Thicker Than Water

I pushed at the open door,there was no sound,no noise,just darkness all around.Dust filtered my nostrils,a mustiness of lost years inhabited my senses.A loose floorboard creaked as I headed for the stairwell,the aroma of her Chanel provoked memories of my living hell.A tear of self-pity congealed in the dirt as I switched on the light."Hello son,...I knew you'd be back...He's gone..."
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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March 4, 2010 at 5:09 PM
And we are left hanging, waiting for the rest. congratulations Brian well done.....Margaret
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March 2, 2010 at 1:27 PM
Hey Brian, Congratulations on another win in the contest! ....Jimmy
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March 1, 2010 at 5:26 PM
Dear Brian, my congratulations on your wonderful win in the contest!! Peace, Audrey
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March 1, 2010 at 10:16 AM
Wow...I can't wait for the book to come out. Congratulations Brian. Well done.
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March 1, 2010 at 9:20 AM
Congratulations on your win in ARPoet's "Act One Scene One" Contest ~Brian~. Love, Carol
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March 1, 2010 at 5:34 AM
Certainly leaves me wanting to know what next - congratulations
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March 1, 2010 at 12:37 AM
It is time for the final curtain call and you are standing tall on stage! Congratulations Brian, for your 2nd place win in the Rambling Poet’s “Act I, Scene I” poetry contest with this sad prose. Enjoy the limelight! You deserve it. Lovingly, Dane Ann
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February 28, 2010 at 10:00 PM
Congratulations on second place Brian. Very deep poem and wonderful read. Blessings, Connie
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February 28, 2010 at 8:38 PM
Wow! Congratulations on your win in Constance's contest. See you backstage!!! :)Love, Iolanda
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February 28, 2010 at 7:04 PM
Congrats Brian on your second place win in Constance's contest.. a worthy write and a wonderful win for u to enjoy .. so enjoy.. luv.. Linda-Marie "Sweetheart" of P.S.
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February 28, 2010 at 6:08 PM
Great work, Brian! I want the story to continue, it captivates the reader in this very first few sentences! Well deserved win!! Congratulations on your 2nd place! ~ Love, Carrie
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February 28, 2010 at 5:17 PM
Congratulations on a second place win with this wonderful poem.. I really wanted to know what happened in act 2
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February 7, 2010 at 1:02 PM
Amazing Brian. God Bless Phyl
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February 7, 2010 at 11:12 AM
This was a great one that needs a sequel for we are all in suspence. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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February 7, 2010 at 8:20 AM
Ingenious from a genius .. prose poetry is another form I trod lightly to write ... but have tried to in entering the Act 1 Scene 1 contest with Museum... good luck if u entered this ... luv.. Linda-Marie..
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February 7, 2010 at 4:44 AM
The imagery evokes so many "between the line" thoughts....very captivating! Beautiful Brian!
Palli Avatar
February 7, 2010 at 1:21 AM
excellent write
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February 7, 2010 at 12:17 AM
I enjoyed the imagery of a "tear congealed in the dirt" in this poem Brian. Great writing. Aloha, Connie
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