The Wake

that balmy sky did everything it could to try and draw our attention clouds were discarded, rain postponed we were busy with our final goodbyes fine spirits melded with the past revealing a serious lapse in character the exhaust from a jet plane parted the heavens sending thoughts and eyes skyward personal conflicts nearly eclipsed the sparkle of this one particular star a celestial headstone that on this night shined brighter than the rest

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Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

Date: 5/10/2018 7:54:00 PM

Yeah, I can see what you did here...I loss both my parents in a matter of four years. Wonderful words to describe saying goodbye to a loved one...also very sorry for your loss as well....Take care. MC

Ricky Muse
Date: 5/17/2018 6:31:00 PM

Thanks MC. The passing of a loved one will always inspire me. Thanks for stopping by................peace!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2017 4:26:00 PM

I like how you mixed nature with human reactions here. Some great images, Richard.

Ricky Muse
Date: 10/17/2017 2:43:00 AM

Andrea sometimes my poetry is simply a picture that gets torn apart and then glued back together. Elmer's Glue-All of course. Thanks for the input...............peace!

Paul Callus

Date: 10/14/2017 5:59:00 AM

A burial and heavenly thoughts presented with apt imagery, Richard. That special bright star will always be there for you. Regards // paul

Ricky Muse
Date: 10/14/2017 7:33:00 PM

You are so right Paul. It lets me know he made it to heaven. Thanks for the input.................peace!

Patricia Cresswell

Date: 10/12/2017 4:58:00 PM

I like this piece because it depicts life in reality but uses beautiful terms. There is beauty in everything even goodbyes. Thank you.

Ricky Muse
Date: 10/13/2017 7:19:00 AM

Thanks Pat. This poem was written several days after my father passed away. Thanks again............peace!