Nette Onclaud Poet Kyrielle

Time's Malaise

While trail of clouds hovers around
There she lays on fevered ground,
My daughter’s eyes droop low again
As I bear witness to this strain.

No balm can aid the night’s relief
When love’s touch hides a mother’s grief,
That only prayer beads remain
As I bear witness to this strain.

Weeks pass like helpless time’s malaise
Till Marian arms send a bright lei
Reddened, reddened; cheeks flush again
As I bear witness to this strain.

Out of darkness, hope’s moments stir
Clouds echo a girlish laughter,
This healing grace I can’t contain
As I bear witness to this strain.



Helpless, A Kyrielle
(With Co Sponsor Tim Ryerson)
Cyndi Mac Millan's Contest
by nette onclaud

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Poet Destroyer A June 9, 2014 at 9:51 AM congrats nette...PD

Debbie Guzzi June 6, 2014 at 8:25 PM We can only love them! Congrad's on your topic winning! Light & Love

Sara Kendrick June 6, 2014 at 5:14 AM Emotion packed winning work...The high placement is deserving..Way to go..Congrats..Sara

Tim Ryerson June 6, 2014 at 3:55 AM Congratulations my friend! Cyndi and I both agreed that this should place very high...As I said before, you seem to move from form to form so effortlessly! - Tim

Tim Smith June 5, 2014 at 11:35 AM Stopping back with a congratulatory hug on your win nette...hugs Tim

Dr.Ram Mehta June 5, 2014 at 2:06 AM Perfect Kyrielle with apt take on the theme, congrats on a fine win, nette

Mark J. Halliday June 4, 2014 at 11:37 PM Very nicely done, a deserved win.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma June 4, 2014 at 10:21 PM Splendid work nette ! true pic of a sick child's agony n a mom's helplessnes ! congrats on top win !

Arlene Smith June 4, 2014 at 6:03 PM Nette... Dang auto correct... Sorry... Arlene..

Arlene Smith June 4, 2014 at 6:00 PM Bette, congrats on your win. Speaking as a mother who had a very sick baby, this really touches me. There is no greater feeling of helplessness... Beautiful write... Arlene..

Faye Gibson June 4, 2014 at 3:27 PM Congratulations, Nette; beautiful win.

Paul Callus June 4, 2014 at 12:26 PM Well done Nette! Sometimes it's only prayers and faith that are left to us. But these are two great weapons that know no limits! Congrats on a deserved win:) // paul

Cyndi Macmillan June 4, 2014 at 10:21 AM Congrats on your win! We were truly moved by your entry and enjoyed your perfect blend, subtly and aptly crafted, of an ecclesiastical feel (bear witness) with a modern bent (to this strain.) very of the times. Repetition in reddened, reddened... the mother's mind circling... I hope to put up a winners blog in a few days.. So well done, this. Deep and lovely.

Shadow Hamilton May 11, 2014 at 6:20 AM A poem that says so much Nette sadness despair hope and love great pen ty for visiting my page hugs

Monterey Sirak May 10, 2014 at 7:34 AM Stunning! Mothers pray, and worry, hope and plead, but never show any doubt or fear to the child. You have expressed this in a beautiful way.

Anne-Lise Andresen May 9, 2014 at 12:51 PM - So beautiful you describe this Nette! - BEAUTIFUL!! - Luck in the contest! (you win) - I wish you a nice weekend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Muhammad Safa Thajudeen May 9, 2014 at 11:00 AM Enjoyed.

David Williams May 9, 2014 at 4:12 AM Nette when you speak words like these no-one is helpless....David

Poet Tacito May 9, 2014 at 12:37 AM This hits home in many, many ways. No other can capture this like you did. Excellent job!

Jake Ponce May 8, 2014 at 8:04 PM Perfect write just in time for mother's day, Nette; For all the mother, would-be mothers and mother figures. Nobody is in pain more than a mum who can see her child suffering. Nothing is more precious for a mum than to see genuine happiness in her children.

Tim Smith May 8, 2014 at 3:10 PM This is so sad but beautiful... I cannot fathom the loss of one of my girls...hugs to you and Tim

Leon Datu May 8, 2014 at 2:12 PM The writing is phenomenal and it is superbly emotional, heart wrenching.A storybook caliber., Nette!

Eileen Manassian May 8, 2014 at 1:17 PM This is one of your best, Nette. Being a mother myself, I could feel the concern and love in every line. Very sweet and endearing!