This Moment

This moment like dank cellar air is motionless except to pass the senses as saturated air rolls over skin as lungs draw in odour rich in permanence the soundscape is silenced save the pulsing from within this moment is forever forever motionless

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Jeff Connelly

Date: 9/10/2020 6:28:00 AM

Howdy Maureen. I went fishing and found this one. I can't say "a happy read" for there seems to be something foreboding, but your wording certainly captures the moment. Thanks

Lisa Ricci

Date: 3/29/2017 12:51:00 PM

Hello Maureen. This is an entry that should be read out loud with emphasis. I found this original. Well done

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 3/29/2017 2:25:00 PM

Thank you Lisa, that is an exceedingly rich compliment :) thank you so kindly for your visit! xomo

Sofia Ra

Date: 3/21/2017 1:18:00 PM

love this! can be interpreted in so many ways. great job

John Herlihy

Date: 2/20/2017 11:55:00 AM

A little cryptic, a little mysterious, rich in inducing wonder. Indeed, an interesting moment. John

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/19/2017 2:59:00 PM

- Nothing evokes our emotions better than our senses, Maureen - Great written - hugs // Anne-Lise :)