They Are the Sun

They are the sun--
Hurting you with but a look--
Bewitching as the red rays of the morning dawn.
With only a glance Cupid is your victor--
Many times the better of even the mighty Zeus--
Alas so painful is their beauty...
So hypnotizing...
They are a slayer of men and women alike.
For so powerful be their attraction that like the Sirens of old
To linger upon would be thy doom--
A gift from the gods...a gift of Aphrodite...
And a curse of Fantasia,
Gigantomastia

                             
                               10/23/'13
                               Gigantomastia: They are the sun

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 11/6/2013 12:01:00 AM
don't understand this one.... you need to add some flow in here... especially, cause you are talking about beauty and Gods... don't know where the hurt comes in... anyways... i think you should remove the second line... you don't need it.... laterz...PD
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Gabe Shelly
Date: 11/6/2013 5:06:00 PM
Need to look up the term gigantomastia, but I still appreciate the criticism, gabe.
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