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the veranda

on the veranda sounds of raindrops, twirling leaves scurrying squirrels gunshots in the distance boom - deer to decimate garden
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Kerr Avatar
November 26, 2023 at 12:57 AM
Hi Sara, Congratulations on your podium placement with this extraordinary Tanka. You have employed a peerless array of invigorating descriptive techniques at the heart of your entry. Hats off Warm wishes Howard
Kendrick Avatar
November 26, 2023 at 4:41 AM
Thank you, Howard, for dropping by with a nice comment with congratulations. I appreciate the time spent here. Sara K
Evans Avatar
November 24, 2023 at 11:25 PM
What a vivid imagery! Congratulations.
Kendrick Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 5:14 AM
Why, thank you, Marilene. I appreciate you dropping by with congratulations. Sara K
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
November 24, 2023 at 8:05 AM
Very nicely done, Sara. One of our family's country home had a veranda--not a lanai, fame ref. here in Hawaii, not a front/back porch, nor balcony or what have you. No to squirrels and deers, but yes to mongooses and piggy's with pointy tusk we call boars--they don't last long in the thickets or the dinner plate. Aloha, William
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
November 24, 2023 at 2:29 PM
Also, same salting procedures applies to all the animals, and hot rocks go inside the bigger animals. Aloha
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
November 24, 2023 at 2:24 PM
Hints of Rock Salt we call, 'Alaea', is rubbed within the boar's insides, then preheated lava rocks, they're heat retaining piled atop chopped wood and set alaze in an imu/a dugged dirt hole, wood turn to ash, cave-in rocks/usually 3/4 fits inside the boar, atop chicken wire that gets tied and placed in that hole, w/chickens/turkeys/goats/rabbits, etc--but nothing from the sea--voila, Kalua Pig
Kendrick Avatar
November 24, 2023 at 1:57 PM
Thank you, William. Glad that you had a veranda on your country home. Those porches, verandas, balconies or anything like that can be a source of enjoyment. Is boar meat good or does it taste gamey? Your visits always add a special touch. Sara K
Rodrigues Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 7:58 AM
Good one. Much action and the sudden boom… Happy Thanksgiving, Sara!
Kendrick Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 9:27 AM
Kim, Thank you. We are getting rain which is a good thing because it has not been raining much this fall then it is supposed to be a very nice Thanksgiving Day though a little cool but cool is nice. Your visits are always so uplifting. Sara K
Dietrich Avatar
November 18, 2023 at 1:50 PM
this showed the picture so clearly!
Kendrick Avatar
November 18, 2023 at 2:11 PM
Why, your review is so uplifting. I appreciate the visit. Sara K
Fowler Avatar
November 14, 2023 at 10:59 AM
Inspiring imagery Sara. If that gunshot met it's mark and ends up on the hunter's table, we should be thankful for its sacrifice. I like everything about your veranda. :)
Kendrick Avatar
November 14, 2023 at 12:51 PM
Why, thank you, Linda. I am not really into killing of the deer, but they will overrun the area if they are not thinned, and they put meat on some tables. I would prefer to go early in the morning and maybe surprise them and take some pictures. Thanks for all your visits to my pages. Sara K
Goldsmith Avatar
November 13, 2023 at 11:11 AM
A lovey write/picture/story you told in a few words. I love this one. Have a blessed day/week writing away....................
Kendrick Avatar
November 13, 2023 at 1:02 PM
Thank you for the wishes for a blessed week. I needed that blessing. Your visits to my page inspire me. Sara K..
Empress Avatar
November 12, 2023 at 2:41 AM
This is so beautiful! I love the word veranda, i dont see many using it though but you’ve used it here so eloquently in this tanka flowing with such deeply moving imagery, delicate and stunning! “Gunshots in the distance” that line though stood out for me. Always a pleasure reading your work
Kendrick Avatar
November 12, 2023 at 5:35 AM
Why, thank you, IE. It is deer season here in our area. We hear the gunshots from hunters practicing and hunters actually shooting a deer. Our dog hears more than we do and she is terrified. Your visit is always encouraging. Sara
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