Darryl Davis Poet Free verse

This Poem Sucks

With one foot over the side
of the tub and the other 
stirring the luke warm water,

my big toe inches towards the
busy drain, both my sins and
accomplishments swirling

to a place I can only imagine
my fish would enjoy and I
wonder if this is the sort of

thing Bukowski meant when
he said that we should reward 
ourselves with a candy-ass poem

now and again.

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Erich Goller January 29, 2012 at 11:57 AM A nicely expresses story poem with a touch of humor.God bless you.Vienna

Marty Owens January 18, 2012 at 9:20 AM This is a very funny poem and I love your double meaning!!!! Marty

Judy Ball January 17, 2012 at 9:50 AM Hmmmmm Your right. Funny but definitely not your best. God Bless, JB Darryl Davis January 17, 2012 at 9:56 AM No debate there. Good thing giggles count for something. :-)

Poet Destroyer A January 16, 2012 at 5:01 PM Lol.... Love your style... And my new found smile... I can't get over your ending...and the sins swirling down.... And about that candy... Lol. .hugs...pd

Matt Caliri January 16, 2012 at 2:43 PM Nice us of "candy-ass." The spirit of Bukowski seems to be wafting alongside this piece. Nice work. This Poem Does Not Suck.

Richard Mcclellan January 16, 2012 at 2:52 AM Too Funny, quite comical. Nice reward is your candy-a** poem...

Anne-Lise Andresen January 15, 2012 at 6:52 AM Smiling,:) :) good one Darryl.My day started with a smile........thank you!!!OXOX love Anne-Lise

Jancarl Campi January 13, 2012 at 8:49 PM i enjoyed reading this poem. it is an interesting read. keep writing. and thanks for reading my work, Jancarl

Robert Pettit January 13, 2012 at 4:56 PM My big toe has to go around the drain to get all those hairs that impede the water's progress down the pipe. This poem doesn't suck; it put a smile on my face.

Andrea Dietrich January 12, 2012 at 11:39 PM fun avatar too. Darryl Davis January 13, 2012 at 1:45 AM Merci :-)

Andrea Dietrich January 12, 2012 at 11:38 PM hahaha, where did you come from all of a sudden? This is GREAT!!!! Darryl Davis January 13, 2012 at 1:42 AM From under the third Brussel Sprout leaf on the left ;-) Glad you liked it! :-)

John Loving Iii January 12, 2012 at 5:30 PM No it does'nt !!! i have to look at more! Darryl Davis January 13, 2012 at 1:44 AM Thanks...particularly for looking at more :-) But this poem does suck, but positively so. ;-)

Wilma Neels January 12, 2012 at 7:18 AM Gosh, I just love this Darryl, you made me smile with this one.. Your ending is sublime :) Thank you Darryl Davis January 12, 2012 at 1:06 PM Thanks :-) We all need a laugh sometimes. ;-)