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Written For Dilly Dally's Album Cover Prompt The Kill by 30 Seconds To Mars

A blood-dipped letter lies before me, Wrapped in moth-ridden silk, Written by your ghastly fingers. The cold of another bleak fortnight settles in, While crimson-eyed ravens rest upon creaking window sills. Stoking the fire, umbers rise and dissipate before me, Painting prophetic warnings in the air, As the distorted ticking of clocks chimes tensely, Repeating the same hour—two a.m. A crisp chill shoots up my spine, I wrap myself tighter in your charcoal shawl, Reaching for the last of the firewood you chopped. Placing it in the hearth, I now know it's time. Removing the silk, I cast it into the flames, Peeling back three wax skull seals. I open the fateful envelope, The curse you unknowingly wrote into existence. Placed upon me, it rests in my weeping hands— One cataclysmic night was all it took, For our destruction, Your soul claimed by the nether, And mine bound within a perpetual loop of despair forevermore.

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Date: 4/4/2025 6:55:00 AM
Ah grumpy, so good to see you place high in this contest of dillys, as she is not an easy judge just like you! Lol! I absolutely love the dark diction and metaphors and creative nature of your word weaving here! From the opening till the end! I really felt the lines "I open the fateful envelope, The curse you unknowingly wrote into existence. Placed upon me, it rests in my weeping hands"gosh I resonate with those lines so deeply! This is a new fave for me! Congratulations on your well deserved win! Im so excited i got place on top in a dilly contest! As she is very honest! Yeay! Sending you light always
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/4/2025 6:59:00 AM
Thank you Ink. It's great to see you place along with me. Being honest I write so much I forgot most of the lines you mentioned. Lol
Date: 4/3/2025 2:39:00 PM
Great poem that works as a standalone, as the opening to a story or indeed as an ekphrasis. Strong language choices that made this stand out from the start. Congratulations on your placement :)
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Date: 4/3/2025 4:33:00 PM
Thank you so much. I enjoyed the prompt immensely. I have a hyper fixation with music so this was perfect.
Date: 3/11/2025 11:23:00 PM
A dark poem, Sara, sure to place high:)
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/3/2025 4:32:00 PM
Thank you very much.
Date: 3/10/2025 1:16:00 PM
You had me at the first line, Sara Jama. Then the image of crimson-eyed ravens, have I in my memoirs of charcoal tears dripping from mine. Many nights i've strayed upon the outdoors, the heartbroken realms, looped eternally! This curse brings forth poetic justice! She is a bad mama Jama, Ole` entrada magnifico ~ Anaya
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Sara Jama
Date: 3/10/2025 4:00:00 PM
Thank you very much for reading my poetry and the thoughtful feedback. I appreciate the support. Ravens are my favourite birds besides Crows so I tend to include them occasionally in my writing.

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