There's a River

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5/26/2025 for Choose a Line 2 Poetry Contest sponsored by Joseph May

"There's a river meandering through the mind." Follow it and leave the world behind. Don't be in such a rush. Hear a nightingale. See a thrush. There are many things to find. The space inside the head is not confined. All things are sweetly intertwined. Sipping ice-cold lemonades, Annette, the neighbor girl in braids - such memories, by the riverside, enshrined. I will stroll by its grassy banks so free, skipping and whistling to eternity, knowing I can never be wrong, with a feeling in my heart, so strong, I'll see the river float into the sea, and, one day, you'll be together with me.

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/26/2025 2:44:00 PM

David, wonderful flowing rhymes that match the flow of a river. This poem speaks of childhood and hope for the future! BTW, my given name is Annette and, As a child I wore my hair in braids! Now that time takes me back a few years! This poem has a wonderful cadence enhanced by the way you have structured the words! Enjoyed this very much for a number of reasons:) Blessings! Best wishes for the contest!!

David Crandall
Date: 5/26/2025 3:10:00 PM

Thanks Sam/Annette! There was a real little girl named Annette who lived 4 houses down and had braids. I think one reason she keeps popping up in poems is that I like the name Annette. Also, she had pretty honey colored hair, and she wore it in braids, which seems to remind of innocent childhood days.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/26/2025 12:44:00 PM

Lovely in so many ways!

David Crandall
Date: 5/26/2025 3:10:00 PM

Thanks Kim!