Timothy Hicks Poet Ghazal

Thunder

As houses shake people think of red, when comes thunder.
Safely in our rooms, on our warm beds, then comes thunder.

Will you sacrifice yourself for those that you love like
In those romantic stories you've read, when comes thunder?

Even the most sturdy of men will feel like brittle
Glass and sense vast approaching dread, when comes thunder.

Women will lite slender candles to illuminate
Their tattered bibles, their daily bread, when comes thunder.

As I write this I hear something familiar yet strange,
"You are not alone, Timothy" said the loud thunder.

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Randhir Kaur May 12, 2016 at 6:06 AM Oh I loved the 2 para the most..loud enough...the whole poem as a whole...well written... Timothy Hicks May 16, 2016 at 11:45 AM Thanks Randhir ... and welcome to PS!

Laura Breidenthal March 22, 2016 at 5:55 PM This is an immensely beautiful one, Timothy. The thunder is right in saying you are not alone! And that's such a heartwarming ending. Interesting that the thunder comforts you rather than its usual reputation of frightening. I love the thunder! I especially like it mixed with a downpour of rain. We rarely have thunder storms, but when they come, I get so excited! When I was a child that thunder is the voice of God. Always, Laura Timothy Hicks March 24, 2016 at 2:25 AM Thanks Laura! We just had a super intense one the other night. Caught a picture of lightning bolt, at just the right moment, and it looked like it was in the middle of the day (it was late at night, pitch dark!) ... You understood this perfectly, and with great insight ... depending on mind set, you can get opposite messages from nature.

Andrea Dietrich April 15, 2013 at 5:36 PM timothy, remember Jealous Beast? That would make a great Fave entry in my current contest, if you can get it in on time. I am giving clues left and right to people!!

Poet Destroyer A March 13, 2013 at 5:14 PM comforted we'd all like to be at those times, This is a sweet write Timothy... XOXO P.D. Timothy Hicks March 13, 2013 at 10:11 PM To be honest thunder both comforts and frightens me... at times relaxing, while at other times so loud that the house shakes. But I like the way the ghazal form sorta gives the reader several different viewpoints.

Tim Ryerson March 12, 2013 at 6:20 AM Timothy - I am so very glad to have discovered your poetry!...I love this poem, particularly the 'tattered bibles' verse...looking forward to reading more and thanks for your kind comments and support - Tim Timothy Hicks March 12, 2013 at 10:05 AM And thank you for returning the compliment! :D

Russell Sivey March 12, 2013 at 5:32 AM Wow, this is an incredible Ghazal! This is a form that I haven't written more than one write! I like to try new forms and I have done a lot of forms, but this is one that I don't enjoy doing! But you have done masterfully with this poem, wow, this is truly a phenomenal piece! I loved reading this wonderful poem, Great Work!! Timothy Hicks March 12, 2013 at 10:04 AM That means a lot coming from you Russ! I have checked out your poetry page and yes it seems you have tried dozens of different styles... but I like that. I always try to find new ways of writing...

Andrea Dietrich March 11, 2013 at 4:35 PM Ah, yes, the old GHAZAL. I remember trying it one time in a contest challenge here a few years ago. It was difficult to do. I sure enjoyed seeing what you came up with for that form of poetry. I don't suppose you ever heard the song Timothy, did you? It was from around 1969.(you might find the theme of it fascinating in a morbid way!) Timothy Hicks March 11, 2013 at 7:17 PM Are you talking about the Fleetwood Mac song? "Thunder only happens when it's raining... lovers only love you when you're playing"? Ghazal's are a unique challenge... I'm glad you liked it!

Eileen Manassian March 11, 2013 at 3:27 PM Well, glad that's the message you got from the thunder ;) Lovely poem! Thanks for taking the time to read some of my work! :) Timothy Hicks March 11, 2013 at 7:15 PM I'm somewhat of an obsessive read sometimes, haha. Thanks for your support!