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As blue waters of March quiver a chime, Near the paling ledge of Triste's harbor Where so many stars flicker, quite sublime On fallen crest…it hurts a whole lot more. Near the paling ledge of Triste's harbor I observe the dreamer inside me ache, On fallen crest…it hurts a whole lot more To drink, to sip this bitter wave and break. I observe the dreamer inside me ache, For this masquerade of glee chafes my soul To drink, to sip this bitter wave and break; Recalling my Nana… dug in the knoll. For this masquerade of glee chafes my soul Where so many stars flicker, quite sublime Recalling my Nana… dug in the knoll. As blue waters of March quiver a chime, Originally written 11 June 2016 Reposted 3/23/2018 Contest: Laura Loo's Favourite Pantoum ------------ Inspired by Songs by Sergio Mendes Waters of March Triste So Many Stars It Hurts A Whole Lot More The Dreamer Crystal Illusions Wave Nana Masquerade

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Date: 4/8/2018 10:07:00 PM
Congrats on your win, nette. Wonderful pantoum.
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Date: 3/27/2018 9:18:00 PM
Nette, I'm enthralled and enchanted by the melancholy palette of your beautifully moving pantoum. Congratulations on your wonderful win! ~Susan
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Date: 3/27/2018 9:05:00 PM
Congratulations! Enjoyed reading this. Well done.
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Date: 3/27/2018 6:01:00 PM
Not only woven with the heart of a poet, but using the song titles so perfectly ! Wow, Nette....this is wonderful ! You are one of the best here!!! No question! (and I am always grateful to see your kind comments....thank you for that!) :)
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Date: 3/27/2018 4:10:00 PM
Many congrats Nette:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/27/2018 11:43:00 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful win sweet lady enjoyed reading! Have a nice Easter Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 3/27/2018 9:56:00 AM
amazing imagery sweet Nette! I loved every word...you are so gifted sweet lady :) thank you and congratulations :)-luloo
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Date: 6/15/2016 3:07:00 PM
Wonderfully done my lovely friend. Rings in ear the music of this poem. A 7. Congrats on your beautiful win. Loved always my smiling friend, bl
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Date: 6/14/2016 6:58:00 PM
Back to congratulate you on your win, Nette, Hugs
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Date: 6/14/2016 3:18:00 PM
Congratulations, Nette...
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Date: 6/13/2016 4:03:00 PM
"Brasil 66"...I've enjoyed his music very much! This is a beautifully done write Nette! The best to you in this contest! :-)
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Date: 6/11/2016 11:40:00 PM
Very very very beautiful Nette, great choice on songs too! :)
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Date: 6/11/2016 2:09:00 AM
Astonishingly moving!
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Date: 6/10/2016 6:59:00 PM
Beautiful write, Nette! Soup mail . Hugs Eve
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Date: 6/10/2016 6:41:00 PM
nette, ''B E A U T I F U L'' so well penned, I am loving this 7 ~
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Date: 6/10/2016 6:12:00 PM
Enchanted by the beauty in the poignant tones of this magnificent pantoum!
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Date: 6/10/2016 4:49:00 PM
I hail you for this moving canvas.This is an outstanding poem steeped in beautiful words/ rhyme and melancholic moods, woman of substance!
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Date: 6/10/2016 4:20:00 PM
- A truly wonderful poem, Nette - Deeply moving - I wish you luck in the contest ... and a happy weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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