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The Vortex

Closer and closer to the vortex
I spin wildly, madly 
So out of control
Body and soul
Clutching at anything and everything
Knowing I’m being suctioned

My breathing quickens
My pulse thickens
My body weakens

The vortex draws me nearer
to its core
Turbulent
Strong
OH... SO...STRONG
It pulls me down
It sucks me in

Going down
Down
Down
I’m being devoured
Swallowed up whole
In the vortex
Of your desire
Your swirling
liquid
fire
            ~  h ~
        T ~        ~ e
     vor               you
         ~           ~ 
           te        of 
               ~ ~
                 x

Eileen Manassian


Eileen

Copyright © Eileen Manassian | Year Posted 2014

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Casarah Nance Date: 6/23/2016 8:59:00 AM What a ride through the swirl, this is a creative and powerful write. :) Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 10/3/2014 9:30:00 AM Did this happen on your way out, all made up and dressed to kill? So hot he could not resist...time was not on your side....but...the vortex was too strong...Oh! what the heck!! Let them wait!!:) // paul Login to Reply

Robert Ludden Date: 9/30/2014 10:47:00 AM very clever! A written onomotopoeia..artfully assembled for us Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 9/30/2014 10:48:00 AM Thank you, Robert. Always good to have a visit from you.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/29/2014 3:27:00 PM HOT and SEXY. You go, girl!!! a very clever poem of love. Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 9/30/2014 10:48:00 AM Hot and sexy is nice. Thanks, Andrea! Hugs

Gary Bateman Date: 9/28/2014 7:37:00 AM Eileen, A most wonderful and compelling write!! Your words carried me on in an obvious swirl to the end. This one's a definite "7" in my book!! Enjoyed it immensely!! Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 9/28/2014 10:45:00 AM I'm honored, Gary. Thank you for the lovely post.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 9/28/2014 4:59:00 AM Love ur write really Eileen! Unique ideas n expression r impressive ! Great great great! Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 9/28/2014 6:09:00 AM Thank you, Dr Upma....Sometimes our hearts just get out of hand! :) This crazy feeling......is sometimes nice.

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 9/28/2014 3:17:00 AM You took me along with you on this turbulent journey....Loved your special ending Eileen! hugs, Connie Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 9/28/2014 6:10:00 AM CONNIE! So good to see you again! :) Thanks for the visit. The ending....was trying to get that whirlpool effect. Hope it worked out. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/28/2014 2:45:00 AM This is so cool, I love how creative you are. Good night Eileen. Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 9/28/2014 6:10:00 AM Sweet dreams, Richard. See you in a couple of hours. :)

Ken Carroll Date: 9/27/2014 7:36:00 PM Creative and explosive Eileen.. Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 9/28/2014 6:12:00 AM Thank you, Ken.... Will swing by to read one of yours soon! :)

Tim Smith Date: 9/27/2014 5:28:00 PM Yes that is a vortex I would like to be swallowed up in as well...hugs Tim Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 9/28/2014 6:13:00 AM Wouldn't that be just superb! :) Hope all is well with you, Tim. Hugs

Justin Bordner Date: 9/27/2014 5:20:00 PM Mmmmmmm.....lost in a luscious immersion in heated hesitation, a swirling maelstrom of orgasmic vortex, irresitable vortex...you've got my quill movin with this jewel of inescable ecstacy Eileen. Love how creatively passionate your poem's structure is woman! J.A.B. Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 9/28/2014 6:15:00 AM I love being called WOMAN! :) I love being a woman, Justin...There is something so delicate and soft and pretty about women, but also this strength and wild fierceness when the mood is right. Woman...completion of man! Splendid. :) Heated hesitation can drive someone insane...I tried to capture that here. I'm glad you love my work, Justin. The feeling is mutual.