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The Will

When I am gone
When no more I deface the whitest page
With scrawls
Will you keep my words as my total wage
Withdrawn from life's bank?

I have nothing else to leave
Indigent all my life
Invested nothing but my love
Imparted through my words.
I give you all.

Let no silence or blindness break it
Little fragile flower
Lean your tongue against it
Ladening taste with desires 
Love templed in a tender tropic song.

Copyright © L'Nass Shango | Year Posted 2009

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Jo Hayton Date: 4/5/2009 2:31:00 PM This is just truely amazing L'nass, i just love the last line, and how you bring it to the reader, 'Love templed in a tender tropic song',, absolutely wonderful, thankyou so very very much for your comments on my last poem, I am still in tears, from your kind kind words and comparison to Dylan Thomas, I still cannot read those words without crying.. Thankyou thankyou... love jo xxx Login to Reply

Pawlu Pascarawlu Date: 3/31/2009 5:36:00 AM Excellent writing and wonderfully described, all the best L'nass and thanks for your comments. Login to Reply

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire Date: 3/24/2009 1:17:00 PM Dear L'nass, A Beautiful variation of Acrostic Poetry I bow to YOUR POETIC GENIUS ALWAYS...HG -- L'nass Thank-YOU for YOUR Gracious Comment on "Broken Heart" It is actually 3 POEMS in 1 Read left side then right side Finally both togrther ALWAYS...HG Login to Reply

Deirdre Omaidin Date: 3/24/2009 9:07:00 AM Congratulations on such a heartfelt and meaningful acrostic. You write so much beautiful poetry, cellebrate it and be proud of it. As regards worldly possessions, all the richest people in the world have, at the end of their days is 6' X 6', Thanks for such kind comments on my haikus. Regards: Déirdre Ó Maidín Login to Reply

Iolanda Scripca Date: 3/22/2009 1:08:00 PM Let no silence or blidness break it !!! I agree. Clever use of this poetic format. Thank you for your comment on my The Spring And I. Love, iolanda Login to Reply

Christina Jackson Date: 3/22/2009 11:35:00 AM omg! that was such a good poem!..i don't know how to say all those fancy words to compliment it properly....but that was GOOD...=) Login to Reply

Date: 3/21/2009 4:56:00 PM Nice use of alliteration and creative use of the acrostic form with a unique variation. Nice way to provide interest. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Keep on writing! Karen Login to Reply

Autumn Rose Wood Date: 3/21/2009 11:10:00 AM Totally unexpected and lifechanging. Your talent is wisely "invested." Love your use of alliteration and the acrostic form. Thanks for posting this poem. Login to Reply

John Robert Bones Date: 3/21/2009 2:50:00 AM hi there ur words of encouragement are helpful thank you Login to Reply

K K Iloduba Jnr Date: 3/20/2009 5:05:00 PM love the way the opening line began.it is scented.tnx for ur commentary on midnight lady. Login to Reply

John Robert Bones Date: 3/20/2009 3:33:00 PM hi thank u for ur kind words my friend from john Login to Reply

Jo Hayton Date: 3/20/2009 2:41:00 PM This is really wonderful L'nass, I just adore the line 'When no more I deface the whitest page'... The whitest pages need to be defaced by absolutely inspiring writers like you... Login to Reply

Jay Loveless Date: 3/20/2009 2:08:00 PM I dont know what to say to this but i had to write something...nice job...i really like this its powerful and sweet and...well like i said i cant find just quite the perfect words i would like.... ~jese Login to Reply

David Smalling Date: 3/20/2009 10:38:00 AM You are a very prolific writer, my friend, how do you find so many appropriate words for all your feelings? Your poems leave me drunk with their texture and beauty, and I am a Christian ... I am not supposed to get drunk so often (laugh). Indeed your poetry is all Love templed in a tender tropic song. God bless you Login to Reply

Christopher Higgins Date: 3/20/2009 7:08:00 AM Read your soup mail when you can. Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 3/20/2009 6:51:00 AM The "will" you leave, your poetry, is worth far more than money, Shango. This is a cleverly structured, unique acrostic that is not confined by the first letters in each line. It is always a delight to read your work. Love, Carolyn Login to Reply

Amy Swanson Date: 3/20/2009 6:05:00 AM Beautiful acrostic and very originally done, our words are the true life and love we give to others, such a wonderful message in this word art you have created. Thank you for honoring me with your beautiful comments on "Death of a Dream", it meant a lot. :) Have a wonderful weeked and be blessed. Love, Amy Login to Reply

Sangam Giri Date: 3/19/2009 11:31:00 PM simply loved it Login to Reply

Robin L. Gass Date: 3/19/2009 4:29:00 PM This is a very beautiful Acrostic. I have never seen it done this way before. Very creative work. Love is the most wonderful thing we can give and receive. Excellent poetry! Thank you for your thoughtful comment! Love, Robin Login to Reply

Elaine George Date: 3/19/2009 3:20:00 PM Dear L' nass, This is a masterful Acrostic poem - very touching and moving. I apologize for taking so long to respond to your very kind comments on my sonnet 'The Rose and the Thorn' - I have been away from the soup for awhile working on a novel . Elaine (Lainie) Login to Reply

Christopher Higgins Date: 3/19/2009 1:37:00 PM This a masterful write that just dug deep..investing nothing but love speaks volumes..your writes are always captivating and or on another level...great writing from the Shango! Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 3/19/2009 10:20:00 AM So fantastic! fantasmegorical! yet, for all the high quality of the verse I KNOW you are valued for yourself as a soul; do not undervalue you!!!! Ma's nagging now, sorry. Light & Love Login to Reply

James Marshall Goff Date: 3/19/2009 6:59:00 AM very cool!! L'naas! I think we all are feelin' it! great work! love the last line!!!! Jim Login to Reply

Hana Ryusaka Date: 3/19/2009 6:40:00 AM This poem is just beautiful. I love the last stanza especially -the images you evoke. ¨Lean your tongue against it Ladening taste with desires...¨ Thank you for your encouraging comment on Only You. Login to Reply

Frank F. Atanacio Date: 3/19/2009 6:05:00 AM wow wonderfully done-- another good read a gem Login to Reply

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