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Thunder In the Night

The thunder pounded in the night, impending storm, a tension felt. The darkness trembled with delight as clouds protruded like a welt, and air with trepidation dealt. The thunder pounded in the night, and lightning flashed across the sky. The anxious night was glowing bright; anticipations running high as lovers gazed into their eyes. The thunder pounded in the night, and rain came pouring from above. The room was heavy with storm’s might as gale force winds gave pair a shove while yielding to this night of love. The thunder pounded in the night; their bodies now as one conform with passion burning, fires ignite. But now a calmness starts to form, yet calm is just the eye of storm….. January 9, 2019

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Date: 1/16/2019 9:13:00 PM
Love this beauty! Feel the tension and the movement of the couple! Nice!
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John Gondolf
Date: 1/16/2019 9:55:00 PM
Thank you, Kim, I appreciate your thoughts. John
Date: 1/13/2019 3:11:00 PM
You have built passion's pyre quite well in this piece of passionate art; one can feel the heat arising.
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John Gondolf
Date: 1/13/2019 4:14:00 PM
Thanks for the wonderful comment, ML, I appreciate it. John
Date: 1/11/2019 8:02:00 PM
oh wow, at the end there, the calm BEFORE the storm! great ending on this poem. I love how you repeated line one. I don't think it's a requirement of the form, so you really changed it up in a GOOD way. I see it's a winner. Congratulations
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John Gondolf
Date: 1/11/2019 8:34:00 PM
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, Andrea, the form doesn’t call for repeating the line but I was trying to create a feeling of anxiety by doing so. Glad you liked that effect. John
Date: 1/11/2019 11:57:00 AM
Congratulations for your win John! :)
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John Gondolf
Date: 1/11/2019 12:21:00 PM
Thank you, Heidi!
Date: 1/11/2019 11:40:00 AM
Your words whisper love, passion and romance. Congratulations John, on this win. :) Brandy
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John Gondolf
Date: 1/11/2019 12:05:00 PM
Thank you, Brandy, love makes the world go 'round!
Date: 1/11/2019 1:13:00 AM
Wonderful, John. Congrats on your top win.
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John Gondolf
Date: 1/11/2019 4:14:00 AM
Thank you, Line.
Date: 1/9/2019 10:08:00 PM
Very nice poem! I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
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John Gondolf
Date: 1/9/2019 10:19:00 PM
Thank you, Valerie, I appreciate it.
Date: 1/9/2019 1:51:00 PM
wow, john.. an enthralling piece which leaves me swooning... nice to feel the goosebumps on a crisp night such as this.. huggs
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John Gondolf
Date: 1/9/2019 2:00:00 PM
Thank you for this lovely comment, Nette, I'm glad I could make you swoon and give you goosebumps as you curl up with my poetry on your crisp winter night. All my best. John
Date: 1/9/2019 1:35:00 PM
When the wind playfully dances through the night, as lovers tangle- passion will echo. This is so beautiful and romantic, filled with sweet sensuality. The rain, even a thunderstorm creates a breathtaking mood indeed. :) Brandy
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John Gondolf
Date: 1/9/2019 1:57:00 PM
Thank you, Brandy, there are so many metaphors within a storm that can relate to passion. I was hoping that emotion would come across strongly. I appreciate your thoughts my sweet friend!
Date: 1/9/2019 12:26:00 PM
Your repetition of the first two lines adds to the crescendo in your quintain, John, and one can feel the moment of release. Indeed, it's just the "eye" and passions will not cease. Nicely done, my friend!
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John Gondolf
Date: 1/9/2019 12:47:00 PM
Thank you for your wonderful comment, Carolyn, I'm glad you enjoyed it. And yes, the passions are endless. John
Date: 1/9/2019 7:07:00 AM
I do enjoy a good storm, I smiled at your third stanza, I was in the sea in Barbados and my wife and I got talking to a couple, let's say she was a big girl, out of nowhere a powerful wave pushed me onto her,good job I had my hands in the air lol Well written John. Tom.
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John Gondolf
Date: 1/9/2019 7:20:00 AM
Thanks, Tom, I appreciate it. Enjoyed your Barbados story, keep those hands where we can see them. haha John

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