Thirst

Standing elm spirit I wait for the clouds to bring a drink for my roots. ````````` for Raul's picture `````````````

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Iolanda Scripca

Date: 8/6/2009 9:21:00 AM

Sue, beautiful imagery in this haiku. I love it! Thank you for your comments. Love and peace, Iolanda

Brandee Augustus

Date: 8/3/2009 2:10:00 PM

I think I actually found myself swallowing as I read your poem. I guess it really works because I love getting a reaction when I read someones poetry. Loved it.

Brian Strand

Date: 8/3/2009 12:34:00 AM

Excellent work Sue.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 7/27/2009 8:25:00 PM

Congrats on your poem, Sue :) this is such a wonderful haiku and I love how it complements Raul's picture :) thanks as well for your comments, I look forward to sharing more of my poems here :)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/27/2009 1:04:00 PM

Sue, congratulations on your success in Raul's contest. Love, Carol

James Marshall Goff

Date: 7/25/2009 1:00:00 PM

conjures "Native American" poetry! Sue! beyond perfection!!! CONGRATS!!! jimbo

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 7/25/2009 10:19:00 AM

Congratulations on your success in Raul's contest Sue. ~Trudy~

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/25/2009 6:46:00 AM

GReat job, Sue!! Congratulations on this winner!!

Brian Strand

Date: 7/25/2009 2:53:00 AM

Congrats on your success in Raul's contest Sue.Rgds Brian

Raul Moreno

Date: 7/25/2009 2:05:00 AM

Sue, congrats on your success in my contest...Raul

Matthew Anish

Date: 7/18/2009 4:44:00 PM

Nice anthropomorphic poem! Well done haiku are a joy and you did it well. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Charlene Bird

Date: 7/11/2009 8:31:00 PM

Yes, alot of the land is thristy indeed Sue, I was driving along highway 35 the other day and how sad to see all those cornfields brown and dead, my heart just ached for the farmers who put all their hard work and sweat into planting this year. Good luck again in the contest. Great Haiku!

James Fraser

Date: 7/11/2009 4:42:00 PM

Wanting Haiku Sue, all the best in Raul's contest>>James

Yoni Dvorkis

Date: 7/10/2009 7:50:00 AM

This is interesting Sue. I hate to put a darker spin on this but when you call this tree a 'spirit' I get the impression that the poor thing waited too long in a drought:(:(

Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 7/7/2009 3:22:00 PM

This is excellent. I just finished reading a poetry book by Mary Oliver with the same title of "Thirst." It's an excellent read. I like the essence of this poem, which reminds me of the book. Great job! ~Joseph

Abe Lopez

Date: 7/7/2009 10:07:00 AM

Great haiku sue. The ground here in Oklahoma also needs the rain......... good job!

Farah Chamma

Date: 7/5/2009 10:26:00 PM

A great haiku Sue, it holds much truth and beauty Always, Farah

Date: 7/3/2009 11:19:00 AM

I really like the opening and closing lines in this one. Much to think about here. Good luck in the contest. Have a wonderful holiday weekend. Karen

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/3/2009 9:24:00 AM

Such a vivid image you paint, Sue, using personification to bring life to the elm's spirit! This is a great haiku and I wish you well in the contest. I don't do well with haikus, so I marvel at your ability to say so much in three lines. Great work! Love from long-winded Carolyn

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/3/2009 7:10:00 AM

You bring the picture to life....a lovely, unusual twist of personifcation to the elm! Great job, Sue! ~ Carrie

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 7/3/2009 1:23:00 AM

BEAUTIFUL PICTURE--charma

Raul Moreno

Date: 7/2/2009 10:26:00 PM

Thanks for supporting my contest Sue...Raul