John Gondolf Poet Quintain (English)

Thunder In the Night

The thunder pounded in the night,
impending storm, a tension felt.
The darkness trembled with delight
as clouds protruded like a welt,
and air with trepidation dealt.

The thunder pounded in the night,
and lightning flashed across the sky.
The anxious night was glowing bright;
anticipations running high
as lovers gazed into their eyes.

The thunder pounded in the night,
and rain came pouring from above.
The room was heavy with storm’s might
as gale force winds gave pair a shove
while yielding to this night of love.

The thunder pounded in the night;
their bodies now as one conform
with passion burning, fires ignite.
But now a calmness starts to form,
yet calm is just the eye of storm…..


January 9, 2019

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Kim Rodrigues January 16, 2019 at 9:13 PM Love this beauty! Feel the tension and the movement of the couple! Nice! John Gondolf January 16, 2019 at 9:55 PM Thank you, Kim, I appreciate your thoughts. John

M. L. Kiser January 13, 2019 at 3:11 PM You have built passion's pyre quite well in this piece of passionate art; one can feel the heat arising. John Gondolf January 13, 2019 at 4:14 PM Thanks for the wonderful comment, ML, I appreciate it. John

Andrea Dietrich January 11, 2019 at 8:02 PM oh wow, at the end there, the calm BEFORE the storm! great ending on this poem. I love how you repeated line one. I don't think it's a requirement of the form, so you really changed it up in a GOOD way. I see it's a winner. Congratulations John Gondolf January 11, 2019 at 8:34 PM Thank you for sharing your thoughts, Andrea, the form doesn’t call for repeating the line but I was trying to create a feeling of anxiety by doing so. Glad you liked that effect. John

Heidi Sands January 11, 2019 at 11:57 AM Congratulations for your win John! :) John Gondolf January 11, 2019 at 12:21 PM Thank you, Heidi!

Brandy Nicole January 11, 2019 at 11:40 AM Your words whisper love, passion and romance. Congratulations John, on this win. :) Brandy John Gondolf January 11, 2019 at 12:05 PM Thank you, Brandy, love makes the world go 'round!

Line Gauthier January 11, 2019 at 1:13 AM Wonderful, John. Congrats on your top win. John Gondolf January 11, 2019 at 4:14 AM Thank you, Line.

Valerie Staton January 9, 2019 at 10:08 PM Very nice poem! I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. John Gondolf January 9, 2019 at 10:19 PM Thank you, Valerie, I appreciate it.

Nette Onclaud January 9, 2019 at 1:51 PM wow, john.. an enthralling piece which leaves me swooning... nice to feel the goosebumps on a crisp night such as this.. huggs John Gondolf January 9, 2019 at 2:00 PM Thank you for this lovely comment, Nette, I'm glad I could make you swoon and give you goosebumps as you curl up with my poetry on your crisp winter night. All my best. John

Brandy Nicole January 9, 2019 at 1:35 PM When the wind playfully dances through the night, as lovers tangle- passion will echo. This is so beautiful and romantic, filled with sweet sensuality. The rain, even a thunderstorm creates a breathtaking mood indeed. :) Brandy John Gondolf January 9, 2019 at 1:57 PM Thank you, Brandy, there are so many metaphors within a storm that can relate to passion. I was hoping that emotion would come across strongly. I appreciate your thoughts my sweet friend!

Carolyn Devonshire January 9, 2019 at 12:26 PM Your repetition of the first two lines adds to the crescendo in your quintain, John, and one can feel the moment of release. Indeed, it's just the "eye" and passions will not cease. Nicely done, my friend! John Gondolf January 9, 2019 at 12:47 PM Thank you for your wonderful comment, Carolyn, I'm glad you enjoyed it. And yes, the passions are endless. John

Tom Cunningham January 9, 2019 at 7:07 AM I do enjoy a good storm, I smiled at your third stanza, I was in the sea in Barbados and my wife and I got talking to a couple, let's say she was a big girl, out of nowhere a powerful wave pushed me onto her,good job I had my hands in the air lol Well written John. Tom. John Gondolf January 9, 2019 at 7:20 AM Thanks, Tom, I appreciate it. Enjoyed your Barbados story, keep those hands where we can see them. haha John