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You hastily spilled a loaded jar of stained language. Sky aglow by a rainbow, as sunsets below a ledge. Pouring a layer of dullness into a pristine scene. Murky clouds have drowned the gentle sunshine. Unscrupulous guarantees, sand-tidied venturing, And the heart will stow away in the way they review. In the azure sky, golden rings are instantly plunging. Blackbirds crow around humans peacefully withdrew. Storm haze from a weakening typhoon stream. Realizing the window curtains inhibit late-day sun. This fear involves a torrential downpour dream. Nowhere for adoration untamed stallion to run, He wanders around this forsaken dust bowl land. Without a stated objective, just a promise in hand. Dreams of enigmatic and utterly ease dry, The rises speak culpability as they move away.
Written; December 26, 2021 A fearful mind approves each deft move. As a roving lout, I have a soft spot and am sensitive. Your clarion call ought to be a full-scale disorder. I'm weaving dim deceptions over my slander.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021




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Date: 12/27/2021 4:03:00 AM
Quite a dark and emotional verse Lasaad, so well composed. Wishing you good health and happiness in the coming new year. Tom
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Date: 12/26/2021 8:50:00 PM
This is a beautiful and profound write .... how a clear sky is overshadowed by dark clouds....'Into the pristine sky, a layer of dullness is poured in' ! Striking image, dear friend !
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Date: 12/26/2021 1:06:00 PM
Beautiful hues of sunset adorn your first stanza, Lasaad. Nicely done, blending human emotions.
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Date: 12/26/2021 12:53:00 PM
Sky aglow by a rainbow, as sunsets below a ledge. What a lovely line. I feel it is the fulcrum of the whole poem.
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Date: 12/26/2021 10:22:00 AM
Great opening verse! Storm clouds indeed paint the pristine land a dull color
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