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The White Roses Died With You

You went away breathing death, I couldn't stop you then, Your helplessness stopped my breath, I cried for you, I felt so blue, It's raining tears again, Before the snow melted, you were gone, I froze on seeing you, My white roses wilted on that dawn, There's nothing left, I feel bereft, You were my sister true. 01/01/19 Contest: Rhyme Time-7 Sponsor: Lu Loo

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Line Gauthier

Date: 1/20/2021 2:58:00 PM

Poignant, Jo ~

Joseph May

Date: 1/14/2019 5:31:00 PM

A very touching verse Jo..Congrats on your win..

Sandra Haight

Date: 1/14/2019 4:29:00 PM

So sad, but so well-written, Jo. Congratulations on your First Place win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Joanne Liaw

Date: 1/14/2019 1:49:00 AM

Such a poignant and moving poem. May God comfort you in your grief.

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 1/3/2019 1:08:00 PM

nice piece Jo, real enjoyable read with nice rhyme and good imagery too, blessings, Gordon

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/3/2019 12:02:00 AM

Exquisite poignancy in this lovely poem Jo. Wishing you a wonderful new year! : ) xxoo

Vincent Flannery

Date: 1/2/2019 10:00:00 AM

Very special piece, a beautiful gift to a loved one. Best wishes in all you do this New Year. God Bless.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 1/2/2019 2:33:00 AM

Very touching poem little sister, Jo ! Excellent!

Constance La France

Date: 1/1/2019 10:18:00 PM

Jo, nicely done, and very moving, best of luck in the contest ~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/1/2019 6:22:00 PM

gosh, you made really short lines and I LOVE it this way. It's very easy to read for that reason and also the message is so poignant.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/1/2019 2:05:00 PM

A sad one eloquently expressed.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/1/2019 9:57:00 AM

what an ouchie, jo... spectacular write for new year... have a good one!..huggs

Kelli White

Date: 1/1/2019 9:32:00 AM

God bless you in your time of need

Heidi Sands

Date: 1/1/2019 8:35:00 AM

Very well written and reaches me deeply! Excellent :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/1/2019 8:31:00 AM

Brilliantly written words of sadness. You aced the rhyming pattern in depth of feelings:I cried for you, I felt so blue, It's raining tears again. A moving write, Jo. Ending so touching: I cried for you, I felt so blue, It's raining tears again. You wrote a winning poem. Happy New Year to you Jo.