Time

i repudiate this clock on the wall each moment frozen of time lashes back in internal strokes against my weary soul its ticking erupts like thunderous echoes within the confines of my tortured mind on this darkened night i slip 'neath the shadows of past running in circles trying to escape the grasp of hands that taunt like death eternal torture through infinite seconds that beat like this heart of mine as the pace amplifies through mind bereaves me of the present again as i face my own fears once more unkept from another sleepless night i arise with the same fury as a sun beneath the bloodied skies denouncing the storms as they rage on July 2, 2020 Time 8 word Challenge Sponsored by A Dear Heart

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Christian Alexander

Date: 12/31/2020 9:52:00 PM

Excellent write, thank you

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 11/28/2020 7:36:00 AM

Time ticks on and we hear its tick tock and we rarely think about it until we reach a decade further, how did we get here - by that infuriating tick tock on the wall who waits for no man and is ready to call us when our time is up. Lovely poem Sandy, hide the clock mentally and enjoy life my friend. A terrific poem. Hugs and blessings Jennifer.

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/27/2020 10:06:00 PM

So glad to have seen and read this, Sandra, wonderful poetry,

Running Wolves

Date: 9/26/2020 9:03:00 AM

Though time waits for no one. Its neither friend nor foe. Time must flow, though we know not where it goes...

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/11/2020 3:11:00 AM

this really does put time into another essence beautifully painted sandra i pray you have a blessed weekend

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/9/2020 1:43:00 PM

Hello: I have tried to reach you. I hope you are OK and not sick. I would love to hear from you. I miss your poems. Take Care with Blessings..........

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 8/31/2020 3:58:00 AM

Wow you express in a powerful way, my teen son who suffered PTSD after a car accident had similar experiences and thought processes in angst and depression esp after some strong medication. Congrats and kudos for an awesome winning poem. Plz pleez do read and comment my newest poem too.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/6/2020 9:23:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a wonderful write on time. If only we could understand time. Enjoy your win and day...........

Janice Canerdy

Date: 7/25/2020 4:23:00 PM

CONGRATS on your win with this deep, descriptive piece, Sandra. Janice

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/18/2020 9:19:00 AM

I love this fantastic piece my friend. Such excellent creation! A fav.. God bless...

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/13/2020 1:39:00 PM

Congratulations on your wonderful second place win Sandra. I can relate to feelings of insomnia within these lines specifically. “as i face my own fears once more unkept from another sleepless night i arise with the same fury as a sun beneath the bloodied skies“. Wow, I am in awe of your ability to capture these poignant feelings so perfectly! Bravo! Blessings xxoo

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 7/8/2020 1:55:00 AM

Good luck in Dear Heart's contest my friend, a wonderful entry which I suspect is a win. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.

Aditi Mishra

Date: 7/7/2020 2:12:00 PM

You've captured such deep emotions in this muse Sandra. A natural flow of struggles through imagery. Congratulations on your win! Much love :)

Hilo Poet

Date: 7/7/2020 2:11:00 PM

Tyrannical time, ugh! Wondrously expressed, Sandra, as always and my compliments on your winning placement -- Aloha~@William

Jenish Somadas

Date: 7/7/2020 1:21:00 AM

i arise with the same fury as a sun.. Beautifully penned Sandra.. Congrats on your wonderful win..

Silent One

Date: 7/4/2020 3:49:00 PM

I can always feel the angst in your words and love how you format your poems... Great poem for this contest..

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/4/2020 6:36:00 AM

Captivating writing dearest, Sandra! Beautifully done with profound overtones! Hugs xxx

John Watt

Date: 7/3/2020 6:17:00 PM

"eternal torture / through infinite seconds"... I sure relate to this one, Sandra. When I envision heaven, it is always without clocks, due dates, deadlines, or early-morning alarms. Awesome poetry, best wishes to you. Hugs ~ John

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 7/3/2020 2:21:00 PM

Nice piece Sandy with good imagery and fine expression too. Have a blessed day,Gordon

John Gondolf

Date: 7/3/2020 10:36:00 AM

The relentless tick of the clock will torture one's mind if they let it. Another wonderful write, Sandy, best of luck in the contest. Hugs, John

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 7/3/2020 10:26:00 AM

Every cloud has a silver lining and every storm has its charm, and if a storm is followed by a rainbow then your wish is granted.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/3/2020 4:43:00 AM

I read this and I thought "there was a word list?" never believing it until I saw the end. This is beautiful in its entirety and flows effortlessly; or so it seems to this reader.

John Hamilton

Date: 7/2/2020 9:11:00 PM

Another wonderful free verse Sandy, if for a contest another sure winner, I see eight words were obligatory, I couldn't tell which ones they are it is a truly seamless write. Enjoyed I could feel the battle going on inside!

Frederic Parker

Date: 7/2/2020 4:51:00 PM

the internal conflict we all have wrestled with that at times seems eternal...good luck dear poet

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/2/2020 10:58:00 AM

Very powerful. Great poem Sandra :)