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These bare walls

On these bare walls there once hung artwork that was picked by you, which you'd then picked over, leaving only a needlepoint your mother made for our wedding and a picture an alcoholic friend gave you of a bear How ironic now, it seems, they're not so bare since I've hung a painting of dancing bears on the bare wall where I took down the needlepoint and a butterfly, in the bare spot you left by the front door

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Date: 10/27/2014 8:42:00 AM
I give it a seven, David. Very well composed poem. Good imagery, and a great expression of an experience all too common in today's world of accepted lack of commitment.
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David Brown
Date: 10/27/2014 10:23:00 PM
Thank you for the kind words Cona, I look forward to reading your work as well
Date: 9/6/2014 11:24:00 AM
David -dancing bears and butterflies: I think joy, happiness, light heartedness, freedom and transformation-lovely and simply put. :-) Christine
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David Brown
Date: 9/8/2014 11:48:00 AM
Thank you Christine :)
Date: 8/30/2014 4:56:00 AM
Beautiful and sad....Lovely David. That ending...the butterfly signifying her departure. Thank you for sharing this.
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David Brown
Date: 8/30/2014 1:25:00 PM
Thank you Eileen...yes, the butterfly signifies so much
Date: 8/29/2014 11:37:00 PM
I enjoyed this. Nice combination of sad and funny. Kindly, Daniel.
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David Brown
Date: 8/30/2014 1:00:00 AM
Thank you Daniel, I look forward to reading some of your work