOO!! Best Always, Gary

Gary Bateman
Date: 11/21/2017 1:14:00 PM

Hello Back Susan . . . I will most certainly stay in touch with your poetry, and will do my best to drop by as I can to take some reads. Sonnets, like many other structured and metered poems, take some definite work since not all themes are directly suited for them. You might want to try out the "Canzone" format sometime. It's the early version of the traditional English and Italian sonnets, and was originally conceived by Dante Alighieri during the 13th Century. (I've written three of them thus far, and they are posted with my other poems.) No matter what anyone tells you, just keep writing and having fun at!! Very Important!! Best Always, Gary

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/17/2017 2:16:00 PM

Good afternoon Gary. Thank you so much for your enthusiastic response to my poem. I consider it quite pleasing since I admire your poetry so much! I'm thrilled you enjoyed my poem and I thank you for your generously lovely comment and the fave. I welcome your esteemed presence on my poetry page always and your precious thoughts are always appreciated.. Warmest wishes to you.. ~Susan

Caycay Jennings

Date: 11/14/2017 4:33:00 PM

Excellent - imagery and feeling all poetically delivered. Another joy to read. Be well ... CayCay

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/15/2017 10:24:00 AM

CayCay, your appreciation and kind words are gratefully received and I thank you for your wonderful comment and for your loveliness gracing my poetry page... my warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Heidi Sands

Date: 11/12/2017 6:05:00 AM

You are very talented Susan. Great imagery in this well written sonnet :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/15/2017 10:21:00 AM

Thank you so very much Heidi for your generous compliment that put a smile upon my face and your appreciation for my poem. Your uplifting comment is so gratefully received! :) ~Susan

Bartholomew Williams

Date: 11/11/2017 9:37:00 PM

Susan, I love the imagery you used in this touching sonnet to convey the dimming of a once-glowing romance. Very well done! :) Bartholomew

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/11/2017 10:35:00 PM

Bartholomew, I read your words with such appreciation. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem and thank you for your kind visit and lovely comment. My warmest regards.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley

Date: 11/6/2017 9:22:00 AM

FIRST SONNET! And what a magnificent jewel it is.. So very deep, smooth and beautifully composed.. I am in awe of such greatness in sonnet composing my friend! A fav and thanks for the great pleasure of reading this awesome sonnet!

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/6/2017 9:03:00 PM

Robert, I so appreciate your scintillating comment. Your heartwarming words have put a smile on my face. Thank you for your lovely visit, your words of praise, for the fav - but most of all, for your treasured friendship! Hugs to you my friend :) ~Susan

Probir Gupta

Date: 11/6/2017 7:46:00 AM

Stoic shadows in a beautiful line ... Deep imagery ... Wonderful Sonnetry ...

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/6/2017 8:42:00 PM

Probir, I receive your comment with pleasure and appreciation. Your wonderful words of approval and encouragement mean so much to me. Thank you my friend, I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem! .. ~Susan

Joanna Daniel

Date: 11/6/2017 6:01:00 AM

Great sonnet with deep imagery, Susan, and wonderful use of some tough words:) you always astound:)

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/6/2017 8:39:00 PM

Jo, your comment is received with much appreciation. Thank you for your beautiful heartwarming words of encouragement and support my friend :) ~Susan

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/6/2017 12:37:00 AM

I know this is sad, but so clever, and I loved the last 2 lines.

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/6/2017 8:37:00 PM

arthur, thank you for your kind visit and wonderful comment. I so appreciate your warm words as always.. ~Susan

Bernard Chan

Date: 11/5/2017 8:09:00 PM

They have lost that loving feeling and Susan made it extra appealing! Darn, this rhyming business is tough but you made it look so easy. Love the imagery and the rhymes. And that final stanza rounds off the lovelessness lovingly. Exquisite. More please! :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/5/2017 10:07:00 PM

Bernard, your poetic comment thrills me, I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. It's always so great to receive insightful and rhyming:) words of support and encouragement from you, whose imagery and rhymes I greatly admire... Thank you for your beautiful comment and for sharing your treasured thoughts with me.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/5/2017 7:52:00 PM

Very clever alliteration, Susan. That shows you put thought into your craft! Connie says it is your first sonnet. Wow, Congratulations for that.

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/5/2017 8:13:00 PM

Thank you Andrea for your wonderful words. I always appreciate your visits and comments so much. It's my first attempt at a sonnet and I'm sure it shows... My challenge is using IP. My poem doesn't have the silky glide that your sonnets have, hopefully I'll get there someday. Thank you for your time and thoughts Andrea.. ~Susan

Bjorn Wastvedt

Date: 11/5/2017 1:31:00 PM

Love this poem and your choice of words, are you sure you not an Oxford graduate? :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/5/2017 3:54:00 PM

Lol! I like your sense of humor Bjorn :) Thank you for your very kind words and the smile your comment put on my face. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem and your visit is so appreciated. My very warmest regards.. ~Susan

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/5/2017 9:58:00 AM

This is brilliant Susan! Kudos on your first sonnet! No one would suspect! : )

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/5/2017 3:59:00 PM

Connie, thank you for your kind reassurance. Your wonderful comment means so much to me and I so appreciate your visit and your support as always. ~Susan

Judith S

Date: 11/5/2017 6:33:00 AM

Susan ... I absolutely loved this sonnet. The title is brilliant as is your writing!!! A new favorite of mine!! ~ Judy

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/5/2017 4:37:00 PM

Judith, I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for your wonderfully kind comment, your time to visit and for the fave! Much appreciation for your friendship!!

John Michaels

Date: 11/4/2017 2:28:00 PM

Some lovely imagery here, Susan. To me, this is a tale of two people (a couple, lovers, perhaps spouses), for whom the spark has sadly been extinguished, yet they're unable to break free... both trapped in a loveless marriage, maybe? Could be way off the mark! A great poem, nonetheless. All the best, John.

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/4/2017 3:41:00 PM

You, my astute friend, are very much on the mark! Thank you John for your insightful and awesome comment. I appreciate your interest, your wonderful thoughts and always, your heartwarming words of encouragement.. My very best wishes my friend! ~Susan

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/4/2017 1:08:00 AM

My pleasure Susan.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/3/2017 7:33:00 PM

Tremendous title and poem!

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/3/2017 8:02:00 PM

Thank you so much Richard for your wonderful comment. So very appreciated! .. ~Susan

John Gondolf

Date: 11/3/2017 2:30:00 PM

Susan, this is such a well written sonnet; your imagery is beautiful as always. I was surprised to hear that this was your first sonnet, you are such a gifted writer. John

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/3/2017 8:20:00 PM

John, thank your for your wonderfully encouraging and supportive words. Thank you for your warmhearted comment and compliment so generously kind. Your friendship is appreciated greatly! ~Susan

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 11/3/2017 2:25:00 PM

Superb Sonnet dearest Susan! Outstanding language use!

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/3/2017 8:01:00 PM

Demetrios, your wonderful comment is so greatly appreciated. Thank for your very kind words and thoughts.. ~Susan