The Wind of Autumn

In the night
The autumn roars-
Blowing leaves
To my front door-
Begging me
To let them in-
To save them from
The cruel wind-
That tore them from
Their mother’s’ 
Loving limbs-
As helplessly
She stands by –
For with roots
She is tied –
Naked-
Empty arms
Reaching to the sky-
Watching
As her children die-
As 
One by one
The
Leaves
Keep
Falling
D 

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Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Thomas Avatar
December 8, 2008 at 1:31 PM
I really love this poem as I adore seasonal poetry, and this one is so visually compelling and stark (like the mother tree!). Love the form of the ending too. Really wonderful! ~Juliane
Bickerstaffe Avatar
November 13, 2008 at 10:28 PM
Hi Lainie! Superb construction, flow and imagery... Well done indeed!! Best wishes, Keith
Austin Avatar
October 26, 2008 at 6:53 AM
Your usual excellence, Lanie, but, on the other hand, that twiggly mother seems, stoically, to accept nature, standing upright and horrifically proud! Not a criticism, just a musing. Love, daver
Mason Avatar
October 22, 2008 at 6:40 PM
Awesome!! Beautifully done and I love the unique perspective here!!
Bristow Avatar
October 19, 2008 at 11:58 AM
this is beautiful!
Ahmad Avatar
October 13, 2008 at 3:07 AM
DOWN........wow! it's cool... I felt thru your words that imagination really has no bounds!
White Avatar
October 12, 2008 at 9:20 AM
there is a picture formed in my mind as I read this write, great visual, take care D-nyce
Mckenzie Avatar
October 7, 2008 at 12:45 PM
Excellent write great feeling and imagery I love the cleverly done last line too, wonderful write its going to my favorites!!!! Laura :)
Strand Avatar
October 7, 2008 at 5:21 AM
Liked the final touch Elaine.Rgds Brian & thanks for your comments.My lates contest id for the 'fulton' form see my guideline there.
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October 6, 2008 at 3:51 PM
The design of the last word ends this poem with artistic flair. Nice use of personification for a creative write. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and for your kind words regarding my poem. Keep on writing my friend! Karen
Winter Avatar
October 6, 2008 at 3:39 PM
Lainie, you are the Queen of Personification. This is a wonder. Absolutely bringing the season to life with your magic. Awesome write! Love, Shar
Kelly Avatar
October 6, 2008 at 9:18 AM
Elaine , this piece is really 1st class , with superb descriptve quality ....
Samarpan Avatar
October 6, 2008 at 8:31 AM
beautiful and thought provoking. a neat peace indeed.
Richards Avatar
October 6, 2008 at 7:13 AM
This was wonderful to read. Such imagination and almost makes one sad to see the leaves falling off the trees in our own yard! Good job! ~Carrie
Lakhera Avatar
October 6, 2008 at 7:01 AM
Hello Elaine, this was just superb. Left me stunned for a while. I can relate it to so many things. Great use of personification here. Love, Chitra
Huscroft Avatar
October 6, 2008 at 5:38 AM
lovely language, poignant imagery, nicely sustained metaphor ,"Naked- Empty arms" interesting use of form and clever and subtle rhymes make this poem really special. I have enjoyed reading your work, thank you..
Jordan Avatar
October 6, 2008 at 3:29 AM
Elaine this is just excellent in every way - Outstanding is the only way to describe your use of this form - God Bless
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