Ticking Indifference

Through the silence of the years
Time tiptoes in each small story
Another morning wakes with gentle glory
Too quickly, pass the years, ...it is clear

Around me and everywhere I look
Time slips and slides, so close upon the slopes
With mists upon the distant hills....our hopes
Are dwindled down to one small book

Ticking loudly, as down the ridge I climb
Echoes of the time, casting shadows grey
Narrowed down to waning days
A world of clocks, unwinding time

Uncaring clocks, to hear the sound, can be quite hard
Each minute, one by one, ticks-ticks-ticks my life away
The face of time, indifferent, without care, never strikes a last ballet
But, simply carries on, and will tick on, with no regard
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Wellington Avatar
December 11, 2010 at 7:49 PM
Carrie, you have done a great write with this your first place win, congrats my friend, enjoy. Blessings, Joy (Jew)
Guzzi Avatar
December 10, 2010 at 5:08 PM
yup no other choice live or don't? Nice win here. Congrad's Light & Love
Mehta Avatar
December 10, 2010 at 12:25 PM
Conmgratulations on this well deserved in the contest, Carrie,
Haick Avatar
December 8, 2010 at 11:57 AM
Dear Carrie, my congratulations to you on your Ist Place win in Barb's "Time" Contest! This is very worthy of Ist Place and goes to my favs. list! Blessings for today and all during this holy season! Love, audrey
Kendrick Avatar
December 7, 2010 at 4:54 PM
Sometimes a hard fact of life that life goes on and very few people will miss those that go on into eternity..Cogratulations on your win with well deserving work..Sara
Dufresne Avatar
December 7, 2010 at 1:18 PM
congrats to you Carrie on numero uno!
Brown Avatar
December 7, 2010 at 6:20 AM
Congratulations on your win Carrie in Barbara Gorelick's "Once Upon A Time" contest. Love,Carol
Johnson Avatar
December 6, 2010 at 6:02 PM
Congratulations Carrie on your big win with this beautiful poem. Love, Joyce
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December 5, 2010 at 2:07 PM
Congrats Carrie on your first place win in BG's contest on Time with this special and intricate entry ...my friend.. enjoy another top win and victory with luv..
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December 5, 2010 at 11:27 AM
Big congratulations on your first-place victory, Carrie! Well deserved. Love, Carolyn
Roberts Avatar
December 5, 2010 at 11:24 AM
wonderful piece, congrats on your first place win Carrie
Gorelick Avatar
December 5, 2010 at 11:13 AM
Congrats to you Carrie for another 1st place. I just love this poem..please soup mail me your address for little surprise..BG
Dietrich Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 8:35 PM
Wowie,Carrie. YOu always amaze me. Your rhyming style is effortless and even though you do not do a lot of rhyme, you make it look awesome, not forced at all. Your approach to this topic, style and descriptiveness are all A-1. A big fav for this. Luv, Andrea
Babcock Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 8:03 AM
That is so true time will continue to move on and is so indifferent to us. A wonderful write. Thanks for all your comments I am feeling good and back into the retail frenzy of Christmas. God Bless Phyl
Devonshire Avatar
November 28, 2010 at 8:30 AM
The "uncaring clocks" tick on as we try to cope with events that make the years significant. It is hard to lose hope as they pass by so quickly, Carrie. You always use the most amazing imagery. Excellent entry for Barbara's contest and I wish you success! Love, Carolyn
Mehta Avatar
November 28, 2010 at 5:15 AM
We all feel the time is always fleeting. very nice enjoyable thoughts, Carrie
Onclaud Avatar
November 28, 2010 at 1:51 AM
nice ti be the frist to comment here...yes, time slip by like a whirl... beautiful word behavior with flowing decriptions so nostalgic and sweet.. a sure bet in the contest, carrie... warmes, nette
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