The Waiting Sleep

I wait while wandering in empty dreams,

where everyone is lost and dying slow.

And in the distance are, unheard, the screams

of anguished souls I’ll never come to know.

The winds blow hot or cold here, rarely cool.

Leaves flutter out of sight, disintegrate.

Relief, if ever found, is minuscule.

I do not even know for what I wait!

I’m drifting with the leaves as they change hue,

concealed among them as they fall to ground.

And as they crumble, I’ll be crumbling too,

alone (as souls unknown hear not my sound).

And still I roam inside this wait I keep,

unwilling to awaken from this sleep.


posted 3/27/21
N/A in the All Yours (Mar 19) Poetry Contest
judged 3/18/2021
For William Kekaula's  Final 2021 N-A Choice 3 Poetry Contest
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Kauffman Avatar
May 8, 2021 at 9:21 AM
Amazing lines Andrea - waiting inside of a dream. So original and so unique. Congratulations on your win!
Mcintosh Avatar
May 8, 2021 at 5:21 AM
Congrats. Love it. God bless you always. Love, Gina
Alex Avatar
May 7, 2021 at 11:26 PM
Congratulations!
Alex Avatar
May 7, 2021 at 11:25 PM
Congratulations!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
May 7, 2021 at 10:46 PM
Once again, I am loving your slide to a graceful conclusion, Andrea, exceptional execution, my gratitude for your participation truly, and my compliments on your well-deserved placement my friend, Aloha!
Y. Avatar
April 25, 2021 at 9:08 PM
WoW! Andrea, Good to see you get another win with this one. You rock! At writing sonnets. A Sonneteer indeed. Congratulations, my friend, it was well-deserved:-) Alexis
Stathakis Avatar
April 24, 2021 at 8:22 PM
I read your poem a few times. I found it quite absorbing, for it beckoned me to search for deeper meanings. Loved it! Congratulations Andrea!
May Avatar
April 23, 2021 at 12:35 PM
A waiting game in the realm of dreams, Congrats on your win Andrea..
Hamilton Avatar
April 23, 2021 at 10:31 AM
I found this write of yours to be very intriguing Andrea, congrats on another nice win!
Gauthier Avatar
March 30, 2021 at 12:51 PM
Congrats on your POTD, Andrea ~ well done
Lamoureux Avatar
March 25, 2021 at 6:09 AM
An oldie but a goodie. Congrats on POTD. I think I would want to wake up as soon as possible from this dreamscape. Startling imagery Andrea. Hugs Rick.
Krutsinger Avatar
March 23, 2021 at 12:04 PM
Congrats on POTD. Very beautifully done.
Watt Avatar
March 22, 2021 at 10:46 AM
Andrea, I echo Lindsay's comment. Always a pleasure to read your sonnets and observe the vast variety of ideas you write about. This one is one of your darker ones, I wonder when you wrote it and what you were thinking about as you composed these thoughts. It seems to me like an elegy of death as you watch the leaves change color and eventually die. It's just beautiful. Congrats on your POTD selection. I'm always a fan of the QoS.
Michael Avatar
March 21, 2021 at 7:56 AM
Enjoyed it...Congratulations Andrea on POTD.
Laurie Avatar
March 20, 2021 at 6:14 PM
Hello Andrea … you never fail to amaze me with your sonnets. They are wonderful - Lindsay
Devonshire Avatar
March 19, 2021 at 3:27 PM
Maybe we all feel like we're drifting at times, Andrea. Compelling lines about the souls you may never come to know. An interesting and well-composed sonnet! Hugs, Carolyn
Proxenos Avatar
March 19, 2021 at 6:23 AM
Hey Andrea, Congrats. my friend on POTD - truly well deserved. Blessings and hugs Jennifer.
Fenn Avatar
March 18, 2021 at 8:29 PM
This is a great picture of the state of the world. Congrats on your POTD and good luck in the contest.
Dietrich Avatar
March 19, 2021 at 7:12 AM
Hmm, yes, it does rather mirror the state of the world too!!!
Seeker Avatar
March 18, 2021 at 7:25 PM
Eerie dream! Congrats on POTD with this beautifully penned sonnet, Andrea!
Merryman Avatar
March 18, 2021 at 5:07 PM
A beautifully written sonnet, Andrea! Well deserving of POTD. Congrats! Blessings, Kim M
Nicole Avatar
March 18, 2021 at 5:02 PM
"I wait, while everyone is lost and dying slow" Oh my ! Such a sad thought. Your entire poem touches my heart so deeply. This is tender and emotional, all at the same time. Congratulations Andrea, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy
Doll Avatar
March 18, 2021 at 3:13 PM
Andrea, excellent poem and brilliant creativity. Congratulations on POTD for this gem. So well deserved.~ Warren
Lindley Avatar
March 18, 2021 at 3:07 PM
My dear friend, huge congratulations on this wonderful sonnet! Excellent ending verses too, "" And as they crumble, I’ll be crumbling too, alone (as souls unknown hear not my sound). And still I roam inside this wait I keep, unwilling to awaken from this sleep."" A fav-- a jewel and -- God bless..
Lindley Avatar
March 18, 2021 at 4:46 PM
The fav is truly deserved as this is a truly superbly crafted sonnet. I think you should consider writing more sonnets my dear friend as you have a very fine intuition and a great talent for it. God bless..
Dietrich Avatar
March 18, 2021 at 3:42 PM
thanks for the fav. So nice of you.
Hankins Avatar
March 18, 2021 at 2:18 PM
This poem is so good, so touching. Back to say congratulations on POTD.
Romios Avatar
March 18, 2021 at 1:18 PM
Fantastic, Andrea. Pangie KUDOS
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