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Time's Malaise

While trail of clouds hovers around There she lays on fevered ground, My daughter’s eyes droop low again As I bear witness to this strain. No balm can aid the night’s relief When love’s touch hides a mother’s grief, That only prayer beads remain As I bear witness to this strain. Weeks pass like helpless time’s malaise Till Marian arms send a bright lei Reddened, reddened; cheeks flush again As I bear witness to this strain. Out of darkness, hope’s moments stir Clouds echo a girlish laughter, This healing grace I can’t contain As I bear witness to this strain. Helpless, A Kyrielle (With Co Sponsor Tim Ryerson) Cyndi Mac Millan's Contest by nette onclaud

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 6/9/2014 9:51:00 AM
congrats nette...PD
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Date: 6/6/2014 8:25:00 PM
We can only love them! Congrad's on your topic winning! Light & Love
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Date: 6/6/2014 5:14:00 AM
Emotion packed winning work...The high placement is deserving..Way to go..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 6/6/2014 3:55:00 AM
Congratulations my friend! Cyndi and I both agreed that this should place very high...As I said before, you seem to move from form to form so effortlessly! - Tim
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Date: 6/5/2014 11:35:00 AM
Stopping back with a congratulatory hug on your win nette...hugs Tim
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Date: 6/5/2014 2:06:00 AM
Perfect Kyrielle with apt take on the theme, congrats on a fine win, nette
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Date: 6/4/2014 11:37:00 PM
Very nicely done, a deserved win.
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Date: 6/4/2014 10:21:00 PM
Splendid work nette ! true pic of a sick child's agony n a mom's helplessnes ! congrats on top win !
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Date: 6/4/2014 6:03:00 PM
Nette... Dang auto correct... Sorry... Arlene..
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Date: 6/4/2014 6:00:00 PM
Bette, congrats on your win. Speaking as a mother who had a very sick baby, this really touches me. There is no greater feeling of helplessness... Beautiful write... Arlene..
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Date: 6/4/2014 3:27:00 PM
Congratulations, Nette; beautiful win.
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Date: 6/4/2014 12:26:00 PM
Well done Nette! Sometimes it's only prayers and faith that are left to us. But these are two great weapons that know no limits! Congrats on a deserved win:) // paul
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Date: 6/4/2014 10:21:00 AM
Congrats on your win! We were truly moved by your entry and enjoyed your perfect blend, subtly and aptly crafted, of an ecclesiastical feel (bear witness) with a modern bent (to this strain.) very of the times. Repetition in reddened, reddened... the mother's mind circling... I hope to put up a winners blog in a few days.. So well done, this. Deep and lovely.
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Date: 5/11/2014 6:20:00 AM
A poem that says so much Nette sadness despair hope and love great pen ty for visiting my page hugs
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Date: 5/10/2014 7:34:00 AM
Stunning! Mothers pray, and worry, hope and plead, but never show any doubt or fear to the child. You have expressed this in a beautiful way.
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Date: 5/9/2014 12:51:00 PM
- So beautiful you describe this Nette! - BEAUTIFUL!! - Luck in the contest! (you win) - I wish you a nice weekend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/9/2014 11:00:00 AM
Enjoyed.
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Date: 5/9/2014 4:12:00 AM
Nette when you speak words like these no-one is helpless....David
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Date: 5/9/2014 12:37:00 AM
This hits home in many, many ways. No other can capture this like you did. Excellent job!
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Date: 5/8/2014 8:04:00 PM
Perfect write just in time for mother's day, Nette; For all the mother, would-be mothers and mother figures. Nobody is in pain more than a mum who can see her child suffering. Nothing is more precious for a mum than to see genuine happiness in her children.
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Date: 5/8/2014 3:10:00 PM
This is so sad but beautiful... I cannot fathom the loss of one of my girls...hugs to you and Tim
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Date: 5/8/2014 2:12:00 PM
The writing is phenomenal and it is superbly emotional, heart wrenching.A storybook caliber., Nette!
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Date: 5/8/2014 1:17:00 PM
This is one of your best, Nette. Being a mother myself, I could feel the concern and love in every line. Very sweet and endearing!
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