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As we prepare to celebrate Veteran's Day, we express our appreciation to the patriots who risk their lives to protect our freedom. This poem is dedicated to all Soup members, including Sgt. Bob Hinshaw, who have fought in the service of their countries.

Thoughts From the Battlefield

In sandy dunes on my back I lie
Dreaming of warm beaches, blue sky
And a girl named Lorelei
On memories I fly 
War seen from on high
I vow to try
Not to cry
As I
Die



Written November 5, 2019
For the Rhyming Nonet contest.

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Gregory Richard Barden

December 17, 2019 at 5:54 AM

Best wishes and congratulations on your win in Brian's contest, Carolyn - keep the ink flowing, my friend! Blessings! :o) <3

Na Na

December 16, 2019 at 3:03 PM

Congrats on your winning poem Carolyn

James Marshall Goff

December 6, 2019 at 9:35 PM

Yes...stunning poem!

Harry Horsman

December 3, 2019 at 12:38 AM

Oh, this is so good. a fav, Carolyn, you bring back the quality..love it.

Line Gauthier

November 18, 2019 at 9:44 AM

Back with well deserved congrats on your POTD, Carolyn.

Kim Rodrigues

November 18, 2019 at 6:47 AM

Congratulations on POTD, Carolyn! Your soldier’s thoughts on Lorelei as he lies on sandy beaches knowing he will die, looking at the sky that once delighted them both. Wonderful and sad tribute to all soldiers who give their lives that others might enjoy their freedom.

Olu'Um Mm

November 15, 2019 at 8:05 PM

Beautiful!

Smita Kulkarni

November 15, 2019 at 2:09 PM

Beautifully penned poem Carolyn! Congratulations and a big thank you to all the deserving veteran patriots!!

Connie Marcum Wong

November 14, 2019 at 8:29 PM

Congratulations on your wonderful first placement! I loved it! : ) xxoo

Robert L. Hinshaw

November 14, 2019 at 6:38 PM

Congrats, Carolyn for your well-deserved lst Place win! I'm honored that you hi-lighted my name but there a lot more people who did more than I did. Luv - Bob

Anne-Lise Andresen

November 14, 2019 at 1:20 PM

- Congratulations on your win, Carolyn :) - // Anne-Lise :)

Sunlite Wanter

November 14, 2019 at 10:29 AM

Number One!!! Exceptional poem! Congratulations!

Vijay Pandit

November 14, 2019 at 9:26 AM

Back again for being #1 on the best poems chart, Carolyn.

Alexis Y.

November 14, 2019 at 6:47 AM

Hi Carolyn, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your 1st place win. It well deserved. Have a fantastic day:-) Alexis

Andrea Dietrich

November 13, 2019 at 8:42 PM

yes, I remember this one. SO good, Carolyn. Congrats on your worthy win.

Charles Messina

November 13, 2019 at 7:12 PM

Carolyn, I knew when I accidentally read this on POTD that it was going to be a winner for sure. An absolute beautiful and terrific write, and a fave for me. You have written a movie that so many have lived and or can relate to, in so little words. Congratulations my dear friend on your 1st place win. Love & hugs...Charlie

Carolyn Devonshire

December 21, 2019 at 11:48 AM

I like this short form, Charles. Thanks for the challenge and my placement!

Darlene De Beaulieu

November 11, 2019 at 5:50 PM

Hello Carolyn Devonshire, Bob Hinshaw will enjoy this poemand other soup members to. Have a nice evening my friend.

John Hamilton

November 11, 2019 at 11:44 AM

A very touching write Carolyn, congrats on POTD. So much said in so few words!

Mick Hills

November 11, 2019 at 4:55 AM

Nicely written

Keith O.J. Hunt

November 10, 2019 at 12:46 PM

Congrats Carolyn, my father was a WWII vet, so it is heartfelt;-)

Jennifer Proxenos

November 10, 2019 at 12:34 PM

How sad war is - war touches the souls of us all - congratulations dear Carolyn - forgive me for not answering you sooner but was off soup for about two weeks due to our long awaited move and settling into our new home. A great honor to get POTD for this moving write. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Silent One

November 9, 2019 at 9:19 AM

Just returning to say congrats on potd..

Judy Ball

November 8, 2019 at 9:58 AM

Oh what a deeply touching piece Carolyn. I'm sure thoughts of home and loved ones are the last things to go through their minds. This is a great write and deserves POTD. God Bless, JB