Eileen Manassian Poet Free verse

The Vortex

Closer and closer to the vortex
I spin wildly, madly 
So out of control
Body and soul
Clutching at anything and everything
Knowing I’m being suctioned

My breathing quickens
My pulse thickens
My body weakens

The vortex draws me nearer
to its core
Turbulent
Strong
OH... SO...STRONG
It pulls me down
It sucks me in

Going down
Down
Down
I’m being devoured
Swallowed up whole
In the vortex
Of your desire
Your swirling
liquid
fire
            ~  h ~
        T ~        ~ e
     vor               you
         ~           ~ 
           te        of 
               ~ ~
                 x

Eileen Manassian


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Casarah Nance June 23, 2016 at 8:59 AM What a ride through the swirl, this is a creative and powerful write. :)

Paul Callus October 3, 2014 at 9:30 AM Did this happen on your way out, all made up and dressed to kill? So hot he could not resist...time was not on your side....but...the vortex was too strong...Oh! what the heck!! Let them wait!!:) // paul

Robert Ludden September 30, 2014 at 10:47 AM very clever! A written onomotopoeia..artfully assembled for us Eileen Manassian September 30, 2014 at 10:48 AM Thank you, Robert. Always good to have a visit from you.

Andrea Dietrich September 29, 2014 at 3:27 PM HOT and SEXY. You go, girl!!! a very clever poem of love. Eileen Manassian September 30, 2014 at 10:48 AM Hot and sexy is nice. Thanks, Andrea! Hugs

Gary Bateman September 28, 2014 at 7:37 AM Eileen, A most wonderful and compelling write!! Your words carried me on in an obvious swirl to the end. This one's a definite "7" in my book!! Enjoyed it immensely!! Eileen Manassian September 28, 2014 at 10:45 AM I'm honored, Gary. Thank you for the lovely post.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 28, 2014 at 4:59 AM Love ur write really Eileen! Unique ideas n expression r impressive ! Great great great! Eileen Manassian September 28, 2014 at 6:09 AM Thank you, Dr Upma....Sometimes our hearts just get out of hand! :) This crazy feeling......is sometimes nice.

Connie Marcum Wong September 28, 2014 at 3:17 AM You took me along with you on this turbulent journey....Loved your special ending Eileen! hugs, Connie Eileen Manassian September 28, 2014 at 6:10 AM CONNIE! So good to see you again! :) Thanks for the visit. The ending....was trying to get that whirlpool effect. Hope it worked out. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux September 28, 2014 at 2:45 AM This is so cool, I love how creative you are. Good night Eileen. Eileen Manassian September 28, 2014 at 6:10 AM Sweet dreams, Richard. See you in a couple of hours. :)

Ken Carroll September 27, 2014 at 7:36 PM Creative and explosive Eileen.. Eileen Manassian September 28, 2014 at 6:12 AM Thank you, Ken.... Will swing by to read one of yours soon! :)

Tim Smith September 27, 2014 at 5:28 PM Yes that is a vortex I would like to be swallowed up in as well...hugs Tim Eileen Manassian September 28, 2014 at 6:13 AM Wouldn't that be just superb! :) Hope all is well with you, Tim. Hugs

Justin Bordner September 27, 2014 at 5:20 PM Mmmmmmm.....lost in a luscious immersion in heated hesitation, a swirling maelstrom of orgasmic vortex, irresitable vortex...you've got my quill movin with this jewel of inescable ecstacy Eileen. Love how creatively passionate your poem's structure is woman! J.A.B. Eileen Manassian September 28, 2014 at 6:15 AM I love being called WOMAN! :) I love being a woman, Justin...There is something so delicate and soft and pretty about women, but also this strength and wild fierceness when the mood is right. Woman...completion of man! Splendid. :) Heated hesitation can drive someone insane...I tried to capture that here. I'm glad you love my work, Justin. The feeling is mutual.