Thoughts From the Battlefield

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As we prepare to celebrate Veteran's Day, we express our appreciation to the patriots who risk their lives to protect our freedom.  This poem is dedicated to all Soup members, including Sgt. Bob Hinshaw, who have fought in the service of their countries.

 

In sandy dunes on my back I lie
Dreaming of warm beaches, blue sky
And a girl named Lorelei
On memories I fly 
War seen from on high
I vow to try
Not to cry
As I
Die



Written November 5, 2019
For the Rhyming Nonet contest.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 12/17/2019 5:54:00 AM
Best wishes and congratulations on your win in Brian's contest, Carolyn - keep the ink flowing, my friend! Blessings! :o) <3
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Date: 12/16/2019 3:03:00 PM
Congrats on your winning poem Carolyn
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Date: 12/6/2019 9:35:00 PM
Yes...stunning poem!
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Date: 12/3/2019 12:38:00 AM
Oh, this is so good. a fav, Carolyn, you bring back the quality..love it.
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Date: 11/30/2019 5:24:00 PM
Congratulations Carolyn! This is a beautiful verse, so well written, and so meaningful.The last lines, hit hard. Awesome!
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 12/8/2019 10:06:00 AM
So nice of you to visit, Sandra. I hope you have a wonderful holiday season!
Date: 11/18/2019 9:44:00 AM
Back with well deserved congrats on your POTD, Carolyn.
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Date: 11/18/2019 6:47:00 AM
Congratulations on POTD, Carolyn! Your soldier’s thoughts on Lorelei as he lies on sandy beaches knowing he will die, looking at the sky that once delighted them both. Wonderful and sad tribute to all soldiers who give their lives that others might enjoy their freedom.
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Date: 11/15/2019 8:05:00 PM
Beautiful!
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Date: 11/15/2019 2:09:00 PM
Beautifully penned poem Carolyn! Congratulations and a big thank you to all the deserving veteran patriots!!
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Date: 11/14/2019 8:29:00 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful first placement! I loved it! : ) xxoo
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Date: 11/14/2019 6:38:00 PM
Congrats, Carolyn for your well-deserved lst Place win! I'm honored that you hi-lighted my name but there a lot more people who did more than I did. Luv - Bob
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Date: 11/14/2019 1:20:00 PM
- Congratulations on your win, Carolyn :) - // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/14/2019 10:29:00 AM
Number One!!! Exceptional poem! Congratulations!
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Date: 11/14/2019 9:26:00 AM
Back again for being #1 on the best poems chart, Carolyn.
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Date: 11/14/2019 6:47:00 AM
Hi Carolyn, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your 1st place win. It well deserved. Have a fantastic day:-) Alexis
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Date: 11/13/2019 8:42:00 PM
yes, I remember this one. SO good, Carolyn. Congrats on your worthy win.
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Date: 11/13/2019 7:12:00 PM
Carolyn, I knew when I accidentally read this on POTD that it was going to be a winner for sure. An absolute beautiful and terrific write, and a fave for me. You have written a movie that so many have lived and or can relate to, in so little words. Congratulations my dear friend on your 1st place win. Love & hugs...Charlie
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 12/21/2019 11:48:00 AM
I like this short form, Charles. Thanks for the challenge and my placement!
Date: 11/11/2019 5:50:00 PM
Hello Carolyn Devonshire, Bob Hinshaw will enjoy this poemand other soup members to. Have a nice evening my friend.
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Date: 11/11/2019 11:44:00 AM
A very touching write Carolyn, congrats on POTD. So much said in so few words!
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Date: 11/11/2019 4:55:00 AM
Nicely written
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Date: 11/10/2019 12:46:00 PM
Congrats Carolyn, my father was a WWII vet, so it is heartfelt;-)
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Date: 11/10/2019 12:34:00 PM
How sad war is - war touches the souls of us all - congratulations dear Carolyn - forgive me for not answering you sooner but was off soup for about two weeks due to our long awaited move and settling into our new home. A great honor to get POTD for this moving write. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 11/9/2019 9:19:00 AM
Just returning to say congrats on potd..
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Date: 11/8/2019 9:58:00 AM
Oh what a deeply touching piece Carolyn. I'm sure thoughts of home and loved ones are the last things to go through their minds. This is a great write and deserves POTD. God Bless, JB
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Date: 11/8/2019 8:49:00 AM
Powerfully penned, Carolyn. Makes me shed more than one tear (and I imagine others too). POTD well-deserved! ~ An old soldier in Chicago
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