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*And they came to Elim where there were twelve springs and seventy palm trees and they camped there near the water.* After the red sea, after the red sea… departing from its great depths, leaving the death of Pharaoh’s men, well-oiled chariots underneath… they're all wet. they’re all wet. Great sound of Israelites. Commotion of the sights. Nostrils of the Creator King; imagination remains. The kids in awe, “Did you see that!? I can’t believe that happened!” their wrist revolutions left and right, relive the might. Their kissers - uttersome wind. Parents hush them. A bit frightened. Who is this God…they thought they knew. This really is the God of their ancestors, of Abraham, Isaac, and Jacob. Still… They arrived at a place of discomfort. Thirst suffers…tongue and roof parched. three days in the desert, they have not found water…constantly tested - will they believe…will they believe? But they, not unlike us, love to complain. When comfort is outside their brain… they become most forgetful…they rely upon their senses — we do too!!! In Shur, grumbling, rumbling of cries, “What are we to drink?” Like little children, they didn’t know. Like little children, they were not grown. The water they did find, was bitter - so were they…they missed the whips of Egypt- at least they’d get their share of bread and water. God in His mercy exchanged bitter for sweet, and his sheep drank until they hurt no more. There God tested them with these words: *“If you listen carefully to the voice of the Lord your God and do what is right in his eyes, if you pay attention to his commands and keep all his decrees, I will not bring on you any of the diseases I brought on the Egyptians, for I am the Lord, who heals you. And they came to Elim where there were twelve springs and seventy palm trees and they camped there near the water.* 9/28/2021 Free verse narrative *From Exodus 15:22-27 portions directly taken from the NIV are between asterisks. Elim is pronounced ay-leem From Matthew Poole’s commentary: Palm trees were both pleasant for their shade, and refreshing for their sweet fruit. Thus the Israelites are obliged and encouraged to the obedience commanded, by being put into better circumstances than they were under in their last station.

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Date: 10/1/2021 12:20:00 PM
I really like that you added this "Like little children, they didn’t know. Like little children, they were not grown." We are so much like little children when we are learning.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/1/2021 2:43:00 PM
Thank you, Caren!
Date: 9/30/2021 1:17:00 AM
Nice take on the Biblical incident, Kim, many times we too complain, my dad often reminds me of Manna:)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/30/2021 4:23:00 AM
Sounds like a great dad! :)
Date: 9/29/2021 11:27:00 PM
They saw miracles and did not have faith. Great poem. Hugs
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/30/2021 4:23:00 AM
Thank you so much, Victor! Hugs ~ Kim
Date: 9/29/2021 7:46:00 PM
Wow, This is powerful poetry, Kim. Love how you adapt verses from the bible, and bring them to life.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/29/2021 8:07:00 PM
Thank you so much, Harry!

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