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There's No Joy In Joyriding

I brush snow from the granite headstone to reveal
your name, forever etched in words of burnished gold

Your death
hit me as hard
as the joy rider
who used a stolen car
like a battering ram
mowing you down
on your way to school
My heart is broken

I can’t come to terms
with losing my only son
I’m in deep mourning…
will my sorrow ever end
I guess only time will tell

Tanka 5,7,5,7,7

FICTION POEM
For Let's Mix It Up Poetry Contest

Sponsored by Constance La France

10/19/21

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Constance La France November 4, 2021 at 2:34 PM Jan, impressive write and congratulations on your win in my Let's Mix It Up Contest, I like the image ~ love and serenity _Constance

Paula Goldsmith November 2, 2021 at 8:37 AM WOW!!! Congratulations on your sad/touching~~story/win. It is something one never gets over. The hurt/pain is forever. Have a blessed autumn day with your win...............

Beata Agustin November 1, 2021 at 8:27 PM Congrats! Thanks for sharing this muse filled with wisdom on facing a grim reality with hope, and faith in the Lord. God bless you.

Susan Ashley October 31, 2021 at 4:01 PM Dear Jan, your potent and poignant imagery portrays a mother’s heart tortured by grief. Vivid and intense pain spills from your gifted pen. Congratulations for your excellent win in Constance’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Sam Kauffman October 29, 2021 at 10:12 AM Heartbreaking and soul rending Jan! Your words have left an indelible mark on my spirit. This is so well done and shows the breadth of your writing. Congratulations says she with tears in her eyes.

Lindsay Laurie October 23, 2021 at 9:03 PM Hello Jan ... even though you state fiction, to too many it's a cold hard fact; but they recover I don't know - thanks again Jan - Lindsay

Linda Alice Fowler October 21, 2021 at 10:04 AM Impressive and powerful Jan. Not your usual carefree style ;)

Mark Koplin October 20, 2021 at 7:39 AM That was mighty powerful, nice work Jan! Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:34 AM I can dig deep and serious some times but as you know i prefer humour any day:-) hugs jan xx

Mike Gentile October 20, 2021 at 3:29 AM I'm so glad it's fiction for you Jan and your heart wrenching write is so real for others. Senseless death is even more difficult to comprehend! Great writing!! Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:33 AM Thanks Mike, joy riding is a ridiculous name as is 'ecstasy ' which killed my son's two friends (brothers) :-) hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar October 20, 2021 at 2:18 AM Glad it's fiction, know you were a bit under the weather. Great write. Hugs Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:32 AM thanks Victor its been a tough time for sure, mum is fine now and i am almost there:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso October 19, 2021 at 10:57 PM Ok the previous was a serious comment, now for the humor one! Joy Riding is fine as long as it never leaves the bedroom!!! Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:31 AM ha ha ha love it

Arthur Vaso October 19, 2021 at 8:22 PM Very heartfelt! Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:31 AM Thanks Art , a serious poem for a change but it's not bad for a poop poet is it lol-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Lawrence October 19, 2021 at 6:25 PM Jan, So intense and pulsating with pain. I know this is a fiction, but you described the loss so vividly and profoundly. Best of luck in the contest. Big hugs, Susan :) Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:30 AM Thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Darlene De Beaulieu October 19, 2021 at 3:48 PM Hello Jan, good luck in the contest. it is sad to lose a love one husband or son or daughter. that pain lingers longer. Hugs. Darlene De Beaulieu October 20, 2021 at 10:15 AM Hello Jan, Your welcome . Enjoy your day. Hugs. Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:29 AM Thanks Darlene:-) hugs Jan xx

Regina Mcintosh October 19, 2021 at 3:45 PM So sad. God bless you Jan. Love, Gina Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:29 AM Thanks Regina, fiction for me but sad reality for others:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer October 19, 2021 at 1:39 PM very touching and so realistic, jan! best of luck in the contest... Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:26 AM Thanks Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues October 19, 2021 at 11:49 AM I don’t know that anyone recovers…forever changed. Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:26 AM Thanks Kim I can't begin to imagine the pain of losing a child:-) hugs Jan xx

Tony Hargreaves October 19, 2021 at 11:16 AM Hi Jan. So terribly sad. I can't imagine how much that cuts you up. Best wishes. Take care. God bless. Tony Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:25 AM Thanks Tony:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham October 19, 2021 at 10:46 AM A tragedy you often hear about Jan, shame the punishment doesn't fit the crime. Tom Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:25 AM I agree Tom, they get locked up for a shot time, the parents get a life sentence:-( hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta October 19, 2021 at 10:21 AM Frozen tears do not console the many victims of foolishness. Good luck, Jan! Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 8:24 AM Thanks Rico:-) hugs Jan xx