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This Is How My Story Ends

You're being fallacious, saying I still loved her Accusing me of falsity to prey on emotions When it was really you, whom I truly admired But you ran for the exit, way before we tried. When I first met her, in a chance encounter Dazzle me she did, with brilliant scarlet colors Sharing with me how deeply she yearned more. Charmed by her visage, I let feelings ride Being curious to agnize, why did she tantalize Flirting with my eyes, resting on my vibes Floating on my air, charming my universe, Till I saw him with her, inciting me to bewilder Who was that man, who held her in embrace Taking boldly my place, while kissing her face. As I felt all my oxygen eviscerate from lungs Spinning like a vortex, my emotions whirled Taking a plunge into abyss of the unknown. I didn't see it then, this is how my story ends Perhaps it's best to skip reasoned arguments, Especially those love doesn't comprehend For in matters of heart, logic seldom helps. June 17, 2017 Eight word challenge 7-- by John Hamilton Agnize = to be fully aware or cognizant

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Date: 4/7/2022 5:19:00 AM
"As I felt all my oxygen eviscerate from lungs Spinning like a vortex, my emotions whirled Taking a plunge into abyss of the unknown"...... how powerfully you have portrayed the emotions of bewilderment and frustration on seeing your love betrayed and your fiancee in the amorous embrace of another man....
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Date: 10/29/2018 9:48:00 AM
Hi Vijay, The emotions flow in this write. Firstly, on the wave of love's dream, then wipeout as the waters drown your words in sadness. As Paul says, so life can be. Once again your emotions touch the heart with such a powerful touch. You are ever a true wordsmith my friend. Have a wonderful monday. Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 9/30/2018 11:53:00 AM
Charmed and bewitched...and suddenly the spell is broken! Life can be like that!! Regards // paul
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Date: 6/20/2018 1:04:00 PM
Vijay, this couldn't have been easy. But you wrote with a skilled pen. Great respect!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/20/2018 4:19:00 PM
Many thanks ..appreciate the kind words, Lyric Man.
Date: 6/19/2018 7:16:00 AM
You used the words very well and created another great poem Vijay..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/19/2018 4:03:00 PM
Thank you Silent One.
Date: 6/19/2018 6:16:00 AM
Vijay, you have done so well with the words for this poem! It has a powerful impact reading it. Good luck in the contest :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/19/2018 6:46:00 AM
Thank you Heidi..a pleasure to read your kind words.
Date: 6/19/2018 4:59:00 AM
Weaving fantastically a beauty, a compelling story out of a common one is your challenge and win dear Vijay! An immense pleasure to read. A heart of a poet inking.. Shine and stay blessed.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/19/2018 5:30:00 AM
Many thanks Besma..your wonderful comments are much appreciated.
Date: 6/18/2018 4:34:00 PM
fascinating theme and wordplay, vijay...this is on my winner's list!..huggs
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/18/2018 4:36:00 PM
So kind of you..thank you, nette.
Date: 6/18/2018 4:20:00 PM
This was extremely deep and I won't plague you with relationship advice, rather I want to compliment you that this was extremely expressive and well penned! Thanks for sharing Vijay!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/18/2018 4:35:00 PM
Always enjoy reading your feedback Kyle..many thanks for your kind words.
Date: 6/18/2018 12:08:00 PM
Excellent use of the words, Vijay and your specialty of romance is in full view here, Well done !!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/18/2018 4:01:00 PM
Thank you Mike--always appreciate your kind feedback.
Date: 6/18/2018 10:50:00 AM
Oh Vijay, I am wowed by this piece! I love how you skillfully and creatively weaved those challenging words into a challenging love affair! Bravo, my friend! Without a doubt, this piece will certainly be high on the winners list! Hugs and best regards. Pandita
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/18/2018 4:00:00 PM
Thank you Pandita for your visit..always appreciate your kind feedback.
Date: 6/18/2018 9:47:00 AM
You rose to the challenge my friend...great entry Vijay...L&L...^WW^
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/18/2018 9:57:00 AM
Always happy to read your feedback..thank you WW.
Date: 6/18/2018 9:08:00 AM
Love has no logic. Hormones have no reason. The heart is but a muscle that can break with all unreason. Beautiful
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/18/2018 9:56:00 AM
You are so right...appreciate your visit and comments Kelli.
Date: 6/18/2018 7:21:00 AM
Such a brilliant story. Reads like a winner.I enjoyed this story.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/18/2018 8:40:00 AM
Thank you Supraja.
Date: 6/18/2018 6:15:00 AM
- Vijay, a lovely story ... just wish it was a happy end :) - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/18/2018 7:03:00 AM
So true..not a happy ending! Thank you Anne-Lise, for your kind feedback.
Date: 6/18/2018 2:55:00 AM
Never would I wish to anyone in love tl live an experience like the one so vividly and artfully narrate my dear friend, Vijay! Captivating!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/18/2018 7:00:00 AM
I agree Demetrios..but, sometimes fiction mirrors image of real life. Many thanks, my friend for your comments.
Date: 6/17/2018 10:35:00 PM
You're so right: logic doesn't help in matters of love, deception, and heartbreak. Excellent write! Janice
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/18/2018 6:58:00 AM
Thank you Janice..always appreciate the kind feedback.
Date: 6/17/2018 8:53:00 PM
Great write!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/18/2018 6:58:00 AM
Thank you Chance for your visit and feedback.

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