Sandra Haight Poet Monorhyme

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Time

Time

Time flies from sunrise past our sunset skies.

Come morn, we all arise till night supplies

a break when we surmise time sleeps to rise

the newborn day implies restart time-wise.

One-third of life denies time's valued prize;

we sleep, but time defies to rest its eyes.


April 26, 2017

A BRIAN STRAND PREMIERE no 1217 Poetry Contest


Note: On average, we sleep 8 hours during 24 hours, which is one-third of a day.  Anyone 75 years old will have spent, on average, 25 years sleeping!

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Janice Canerdy April 30, 2017 at 7:53 PM A 7 for this well-written WINNING poem, Sandra! I especially lie the last line. Janice Sandra Haight May 1, 2017 at 5:31 PM Thank you, Janice, for the nice comment and rating! Hugs, Sandra

Alexis Y. April 30, 2017 at 5:02 PM Hi Sandra, Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis Sandra Haight May 1, 2017 at 5:30 PM Thank you very much, Alexis! Hugs, Sandra

Joseph May April 30, 2017 at 4:40 PM Congrats on your win Sandra Sandra Haight May 1, 2017 at 5:30 PM Thank you very much, Joseph. Sandra

John Hamilton April 30, 2017 at 2:34 PM Thanks Sandra, haven't seen you for a while, really nice entry, you can do a rhyme with more difficulty, and if you avoid repeating words (eg rise 3x)or sounds (plies2x) would place higher, but I enjoyed it all the same! Sandra Haight May 1, 2017 at 5:30 PM Thank you for another fine contest, John! Sandra

Joanna Daniel April 29, 2017 at 8:02 AM This is so smooth-flowing and on a great subject, Sandra:) a 7:) Sandra Haight May 1, 2017 at 5:29 PM Thank you so much, Jo. Hugs, Sandra

Emile Pinet April 26, 2017 at 8:44 PM Your words are well chosen and convey their meaning well, allowing for a smooth flow of thoughts from line to line. Emile. Sandra Haight April 27, 2017 at 6:12 PM Thank you so much, Emile, for such a supportive and uplifting comment! Sandra