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Through Their Eyes

Through Their Eyes (originally "Just Desserts for Rats") Still touching the hilt of the sword, she declares, “No fencing for HIM at the end of the month. His pastime is so bloody boring!” The mouse in her house regards her with cockiness from underneath a chair. “Yeah, BEN, my FRIEND, I’m talking to YOU.” She returns the mouse's stare. “And you sure do make a racket at night down here on this kitchen flooring!” The ashes she flicks from her cigarette fall soundlessly to the tiles. She casually leafs through a travel brochure, then looks over at “Ben.” “Yeah, that husband of mine sure thought he could fool me, but he’ll never try that again.” She fixes her gaze on Ben’s beady eyes; then back on the pages and smiles. The names of rendezvous spots of her husband she’d got from a slime ball she’d hired to sleuth. “He did a good job, that big tub of lard. Yes, I do have to give him that, but he sure knew how to give me the creeps with his body all sweaty and fat.” She puts some milk on sweet rice in a bowl. “I only wanted the truth. Cat got your tongue? Too bad there’s no cat. I’d love to see you swallowed.” The mouse doesn’t flinch. Now she looks down at a pile of the sleuth’s photographs. “This first batch of photos wasn’t so hot.” She turns to the rodent and laughs. “But this second group. . . .Every cent was well-spent to have that bastard followed!” She puts the rice pudding with milk on the floor near a form centered there and stoops as she pours from a bottle marked “poison” its contents into the bowl. Leaning down by the shape on the floor, she says, “Soon you‘ll have Ben‘s company.” And then to the mouse: “ Come here, little rat, come eat till you’re full.” Then grabbing her bags pre-packed for Australia, she kicks at the corpse on the floor so carefully centered - kicks right at the spot where, by her hand, the sword so easily entered. Written 8/18/2012

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Date: 1/8/2021 5:02:00 PM
Ha, Just deserts indeed for the rat Andrea. Hell has no fury like a wife scorned, men be warned. A fantastic write, loved it... Belle
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Date: 8/16/2016 5:25:00 PM
Congrats Andrea, for your well, deserved first placement in the contest!! ;-)
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Date: 8/15/2016 12:11:00 PM
Congrats on you well deserved win.
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Date: 8/13/2016 7:18:00 PM
Oh, Andrea - this is exceptional, it is always my pleasure when you dust off an old one. Hugs, CayCay
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Date: 8/13/2016 1:02:00 PM
Ooooh...I shuddered! very well done with such wonderful words. Congrats on your win. Sunita :0
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Date: 8/12/2016 11:16:00 AM
Another contest another win...Congratulations Andrea
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Date: 8/12/2016 9:08:00 AM
Congrats Andrea to win your usual topmost place on the rigorous poem. Love.
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Date: 8/11/2016 9:59:00 PM
This was a hoot Andrea and so happy to see it take top honors. Your husband better be nice to you. Haha. Congratulations! Cheers, Connie ; )
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Date: 8/11/2016 7:11:00 PM
Congratulations. Fun to see your brain work. You're in a class by yourself....Larry
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Date: 8/11/2016 5:46:00 PM
Wow, Andrea, suspenseful and so brutal! Congrats on your well-deserved First Place win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 8/11/2016 3:52:00 PM
great poem congrats another great from the champ stephen
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Date: 8/11/2016 3:29:00 PM
great poem Andrea with good suspense congrats on 1st place hugs
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Date: 8/11/2016 3:14:00 PM
Oh wow,you are a rat killer too:)Congrats Andrea!
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Date: 8/11/2016 2:31:00 PM
Hi Andrea, Congrats on your top win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Date: 8/28/2012 3:47:00 PM
Not much for rats and mice but this was a unique poem Andrea. love phyl
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Date: 8/23/2012 7:27:00 AM
Thanks for your comments! Enjoyed your poem! Take care! JP
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Date: 8/21/2012 1:19:00 PM
Well, it will probably will be a winner..Sort of kreepy though..Very creative on your part..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/21/2012 8:26:00 PM
thanks, I love creepy stuff and wish I could be another stephen king!
Date: 8/21/2012 12:22:00 PM
Interesting dirty game, penned well. Good luck for the contest. Loved always, bl
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Date: 8/21/2012 11:43:00 AM
Oooooooooooooooooh! I really like this one! Poor little Ben! Hahah. Brilliant one. :D Always, Laura
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Date: 8/21/2012 9:41:00 AM
Oh, yeah, she's goin' down under. I coulda lent ya one of my cats, or even all of them. Please elaborate on what you found out about your husband. I agree, you couldn't put up with two rats in the family. Stellar write, dear Andrea. Love, daver
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/21/2012 8:13:00 PM
hahaha, and you think i would admit to all this if I were the woman? heehee
Date: 8/21/2012 8:14:00 AM
the mouse didn't have much of a chance, a suspenseful story , well written.I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. Hugs!Erich
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Date: 8/20/2012 9:07:00 AM
Masterful story, Andrea...see you really DO NEED TO BRANCH OUT!! This is massive proof! Enjoyed your creative gift here this morning--what a treat! gwendolen (still working on the "move" and it is all I have time to do! ughhh!) Love to ya, gwendolen
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Date: 8/20/2012 5:18:00 AM
well i certainly enjoyed reading this, a wonderful story well crafted, good luck here with this.
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Date: 8/19/2012 2:56:00 PM
Bon Voyage! Have a nice trip. :)
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Date: 8/19/2012 2:03:00 PM
I had to look hard but found the rhyme in this weird captivating story of a woman's musings. Hope they aren't yours and you go out there and wreak havoc. Hope your "dirty deeds" win the day! Love, Lizzie I'm just full of hope today! :)
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