The Will

When I am gone When no more I deface the whitest page With scrawls Will you keep my words as my total wage Withdrawn from life's bank? I have nothing else to leave Indigent all my life Invested nothing but my love Imparted through my words. I give you all. Let no silence or blindness break it Little fragile flower Lean your tongue against it Ladening taste with desires Love templed in a tender tropic song.

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Jo Hayton

Date: 4/5/2009 2:31:00 PM

This is just truely amazing L'nass, i just love the last line, and how you bring it to the reader, 'Love templed in a tender tropic song',, absolutely wonderful, thankyou so very very much for your comments on my last poem, I am still in tears, from your kind kind words and comparison to Dylan Thomas, I still cannot read those words without crying.. Thankyou thankyou... love jo xxx

Pawlu Pascarawlu

Date: 3/31/2009 5:36:00 AM

Excellent writing and wonderfully described, all the best L'nass and thanks for your comments.

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 3/24/2009 1:17:00 PM

Dear L'nass, A Beautiful variation of Acrostic Poetry I bow to YOUR POETIC GENIUS ALWAYS...HG -- L'nass Thank-YOU for YOUR Gracious Comment on "Broken Heart" It is actually 3 POEMS in 1 Read left side then right side Finally both togrther ALWAYS...HG

Deirdre Omaidin

Date: 3/24/2009 9:07:00 AM

Congratulations on such a heartfelt and meaningful acrostic. You write so much beautiful poetry, cellebrate it and be proud of it. As regards worldly possessions, all the richest people in the world have, at the end of their days is 6' X 6', Thanks for such kind comments on my haikus. Regards: Déirdre Ó Maidín

Iolanda Scripca

Date: 3/22/2009 1:08:00 PM

Let no silence or blidness break it !!! I agree. Clever use of this poetic format. Thank you for your comment on my The Spring And I. Love, iolanda

Christina Jackson

Date: 3/22/2009 11:35:00 AM

omg! that was such a good poem!..i don't know how to say all those fancy words to compliment it properly....but that was GOOD...=)

Date: 3/21/2009 4:56:00 PM

Nice use of alliteration and creative use of the acrostic form with a unique variation. Nice way to provide interest. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Keep on writing! Karen

Autumn Rose Wood

Date: 3/21/2009 11:10:00 AM

Totally unexpected and lifechanging. Your talent is wisely "invested." Love your use of alliteration and the acrostic form. Thanks for posting this poem.

John Robert Bones

Date: 3/21/2009 2:50:00 AM

hi there ur words of encouragement are helpful thank you

K K Iloduba Jnr

Date: 3/20/2009 5:05:00 PM

love the way the opening line began.it is scented.tnx for ur commentary on midnight lady.

John Robert Bones

Date: 3/20/2009 3:33:00 PM

hi thank u for ur kind words my friend from john

Jo Hayton

Date: 3/20/2009 2:41:00 PM

This is really wonderful L'nass, I just adore the line 'When no more I deface the whitest page'... The whitest pages need to be defaced by absolutely inspiring writers like you...

Jay Loveless

Date: 3/20/2009 2:08:00 PM

I dont know what to say to this but i had to write something...nice job...i really like this its powerful and sweet and...well like i said i cant find just quite the perfect words i would like.... ~jese

David Smalling

Date: 3/20/2009 10:38:00 AM

You are a very prolific writer, my friend, how do you find so many appropriate words for all your feelings? Your poems leave me drunk with their texture and beauty, and I am a Christian ... I am not supposed to get drunk so often (laugh). Indeed your poetry is all Love templed in a tender tropic song. God bless you

Christopher Higgins

Date: 3/20/2009 7:08:00 AM

Read your soup mail when you can.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/20/2009 6:51:00 AM

The "will" you leave, your poetry, is worth far more than money, Shango. This is a cleverly structured, unique acrostic that is not confined by the first letters in each line. It is always a delight to read your work. Love, Carolyn

Amy Swanson

Date: 3/20/2009 6:05:00 AM

Beautiful acrostic and very originally done, our words are the true life and love we give to others, such a wonderful message in this word art you have created. Thank you for honoring me with your beautiful comments on "Death of a Dream", it meant a lot. :) Have a wonderful weeked and be blessed. Love, Amy

Sangam Giri

Date: 3/19/2009 11:31:00 PM

simply loved it

Robin L. Gass

Date: 3/19/2009 4:29:00 PM

This is a very beautiful Acrostic. I have never seen it done this way before. Very creative work. Love is the most wonderful thing we can give and receive. Excellent poetry! Thank you for your thoughtful comment! Love, Robin

Elaine George

Date: 3/19/2009 3:20:00 PM

Dear L' nass, This is a masterful Acrostic poem - very touching and moving. I apologize for taking so long to respond to your very kind comments on my sonnet 'The Rose and the Thorn' - I have been away from the soup for awhile working on a novel . Elaine (Lainie)

Christopher Higgins

Date: 3/19/2009 1:37:00 PM

This a masterful write that just dug deep..investing nothing but love speaks volumes..your writes are always captivating and or on another level...great writing from the Shango!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/19/2009 10:20:00 AM

So fantastic! fantasmegorical! yet, for all the high quality of the verse I KNOW you are valued for yourself as a soul; do not undervalue you!!!! Ma's nagging now, sorry. Light & Love

James Marshall Goff

Date: 3/19/2009 6:59:00 AM

very cool!! L'naas! I think we all are feelin' it! great work! love the last line!!!! Jim

Hana Ryusaka

Date: 3/19/2009 6:40:00 AM

This poem is just beautiful. I love the last stanza especially -the images you evoke. ¨Lean your tongue against it Ladening taste with desires...¨ Thank you for your encouraging comment on Only You.

Frank F. Atanacio

Date: 3/19/2009 6:05:00 AM

wow wonderfully done-- another good read a gem