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Thoughts

thoughts
            wander
         in the mind
      like wild horses
 they prance and gallop
   with flowing manes
         till worn out
          they seek
              rest

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    12th October 2015
     Contest: Ninette
   Sponsor: Silent One
         Placed 3rd

Copyright © Paul Callus | Year Posted 2015

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November 25, 2015 at 10:25 AM

I love this Paul,a very super work, the argument it generated is also another icing sugar on this cake: is mane or manes one sylable word? I love Andrea contribution here , I also appreciate your coolness and S 1 maturity,this is the more why your site is always a must read for me. Long life to you Paul that we continuing to drink from your fountain of wisdom...hugs

November 25, 2015 at 1:08 PM

Hi Kayode! I see that you not only read poetry, but also the comments that are listed below. Yes, we had a lovely friendly 'debate' that shows how things can be ironed out civilly without outbursts of indignation:))) I must thank you, profoundly, for all your lovely and complimentary comments, together with encouraging support. God bless & regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

October 17, 2015 at 5:21 PM

Yayyyy, you got a great placement, Paul. Just as you deserved!! Congratulations.

October 17, 2015 at 5:39 PM

Thank you Andrea:))) You rock!!! ~ Goodnight:) // paul

Andrea Dietrich

October 17, 2015 at 9:15 AM

ok, I could not let this go, so I went to check it out. Two different counters said two but I found one that said "one" Then I typed in a dictionary the word Manes: If it is pronounced MA/NES, that refers to a different word!! that word means (in Roman mythology) the deified souls of dead ancestors. Normally horse's mane is a noncount word not traditionally pluralized but since you used plural horses with manes, it is OK to do it. I just checked that as well! will talk to Silent One about it.

October 17, 2015 at 2:41 PM

Thank you Andrea; you make a great advocate for human rights:)) As you can see from the above comment, your intercession has been fruitful. You are not only a fair player, but also a friend to be treasured:) /x/ paul

October 17, 2015 at 9:29 AM

I know what you mean (I studied Latin). "Manes" are the spirits of the dead. In Latin it is pronounced differently, thus having 2 syllables (ma-nes). I did not know you could find this word in an English dictionary. I will go check my English dictionaries, out of curiosity!

Andrea Dietrich

October 17, 2015 at 9:08 AM

this is really nice, Paul. Glad I am finally seeing it down here. What are you talking about manes having two syllables down here, Paul??? It is ONE syllable. Your lines are perfect for syllable count!! OMG. I just read what Silent One said to you. I gotta tell him NOT to use that syllable counter. Don't second guess yourself. Some of the syllable counters are wrong wrong wrong!!!!

October 17, 2015 at 9:59 AM

Hi Andrea....I checked "manes" on howmanysyllables.com, and I have a feeling that they are referring to the Latin word. I have asked them to clarify; waiting for a reply. ~~ [The word ma-nes from the Latin is listed in all my English dictionaries.]

October 15, 2015 at 2:51 PM

Hi Paul: Great ninette on horses. beautifully done! My compliments.

October 15, 2015 at 3:44 PM

Thank you for enjoying my wild horses, Ralph! ~ All the best. // paul

October 15, 2015 at 2:07 PM

I like this, the way you compared thoughts with horses, Paul. Sad that you didn't place. hugs!

October 15, 2015 at 2:13 PM

So pleased that you enjoyed it, Kim. No problem about not placing:) I admire sponsors who stick to the rules. Hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux

October 15, 2015 at 7:07 AM

Congratulations Paul, I didn't know there was a contest but I'm glad you won with this gem, he chose the right horse!

October 15, 2015 at 1:59 PM

Thank you for stopping by, Richard. I suppose I did choose the right horses, but I chose the wrong 'manes':) ...thus...n/a for me! // paul [pls see Silent One's comment further down.]

Connie Marcum Wong

October 15, 2015 at 3:12 AM

I didn't have a clue that manes has two syllables. I guess I will have to make sure I check every word if entering one of these. I didn't have time to enter this contest. I liked your entry very much Paul. The thought of horses galloping free like our thoughts is very appealing. #7

October 17, 2015 at 2:36 PM

Hi Connie! I thought that's it's only fair that I let you know that Silent One has put me on the winners' list. Pls see the exchange of comments further up the page. :) // paul

October 15, 2015 at 1:55 PM

It's a relief to know that I'm not the only one to have been taken in by the word 'manes':) Maybe I should have used it in the singular! Thank you for your feedback, Connie. Mahalo nui loa! // paul

October 14, 2015 at 7:08 PM

So right on! Great telling of a human truth. I don't know where you placed, but I know I like it ... CayCay

October 15, 2015 at 1:50 PM

Thank you CayCay; unfortunately I did not place; I was naughty and broke one of the rules:) Pls see Silent One's comment below. ~ Regards // paul

Constance La France

October 14, 2015 at 4:52 PM

Paul, this is lovely, I adore horses so I find the words beautiful, a flowing 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, creeping tendrils ~~

October 14, 2015 at 4:58 PM

I am glad you found this to your liking, Constance. Thank you for stopping by with lovely comments and high rating. ~ Regards // paul

Ravi Sathasivam

October 14, 2015 at 6:47 AM

Excellent and thoughtful metaphor. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.

October 14, 2015 at 8:50 AM

Thank you for reading and commenting so positively, Ravi. Pleased that you enjoyed. All the best. // paul

October 13, 2015 at 5:42 AM

This is an awesome entry Paul, wishing you the best for the contest :)

October 13, 2015 at 4:45 PM

Thank you Wilma. I have just found out from the above comment that it failed to make the final list, but that's no problem...a new poem was born:) ~ regards // paul

October 13, 2015 at 2:30 AM

What a great analogy, Paul. I can identify with your poem's image so much, especially right now at 3:27 am, wide awake with prancing and galloping wild horses keeping me up! All the best for the contest. Sandra

October 13, 2015 at 4:48 PM

Hi Sandra! I' afraid that my energetic horses have scared the sheep away:) Hope you managed to fall asleep in the end...and perhaps slept in, later than usual! Thank you for a lovely visit. All the best. // paul

October 12, 2015 at 11:59 PM

Very clever and so so true.

October 13, 2015 at 1:34 PM

Thank you, Mark. Regards // paul

October 12, 2015 at 7:55 PM

Loved this, made me think, when I have so many thoughts wish I had a pen at hand! Loved this!

October 13, 2015 at 1:21 PM

Yes, some thoughts are worth recording, that's when paper and pen come in handy; but there are others that are best left to drift into oblivion! Thank you for reading! // paul

October 12, 2015 at 7:38 PM

wonderful! you've done a masterful job with this format. good luck in the contest!

October 13, 2015 at 1:12 PM

Thank you Ilene. Glad that you enjoyed. ~ Regards // paul

October 12, 2015 at 5:12 PM

Being a horse lover, I was drawn to this one. Well done, Paul. ~ Lin ~

October 12, 2015 at 5:23 PM

I love horses, too, Lin:) Thank you for stopping by to read and comment. ~ Regards // paul

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