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Through the Gap

Through the gap between the closed drapes A maid peers in a daze An ashtray upon the table Held her undiffused gaze Clearly there was bright red lipstick Circles upon some butts A golden earring lies close by Lying cheat drives her nuts The fog lifted revealing all Airline ticket back home A scoundrel, cheater, liar, creep In the night he does roam A teardrop fell upon the floor As the click opened lock He slept peacefully this last night Gun shots silenced by the clock Last chapter typed upon white sheets The typewriter now still Headlines plastered across front page Lovers in motel were killed Sponsor: Craig Cornish Contest: Chopped III Form used: Poulter's Measure, Syllable count 8,6,8,6 with the rhyme on the six..Some lines might be slightly off..

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Date: 12/29/2014 9:53:00 AM
A woman scorned! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 12/26/2014 11:02:00 PM
SARA, congratulations in Craigs C., chopped contest.... LUV LINDA
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Date: 12/24/2014 7:26:00 AM
Well done, Sara! Congratulations!
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Date: 12/23/2014 9:53:00 AM
yours was one of my favorites in the contest. Probably because my mind would think this way if i had been writing for this challenge!!Big congrats for your win.
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Date: 12/23/2014 8:45:00 AM
Wow...what a story, Sara! You did a great job using those special words! Congratulation on your win. Sandra
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Date: 12/22/2014 8:40:00 PM
Great winning write Sara! Big congrats!
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Date: 12/22/2014 7:16:00 AM
Great write and win Sara....Congrats
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Date: 12/21/2014 3:49:00 PM
brilliantly told story Sara - many congrats:-) Hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 12/21/2014 1:48:00 PM
congratulations Sara on your well deserved win
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Date: 12/21/2014 12:05:00 PM
Merry Christmas and congrats on the win Sara...huggs
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Date: 12/12/2014 4:16:00 PM
oh YES< I love how you developed your story. GREAT way to do it!!!
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Date: 12/8/2014 7:22:00 AM
Great story, well told. Nice 'bang' at the end.
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Date: 12/6/2014 5:53:00 PM
wow, that was exciting . . . was not sure where it was going and then bang! Nicely done Sara!!
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Date: 12/6/2014 1:04:00 PM
You could perhaps change the last line to..."Lovers, found slaughtered, in hotel kill!!" :) P.s An old habit of mine. I must change words in some of my poems several times before i am happy with them. john.
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Date: 12/6/2014 12:52:00 PM
Very nicely structured poem. I enjoyed reading this; especially: "He slept peacefully this last night...gun shots silenced by the clock". Excellent!! :) john.
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